It was good Roxie, I liked it! It's pretty interesting that most of us are connected to the café, yet none of us have any idea how similar we are.
Only thing I'd like to note: be careful with moving other people's characters. You said that I had taken the boy who applied into the back to you. I hadn't really planned on doing that, but it works out all the same, so it's not really an issue this time. Just be sure to ask somebody if you want to move their character for something minor, or see if they're okay with doing it for you since you can't be sure what they may have planned on doing.
Wow, I think this template turned out way better than the last one. Aside from the gripes concerning your backstory and skill levels before (which are all good now, thank you), I really like your weapon combination. It's something interesting that you don't really see, a sword in one hand and a claw in the other. It should make for an interesting fighting style. I also like how you actually mentioned the struggle with having to master two weapons, it'll be hard now since it will be twice as much work, but could lead to some very powerful results down the road. Kind of reminds me of an Adept Rogue from the .hack series, only instead of being able to switch between weapon types, Renn instead uses both at once. Cool indeed.
One last thing though Shinra, you are still missing a required item from your template. If I could just ask you to please read through the rules and get that in there, then we can get you posting.