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Dylan went up the Karlis. “Hey we can go to my friend Phil’s place across the dese-“
Karlis cut him off. “The desert? No I can’t risk getting eaten again, at least not anymore today “ He started thinking of it and shuttered trying to imagine it happening again.
“Don’t worry it will work fine, as big as that one slug was he wouldn’t be able to swallow this whole shuttle.” Trying to convince him, Dylan kept his attitude calm.
“Ok” Karlis said. “Aw man I can see inside of those slugs stomachs again already.”
Chapter 19: Back to Phil’s place
Omega returned to the lab to find no one was there. “Soldiers report where are you?” No response, he called again, still nothing. He walked, down the hallway and saw the bigger mess that was caused from earlier. “They must have been found by someone and cured, all my best soldiers gone, a minor set back.”
He walked by and saw a poster on a table nearby. It had pictures of hover bikes and other racing car’s on a track. Reading:
“G.R.C the Grand Racing Circuit, come prove your skills on the track to win great prizes, located in Vrez city, New racers and prizes every week.” And in small print it read. “We are not responsible for any, injuries, cheating and or death in the competition.”
Zero smiled eagerly at the poster. “There would obviously be a lot of people there, which equals more infected victims. Time to call in more of the troops.” He vanished within and instant heading for virus’.
Karlis continues the trail into the city, everything inside the city seems rather too quite. The city was in worse condition now since the virus came, but it seemed like it might have left. They continued on the trail heading out the city.
Minutes later they were out, across the bridge and into the desert. Karlis was shaking like crazy, and his left eye was beginning to twitch.
Brad looked at him, he was starting to feel uncomfortable around him. Cautiously he asked “You ok?”
Karlis’ twitched slowed down but he was still shaking. “Y-yeah I’m uh just…its just cold in here is all.”
He may have been saying he was just cold, but the twitch and the tempature screen near the dashboard saying 72 degrees was telling him otherwise.
Brad smiled trying not to laugh. “Sure it is.”
Karlis was swallowed by the desert slugs so many times, it was a wonder he wasn’t used to it. He was a bit claustrophobic though so that probably answered some it as well.
Mei and Aaron were playing cards.
“Got any three’s?” Aaron asked.
Mei shook her head. “Nope go fish.”
Aaron sigh’s as he reaches for another card, he had about half the stack in his hands. “This game is weak.”
Mei giggled, Dylan looked in her deck and saw she had two three’s. “That’s jive, are you gonna tell him?” Dylan whispered.
“Yeah after the game is over, then I’ll play fair I guess, its just fun messing with him.” Mei said.
About 20 minutes later they were out the desert, approaching where this whole thing started, outside of Shaxdin city. Everything looked the same from when Dylan, Mei and Aaron left. They arrived in the city and Dylan directed Karlis to Phil’s lab. A few more minutes they parked outside the lab and went inside, Dylan was the first one in, the first thing he saw was a mostly white brown spotted dog asleep on the table with Phil with his head on the table next to it drooling as he slept.
Dylan chuckled, he snuck over to Phil, the others watched clueless of what he was doing. He got right behind him and clapped his hands once, yelling. “WAKE UP!”
Phil jumped up out his chair, with dried drool on the side of his mouth startled. He moved his head rapidly from left to right seeing what was going on, when he saw Dylan, Mei, Aaron and 2 others.
“Oh phew I thought you guys were someone else.” Phil said holding his chest breathing hard.
Dylan laughed. “You got some dried drool around your mouth, this is Karlis and Brad Tyrexil.”
Phil: “Did you say Tyrexil?”
Brad: “Yes indeed he did, I’m Tyler’s son, you probably would’ve reconized me without the goatee, and clothes.”
Dylan looked around the room. “Hey where is Miki and Deren, did they leave or something?”
Phil pointed to the capsules against the walls, with Deren and Miki inside.
Dylan ran to the capsules surprised, Mei and Aaron were to shocked to move. “Wha-what happened to them?”
“We had a visitor named Omega, we got rid the virus when we he first visited trying to pretend he was that dog, he took my newest projects Zero’s body, he was a being I thought once finished he could help fight but before I could finish installing the program that would protect him from getting infected Omega came back, took the body and almost took us out.” Phil looked down ashamed. “It’s my fault I shouldn’t have made Zero. Those two will be alright they just need a few more hours to heal.”
Dylan turned around with anger in his eyes. “It’s not your fault you were trying to help, Omega did this so its his, where did he go?”
Dylan went up the Karlis. “Hey we can go to my friend Phil’s place across the dese-“
Karlis cut him off. “The desert? No I can’t risk getting eaten again, at least not anymore today “ He started thinking of it and shuttered trying to imagine it happening again.
“Don’t worry it will work fine, as big as that one slug was he wouldn’t be able to swallow this whole shuttle.” Trying to convince him, Dylan kept his attitude calm.
“Ok” Karlis said. “Aw man I can see inside of those slugs stomachs again already.”
Chapter 19: Back to Phil’s place
Omega returned to the lab to find no one was there. “Soldiers report where are you?” No response, he called again, still nothing. He walked, down the hallway and saw the bigger mess that was caused from earlier. “They must have been found by someone and cured, all my best soldiers gone, a minor set back.”
He walked by and saw a poster on a table nearby. It had pictures of hover bikes and other racing car’s on a track. Reading:
“G.R.C the Grand Racing Circuit, come prove your skills on the track to win great prizes, located in Vrez city, New racers and prizes every week.” And in small print it read. “We are not responsible for any, injuries, cheating and or death in the competition.”
Zero smiled eagerly at the poster. “There would obviously be a lot of people there, which equals more infected victims. Time to call in more of the troops.” He vanished within and instant heading for virus’.
Karlis continues the trail into the city, everything inside the city seems rather too quite. The city was in worse condition now since the virus came, but it seemed like it might have left. They continued on the trail heading out the city.
Minutes later they were out, across the bridge and into the desert. Karlis was shaking like crazy, and his left eye was beginning to twitch.
Brad looked at him, he was starting to feel uncomfortable around him. Cautiously he asked “You ok?”
Karlis’ twitched slowed down but he was still shaking. “Y-yeah I’m uh just…its just cold in here is all.”
He may have been saying he was just cold, but the twitch and the tempature screen near the dashboard saying 72 degrees was telling him otherwise.
Brad smiled trying not to laugh. “Sure it is.”
Karlis was swallowed by the desert slugs so many times, it was a wonder he wasn’t used to it. He was a bit claustrophobic though so that probably answered some it as well.
Mei and Aaron were playing cards.
“Got any three’s?” Aaron asked.
Mei shook her head. “Nope go fish.”
Aaron sigh’s as he reaches for another card, he had about half the stack in his hands. “This game is weak.”
Mei giggled, Dylan looked in her deck and saw she had two three’s. “That’s jive, are you gonna tell him?” Dylan whispered.
“Yeah after the game is over, then I’ll play fair I guess, its just fun messing with him.” Mei said.
About 20 minutes later they were out the desert, approaching where this whole thing started, outside of Shaxdin city. Everything looked the same from when Dylan, Mei and Aaron left. They arrived in the city and Dylan directed Karlis to Phil’s lab. A few more minutes they parked outside the lab and went inside, Dylan was the first one in, the first thing he saw was a mostly white brown spotted dog asleep on the table with Phil with his head on the table next to it drooling as he slept.
Dylan chuckled, he snuck over to Phil, the others watched clueless of what he was doing. He got right behind him and clapped his hands once, yelling. “WAKE UP!”
Phil jumped up out his chair, with dried drool on the side of his mouth startled. He moved his head rapidly from left to right seeing what was going on, when he saw Dylan, Mei, Aaron and 2 others.
“Oh phew I thought you guys were someone else.” Phil said holding his chest breathing hard.
Dylan laughed. “You got some dried drool around your mouth, this is Karlis and Brad Tyrexil.”
Phil: “Did you say Tyrexil?”
Brad: “Yes indeed he did, I’m Tyler’s son, you probably would’ve reconized me without the goatee, and clothes.”
Dylan looked around the room. “Hey where is Miki and Deren, did they leave or something?”
Phil pointed to the capsules against the walls, with Deren and Miki inside.
Dylan ran to the capsules surprised, Mei and Aaron were to shocked to move. “Wha-what happened to them?”
“We had a visitor named Omega, we got rid the virus when we he first visited trying to pretend he was that dog, he took my newest projects Zero’s body, he was a being I thought once finished he could help fight but before I could finish installing the program that would protect him from getting infected Omega came back, took the body and almost took us out.” Phil looked down ashamed. “It’s my fault I shouldn’t have made Zero. Those two will be alright they just need a few more hours to heal.”
Dylan turned around with anger in his eyes. “It’s not your fault you were trying to help, Omega did this so its his, where did he go?”
Thanks for the support I really appreciate it, I noticed I still had a few mistakes grammerwise in this chapter but it will be less once I start checkiing better lol, next chapter will be up either sometime later tonight of tommorrow
Next part up, Tell me if there is anything at all I can improve on I want this story to be the best it can be.
Aaron walked over to the TV that was on the wall and turned it on. Dylan turned to him. “Aaron we need to think where this virus is not watch TV, we could if we had time but we don’t”
Aaron flipped through the channels. Nothing on but commercials and some crummy cartoons.“It helps me to think, you guys have yours, I have mine.”
He kept flipping until he got a flashy man with blonde curled hair in a brown suit.
“Come on down to the racing track, prove your skills, race for prizes, some more self-esteem of what little you have or just to get that one special girl or boy to notice you, located right outside of Vrez city, join if you got the bal- ... I mean guts.” As the man continued talking, they saw Zero walking in the back, Phil was the only one who recognized him.
Phil walked closer to the TV. “That’s Omega using Zero’s body, we have to figure out a way to stop him before he tries to infect any of those people!”
Brad walked up to Phil. “Do you have any weapons we can use against him?”
Phil looked down. “I do but…” Phil didn't want anything bad to happen to his other friends, he hesitated to answer.
Brad: “But what?”
Phil:” When I created Zero I…made him a being called a “Mimic” he can copy the powers or weapons he sees and can double the output of it, he already can use force fields and super strength. You have no idea of what Zero and Omega are capable of doing together.”
Dylan walked over and took out some pulse grenades off the shelves. “We’ll find out when we’re kicking his butt.”
Phil tried to convince Dylan even more, but he was as stubborn as always. Phil was usually a step ahead so he took out a ray gun. “This will neutralize Zero’s powers momentarily but I can’t promise it effecting Omega’s…whatever he can do.”
Brad straightened his hat. “I know where Vrez city is also, after we prepare we can head on out there.”
Phil was a weapon and bio specialist he always had extra things lying around from his “experiments”. “Alright stock up.” He pointed to a room near the corner where the basemen was, they got prepared and in a few minutes were out the door.
As they went to the shuttle Phil came out with them. “Remember anything you guys have he can copy and double it, watch each others back.”
Dylan waved as the hatch was closing. “No worries!”
They blasted off heading for Vrez city.
Chapter 20: Zero meets Nick.
Brad loaded in a map for the shuttle to get to the city manually. Dylan was confused about something so he went up to Brad to ask hoping he would know. He leaned down between the seats Brad and Karlis and looked at Brad about to ask him.
“Hey brad” Dylan said “How come we haven’t seen too many virus’ so far, they all hiding somewhere or something?”
Brad was quite for a second, since he had a hand in creating the virus' he knew there insticts and most things about them. “I’m guessing by now you guys must know how this started, my father made the first few virus’ they were called “anti- virus’” before but long story short in the end one escaped from the leader’s hands and he wanted her back to hopefully join him. Even though its been a year since then, they heard sightings from scouters earlier so Omega and a group of virus’ were sent down here. Melderra was suppose to be a very strong being, they probably have a big group here. That one huge Virus from the city, was not one my father created there is no doubt about it but those ones at the lab were ones I even helped him create, the leader Jin must be making his own versions of virus’”
Vrez city was only a few miles away so it didn’t take them long to get there, as they were going out of the city, it was another mini desert going through.
Karlis never went too far away from his home, he didn't know about Vrez or this desert...which made him even more scared going across it. "How many deserts does this planet have?!"
Within about have an hour they were approaching the city, in the distance they could see a huge racing track right on the side of the city, Vrez looked like a metropolis city and so did the track. They could see how long it was and it even looked intense from the view, twists and turns were all on it. For the city, there were tall skinny buildings mostly with wide tops. They could even see the people flying around in hover cars and other things.
Zero was waiting for the other virus' to get to his destination, so he figured he might have some fun and race. He was in line for the try-outs, there were about 10 other races there too, most of the racers had a “cut-throat” look to them, like they were bikers mostly big and muscular, while others looked like regular city people, except for one boy in the beginning of the line.
The boy walked to the lady in the window. “The R.G.C is not responsible for any injuries you may or may not but most likely will receive during this race.” She said, this woman had a bored look on her face and she looked to be in her mid 30’s. Quite a looker in the face, nice tan skin with slight make-up on and brownish long hair.
The boy smiled. “Mary, do we have to go through this every time?”
“Yeah, if I don’t I could get fired or sued for not telling the victim I mean contestant the right things.” She said.
The boy: “Alright, just put me down as Nick this time.”
Mary:” Ah your real name huh, what happened to D-abyss or Maverick?”
Nick: “I’m not feeling it today ya know.”
Mary smiled and gave him a ticket. Nick took it and walked off. “Thanks, see ya later.”
He was light skinned with glasses, brown eyes, his black fitted hat on backwards, short cut hair, long black vest with a green long sleeved shirt under, with black pants and with white shoes.
He walks up to the glass walls outside that separate the people from the track and racers because of a “accident” that happened to a former fan. While Nick was checking out the track, Zero was checking for any good bodies for his fellow virus soldiers to use.
“These big guys will do good, if they survive the race with me that is.” Zero took the ticket from Mary and walked close to where Nick was. “I can sense one of the class A’s is coming now.” Zero thought to himself.
Nick saw Zero not to far from him, he turned to him and smiled. “Hey my names Nick, are you in the race?”
Zero wasn’t paying attention to Nick too much, but he didn’t want anything messing up so his plan so answered. But he adjusted his voice so only Zero’s voice came out. “Yes, I am. The names Zero by the way.”
Nick: “I’m in too, so I guess we’ll see how good the both of us can race huh?”
Zero looked him in the eyes. “Yeah we will. Im uh…looking forward to it, to see who all is good, my friends will be watching too to see whose the best.”
Dylan and the others were near the line seeing Zero taking a ticket. There were only a few tickets left and no one was getting in line.
The announcer from before popped up on a few floating screens around the city and near the track
“Greetings one and all, the race for today is about to start so I advice everyone to take there rides and get the tickets before someone else does haha. The prize our racers will be competing for are prototype D.S.G’s,Digital sword gloves." Only the gloves were shown, they were black mostly with a computer on off button on the front. The announcer continued. "Fresh from the very scientists hands…literally. And for those who are watching be sure to visit the food stands and for the racers who have already, I feel sorry for your stomachs when the race begins Hahaha.” He cut off the screens, which then cut to more advertisements.
Nick, Dylan and Zero’s eyes lit up seeing the prize. “With those I’d be more unstoppable then what I already am” Zero said.
Then Nick. “Finally something worth the bruises and scars, that last one was a memory.” He rose up his shirt looking at this long scar he had on his stomach. “And I have it all because one of the racers last time had to eat before the race.”
Lastly Dylan. “I’ll tell them I’m racing to get to Omega, but I’m really trying to get that sweet prize.”
Dylan went up and got the last ticket. “Ok I’ll race and see if he tries anything, you guys stay here incase something pops up.”
Mary came on the intercom. “All racers please report to your cars the race will start momentarily.”
“Ok there’s my cue, be back soon guys!” Dylan said.
Aaron walked over to the TV that was on the wall and turned it on. Dylan turned to him. “Aaron we need to think where this virus is not watch TV, we could if we had time but we don’t”
Aaron flipped through the channels. Nothing on but commercials and some crummy cartoons.“It helps me to think, you guys have yours, I have mine.”
He kept flipping until he got a flashy man with blonde curled hair in a brown suit.
“Come on down to the racing track, prove your skills, race for prizes, some more self-esteem of what little you have or just to get that one special girl or boy to notice you, located right outside of Vrez city, join if you got the bal- ... I mean guts.” As the man continued talking, they saw Zero walking in the back, Phil was the only one who recognized him.
Phil walked closer to the TV. “That’s Omega using Zero’s body, we have to figure out a way to stop him before he tries to infect any of those people!”
Brad walked up to Phil. “Do you have any weapons we can use against him?”
Phil looked down. “I do but…” Phil didn't want anything bad to happen to his other friends, he hesitated to answer.
Brad: “But what?”
Phil:” When I created Zero I…made him a being called a “Mimic” he can copy the powers or weapons he sees and can double the output of it, he already can use force fields and super strength. You have no idea of what Zero and Omega are capable of doing together.”
Dylan walked over and took out some pulse grenades off the shelves. “We’ll find out when we’re kicking his butt.”
Phil tried to convince Dylan even more, but he was as stubborn as always. Phil was usually a step ahead so he took out a ray gun. “This will neutralize Zero’s powers momentarily but I can’t promise it effecting Omega’s…whatever he can do.”
Brad straightened his hat. “I know where Vrez city is also, after we prepare we can head on out there.”
Phil was a weapon and bio specialist he always had extra things lying around from his “experiments”. “Alright stock up.” He pointed to a room near the corner where the basemen was, they got prepared and in a few minutes were out the door.
As they went to the shuttle Phil came out with them. “Remember anything you guys have he can copy and double it, watch each others back.”
Dylan waved as the hatch was closing. “No worries!”
They blasted off heading for Vrez city.
Chapter 20: Zero meets Nick.
Brad loaded in a map for the shuttle to get to the city manually. Dylan was confused about something so he went up to Brad to ask hoping he would know. He leaned down between the seats Brad and Karlis and looked at Brad about to ask him.
“Hey brad” Dylan said “How come we haven’t seen too many virus’ so far, they all hiding somewhere or something?”
Brad was quite for a second, since he had a hand in creating the virus' he knew there insticts and most things about them. “I’m guessing by now you guys must know how this started, my father made the first few virus’ they were called “anti- virus’” before but long story short in the end one escaped from the leader’s hands and he wanted her back to hopefully join him. Even though its been a year since then, they heard sightings from scouters earlier so Omega and a group of virus’ were sent down here. Melderra was suppose to be a very strong being, they probably have a big group here. That one huge Virus from the city, was not one my father created there is no doubt about it but those ones at the lab were ones I even helped him create, the leader Jin must be making his own versions of virus’”
Vrez city was only a few miles away so it didn’t take them long to get there, as they were going out of the city, it was another mini desert going through.
Karlis never went too far away from his home, he didn't know about Vrez or this desert...which made him even more scared going across it. "How many deserts does this planet have?!"
Within about have an hour they were approaching the city, in the distance they could see a huge racing track right on the side of the city, Vrez looked like a metropolis city and so did the track. They could see how long it was and it even looked intense from the view, twists and turns were all on it. For the city, there were tall skinny buildings mostly with wide tops. They could even see the people flying around in hover cars and other things.
Zero was waiting for the other virus' to get to his destination, so he figured he might have some fun and race. He was in line for the try-outs, there were about 10 other races there too, most of the racers had a “cut-throat” look to them, like they were bikers mostly big and muscular, while others looked like regular city people, except for one boy in the beginning of the line.
The boy walked to the lady in the window. “The R.G.C is not responsible for any injuries you may or may not but most likely will receive during this race.” She said, this woman had a bored look on her face and she looked to be in her mid 30’s. Quite a looker in the face, nice tan skin with slight make-up on and brownish long hair.
The boy smiled. “Mary, do we have to go through this every time?”
“Yeah, if I don’t I could get fired or sued for not telling the victim I mean contestant the right things.” She said.
The boy: “Alright, just put me down as Nick this time.”
Mary:” Ah your real name huh, what happened to D-abyss or Maverick?”
Nick: “I’m not feeling it today ya know.”
Mary smiled and gave him a ticket. Nick took it and walked off. “Thanks, see ya later.”
He was light skinned with glasses, brown eyes, his black fitted hat on backwards, short cut hair, long black vest with a green long sleeved shirt under, with black pants and with white shoes.
He walks up to the glass walls outside that separate the people from the track and racers because of a “accident” that happened to a former fan. While Nick was checking out the track, Zero was checking for any good bodies for his fellow virus soldiers to use.
“These big guys will do good, if they survive the race with me that is.” Zero took the ticket from Mary and walked close to where Nick was. “I can sense one of the class A’s is coming now.” Zero thought to himself.
Nick saw Zero not to far from him, he turned to him and smiled. “Hey my names Nick, are you in the race?”
Zero wasn’t paying attention to Nick too much, but he didn’t want anything messing up so his plan so answered. But he adjusted his voice so only Zero’s voice came out. “Yes, I am. The names Zero by the way.”
Nick: “I’m in too, so I guess we’ll see how good the both of us can race huh?”
Zero looked him in the eyes. “Yeah we will. Im uh…looking forward to it, to see who all is good, my friends will be watching too to see whose the best.”
Dylan and the others were near the line seeing Zero taking a ticket. There were only a few tickets left and no one was getting in line.
The announcer from before popped up on a few floating screens around the city and near the track
“Greetings one and all, the race for today is about to start so I advice everyone to take there rides and get the tickets before someone else does haha. The prize our racers will be competing for are prototype D.S.G’s,Digital sword gloves." Only the gloves were shown, they were black mostly with a computer on off button on the front. The announcer continued. "Fresh from the very scientists hands…literally. And for those who are watching be sure to visit the food stands and for the racers who have already, I feel sorry for your stomachs when the race begins Hahaha.” He cut off the screens, which then cut to more advertisements.
Nick, Dylan and Zero’s eyes lit up seeing the prize. “With those I’d be more unstoppable then what I already am” Zero said.
Then Nick. “Finally something worth the bruises and scars, that last one was a memory.” He rose up his shirt looking at this long scar he had on his stomach. “And I have it all because one of the racers last time had to eat before the race.”
Lastly Dylan. “I’ll tell them I’m racing to get to Omega, but I’m really trying to get that sweet prize.”
Dylan went up and got the last ticket. “Ok I’ll race and see if he tries anything, you guys stay here incase something pops up.”
Mary came on the intercom. “All racers please report to your cars the race will start momentarily.”
“Ok there’s my cue, be back soon guys!” Dylan said.
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Cool, I'm hoping I can keep it that way, Im almost done with the next chapter but it won't be posted until tommorrow cause do something else right now
Edit: Idk why my signature stuff doesn't come up some times...wierd
Edit: Idk why my signature stuff doesn't come up some times...wierd
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I didn't get the chance to comment ya on msn last night,so i comment here and i have to say that this chapter was rly good too.
Wish it had a bit more details,but i think it's ok the way it is!^^
Wish it had a bit more details,but i think it's ok the way it is!^^
I couldn't really add anything in details for that chapter but i added a few extra things tho they might not be noticeable but there was been a good amount added. Next chapter coming soon, tommorrow morning im afriad. (its 11 pm where i am now on tuesday)
Liked the chapter. Although you need to put more flavour in it. Use of adjectives or... something like that (Never studied the true colors of grammars cause it's more horrifying than two girls one cup)
I might want to put a story of my own (But it's something I've written 1 year ago, now I'm just fixing it. Although it's fuking long I haven't even reached a 1/5 of the story. Maybe 1/8 =.=, but beware, cause it contains seriously nasty (Hell yeah nasty) use of English that most people find difficult to understand.
Since it's 1 year ago, it would take time for me to fix tonnes of mistakes and errors I've made in the story... and of course it's not related to Kingdom Hearts =.=" cause I haven't played the game until two months ago.... So, root for me will ye Maverick?
I might want to put a story of my own (But it's something I've written 1 year ago, now I'm just fixing it. Although it's fuking long I haven't even reached a 1/5 of the story. Maybe 1/8 =.=, but beware, cause it contains seriously nasty (Hell yeah nasty) use of English that most people find difficult to understand.
Since it's 1 year ago, it would take time for me to fix tonnes of mistakes and errors I've made in the story... and of course it's not related to Kingdom Hearts =.=" cause I haven't played the game until two months ago.... So, root for me will ye Maverick?
i shall do that np Xuan there will be also be delay on the chapter until later later tonight
there will be also be delay on the chapter until later later tonight
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I probably could've done better on this but with the details i will edit more in later on but here is what the next chapter is looking like so far:
Brad: “Keep your eyes open!”
Aaron: “And watch out for any sharp turns!”
Dylan: “No worries guys!”
Nick and Zero were getting on their cars. Nicks’ ticket said “number 3” he looked for the car with the “3” on it. The car was a bit thin with completely spherical wheels, long and green with a black strip going down, the pit in the middle with a cover hood and two thin rockets in the back. “Ah, my favorite one.” He stepped up, got into it and started it up.
Zero was number 5 his was more big and bulky looking. It was brown colored, with 4 rockets and 4 regular 32 inch wheels. “This one fits me…I guess.”
Dylan was number 12. All the cars were lined up in a straight line and his was at the other side. His was a hover bike, it was red mostly and brown near the tires and hood. Dylan hoped on and saw Zero getting on his too, before one of the big “cut throat” racers got on the one next to him. Dylan turned his head to the track as soon as the dude got on, the racer looked at Dylan.
Tauntingly the racer spoke to him in a English accent. “Heh since when did they let little kids get on the tracks?”
Dylan looked back at him, this guy was pretty big compared to Dylan, he had a black vest with a ripped shirt under, bald with a 5 o’clock shadow, and brown cargo pants, Dylan then saw something that he could use to really make him mad, or worse. “I’m not the one with a flower tattoo on my arm. “
The racer growled and pulled his shirt down covering it. “It was a surprise, for my mother. Just for that you better watch out on the track, cause you’ll be flying off it when I get to you.”
Dylan just looked back at the track. “I knew I shouldn’t have said that.” He thought.
The intercom came on. “Alright races get ready…On your mark…Get set…Go!”
All the racers blasted down the starting line, heading down the first down hill of the track. There where loops at the top and windows up top. So far it was starting off as a narrow road across and nothing but sand at the far bottom. The were very high off the ground, if you fell off the track, you were done for.
Zero and Nick were in the lead, Dylan was behind of few people but not for long. He sped up and got right beside the new friend he made. “Ah look who decided to see me.”
Dylan looked at him and turning his car away from him as dude tried to grab him. “Aaah! Wait come on I was just joking about the flower tattoo!”
He tried to reach for him again. “Come here you little br- woah!” A fork in the road was coming up, he noticed it in just enough time to barely make the turn, they both were heading into caves ahead. Dylan, and some other racers made the left turn, while Nick, Zero, The English racer, and the others went to the right. “Darn it!” He put his eyes back on the road.
Dylan wiped his hand across his forehead wiping away the sweat. “Phew, that was cloooooooose!” Dylan along with the others fell far down into a half pipe, inside the cave there was nothing at the bottom but water, there were exits down below though, well they seemed like exits. He swerved back and forth trying to avoid the racers doing the same thing. Getting his awareness back he looked where he was. “This race is crazy!”
Chapter 21:
Everything that was happening was being broadcasted on the floating TVs from earlier. The others got to one and grabbed some seats, along with popcorn.
“I’m seeing why hardly anyone was joining the race.” Brad said. After Brad said that a car alarm went off in the back round, along with a familiar screech, Brad and Karlis reconized. Karlis turned around mouth gaped open. “No come on, please tell me that was a car horn.”
Aaron looked at Karlis. “What are you talking about?”
“That virus we were told you guys about when we heading to Phil’s place” Brad said “ That sounded like its scream.”
“You don’t think that was it do you…why would it have followed us to-“Another screeched cut Aaron off, this one was louder than the first one. “Ok never mind.”
Mei came back with the popcorn. After a few seconds of looking at the it Aaron was beginning to suspect something. “You gonna share those or what?”
Zero was in first place and Nick was in second, right beside each other. They were just coming out the short cave and were very high off the ground like before, there part of the track was nothing but sharp turns. But this time there were high borders along the tracks, but at the high speed they were going it still wasn’t save enough.
Zero looked at Nick he was too into the race to see Zero looking at him. “This one is a good racer.” He heard the echo of the virus’ screech from where he was. “Perfect, now I just have to wait for the right time.”
Now Dylan was out his tunnel and was right next to the others on two close tracks. Dylan didn’t even notice it until he heard that familiar English taunting voice. “Hey did ya miss me shrimp?!”
Dylan was almost afraid to look, but from the voice he already knew who it was. “I thought I lost him…owell.” Dylan saw the tracks were going to combine up ahead, he sped up trying to get in front of everyone by the time the gap closed.
He was so close to Nick and Zero, closing in inch by inch. He clenched on the handles, hoping he would make it.
Brad: “Keep your eyes open!”
Aaron: “And watch out for any sharp turns!”
Dylan: “No worries guys!”
Nick and Zero were getting on their cars. Nicks’ ticket said “number 3” he looked for the car with the “3” on it. The car was a bit thin with completely spherical wheels, long and green with a black strip going down, the pit in the middle with a cover hood and two thin rockets in the back. “Ah, my favorite one.” He stepped up, got into it and started it up.
Zero was number 5 his was more big and bulky looking. It was brown colored, with 4 rockets and 4 regular 32 inch wheels. “This one fits me…I guess.”
Dylan was number 12. All the cars were lined up in a straight line and his was at the other side. His was a hover bike, it was red mostly and brown near the tires and hood. Dylan hoped on and saw Zero getting on his too, before one of the big “cut throat” racers got on the one next to him. Dylan turned his head to the track as soon as the dude got on, the racer looked at Dylan.
Tauntingly the racer spoke to him in a English accent. “Heh since when did they let little kids get on the tracks?”
Dylan looked back at him, this guy was pretty big compared to Dylan, he had a black vest with a ripped shirt under, bald with a 5 o’clock shadow, and brown cargo pants, Dylan then saw something that he could use to really make him mad, or worse. “I’m not the one with a flower tattoo on my arm. “
The racer growled and pulled his shirt down covering it. “It was a surprise, for my mother. Just for that you better watch out on the track, cause you’ll be flying off it when I get to you.”
Dylan just looked back at the track. “I knew I shouldn’t have said that.” He thought.
The intercom came on. “Alright races get ready…On your mark…Get set…Go!”
All the racers blasted down the starting line, heading down the first down hill of the track. There where loops at the top and windows up top. So far it was starting off as a narrow road across and nothing but sand at the far bottom. The were very high off the ground, if you fell off the track, you were done for.
Zero and Nick were in the lead, Dylan was behind of few people but not for long. He sped up and got right beside the new friend he made. “Ah look who decided to see me.”
Dylan looked at him and turning his car away from him as dude tried to grab him. “Aaah! Wait come on I was just joking about the flower tattoo!”
He tried to reach for him again. “Come here you little br- woah!” A fork in the road was coming up, he noticed it in just enough time to barely make the turn, they both were heading into caves ahead. Dylan, and some other racers made the left turn, while Nick, Zero, The English racer, and the others went to the right. “Darn it!” He put his eyes back on the road.
Dylan wiped his hand across his forehead wiping away the sweat. “Phew, that was cloooooooose!” Dylan along with the others fell far down into a half pipe, inside the cave there was nothing at the bottom but water, there were exits down below though, well they seemed like exits. He swerved back and forth trying to avoid the racers doing the same thing. Getting his awareness back he looked where he was. “This race is crazy!”
Chapter 21:
Everything that was happening was being broadcasted on the floating TVs from earlier. The others got to one and grabbed some seats, along with popcorn.
“I’m seeing why hardly anyone was joining the race.” Brad said. After Brad said that a car alarm went off in the back round, along with a familiar screech, Brad and Karlis reconized. Karlis turned around mouth gaped open. “No come on, please tell me that was a car horn.”
Aaron looked at Karlis. “What are you talking about?”
“That virus we were told you guys about when we heading to Phil’s place” Brad said “ That sounded like its scream.”
“You don’t think that was it do you…why would it have followed us to-“Another screeched cut Aaron off, this one was louder than the first one. “Ok never mind.”
Mei came back with the popcorn. After a few seconds of looking at the it Aaron was beginning to suspect something. “You gonna share those or what?”
Zero was in first place and Nick was in second, right beside each other. They were just coming out the short cave and were very high off the ground like before, there part of the track was nothing but sharp turns. But this time there were high borders along the tracks, but at the high speed they were going it still wasn’t save enough.
Zero looked at Nick he was too into the race to see Zero looking at him. “This one is a good racer.” He heard the echo of the virus’ screech from where he was. “Perfect, now I just have to wait for the right time.”
Now Dylan was out his tunnel and was right next to the others on two close tracks. Dylan didn’t even notice it until he heard that familiar English taunting voice. “Hey did ya miss me shrimp?!”
Dylan was almost afraid to look, but from the voice he already knew who it was. “I thought I lost him…owell.” Dylan saw the tracks were going to combine up ahead, he sped up trying to get in front of everyone by the time the gap closed.
He was so close to Nick and Zero, closing in inch by inch. He clenched on the handles, hoping he would make it.
Just a heads up there might not be a chapter update for a while it depends
>_< alot of people do, i missed alot of the other fanfics here so lol but thanks, if i can most likely a new chapter might be here this week or weekend hopefully
Kinda cool. Extend you story length please! Or else it would be less fun!
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