Re: The Organization's Beginning
That is not bad at all. I liked it. Good job.
That is not bad at all. I liked it. Good job.
Fanfiction ► The Organization's Beginning (chapter 12 soon!)
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Re: The Organization's Beginning
Even being short, that was a good one.
Even being short, that was a good one.
Re: The Organization's Beginning
Oooo... This new character sounds really intresting, I can't wait to find out who they are! XD Yet again very nice chapter!
Oooo... This new character sounds really intresting, I can't wait to find out who they are! XD Yet again very nice chapter!
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I have a feeling the next character will be Xigbar. Especially due to the sentence he said. Mind if I give it a shot.
I have a feeling the next character will be Xigbar. Especially due to the sentence he said. Mind if I give it a shot.
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It supposedly just sits in the space between light and dark, so maybe it was built/created around the time the Nobodies were created?
It supposedly just sits in the space between light and dark, so maybe it was built/created around the time the Nobodies were created?
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Correcting his fanfic..? Come on, we are not discussing KH. It is a fanfic! xD
Correcting his fanfic..? Come on, we are not discussing KH. It is a fanfic! xD
Re: The Organization's Beginning
hey ssr! i feel like i havent talked to you for a bit... sorry about that ^_^'
anyways, nice chapter! new character sounds interesting (suspense!)
it was really good, looking forward to the next one
hehe take your time though if you must. remember to breathe!
hey ssr! i feel like i havent talked to you for a bit... sorry about that ^_^'
anyways, nice chapter! new character sounds interesting (suspense!)
it was really good, looking forward to the next one
hehe take your time though if you must. remember to breathe!
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Does it matter? I think not, A fanfiction is a writer's interpretation of events, I mean if SRR wanted to make Dremyx the leader of the organisation in his fanfic he can, not that Im saying he will, but you don't shot down people's fanfics cause they messed up the facts, A fanfic is not a theory, people can put theories and beliefs in there but it's not to be shot down saying their wrong. A fanfic has no rules, it's all up for the author's imagination and creativity to run wild!
Quoted for emphasis.
Also quoted for emphasis! XD
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sure no problem. i am no rush. take your time
sure no problem. i am no rush. take your time
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I can't wait, ofcourse I will have to, I don't want you to rush such brilliant works!
*Screams with excitement* YAY FOR MORE GOOD READING MATERIAL!!!!
I can't wait, ofcourse I will have to, I don't want you to rush such brilliant works!
Re: The Organization's Beginning
Yay! Another chapter is coming!
Can't wait to see who this new character will be, but I have an idea from the "light" mentioned earlier on...
Yay! Another chapter is coming!
Can't wait to see who this new character will be, but I have an idea from the "light" mentioned earlier on...
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Hoping you all like this one, enjoy!
Hoping you all like this one, enjoy!
Chapter 8: Warriors of the Elements
A figure jumped infrooont of the three. It wore a hooded dark blue coat that bore red flames up it's sides.
"Who are you?" asked Even.
"No one important", replied the person, smirking.
Suddenly the figure went into full motion, summoning two round weapons from thin air. Faint specks of fire came along with the weapons.
Suddenly the three at once noticed that Dilan was beginning to give way. The mysterious figure noticed too. It leaped towards the Darkside, then hulred the two weapons at it's head. They returned to him simultaneously.
"Hmm... didn't put enough into that...
He thought to himself silently. Then something clicked.
"Hey, ballerina guy! he yelled up to Dilan.
"What do you want?"
"Leave this one to me, go and protect your friends."
"This is my battle, I can do this myself!"
"No you can't! You're already starting to weaken! Go help your friends, ok? F-R-I-E-N-D-S, got it memorized?"
So Dilan took the words of the sranger and slowly backed off from the Darkside, then summoned a great wind sheild to protect the three. Then he ran over to Ienzo and Braig =, picked them up, then rsn back to the sheild and handed them to Aeleus.
"Wait here", Dilan grunted.
"What about you?" asked Even.
"I'm going to finish what I started."
And so he ran back to the Darkside, then said to the young man with the weapons and muttered "let's finish this".
And finish it they did. The man with the two weapons re-summoned them, then he released a new power within him, which caused the weapons, the charkarms, to circle around him, creating a wall of fire. At the same time, Dilan had all six lances forming tornadoes around him.
"I can handle this punk alone, watch this!" yelled the man.
"Oh yeah?" Dilan said competitively.
"Let's go!!"
And so they both released their explosive attacks simultaneously.
The power of the two attacks combined was magnificent. It shook throughout the whole town aswell as the castle.
*
The two stood there, looking at each other and panting.
"I think my work here is done", said the man, looking at the fading Darkside.
"Thanks for the help", said Dilan, offering his hand.
"Anytime", said the man, taking Dilan's hand and shaking it.
Then, just like that, the man faded into the darkness.
A figure jumped infrooont of the three. It wore a hooded dark blue coat that bore red flames up it's sides.
"Who are you?" asked Even.
"No one important", replied the person, smirking.
Suddenly the figure went into full motion, summoning two round weapons from thin air. Faint specks of fire came along with the weapons.
Suddenly the three at once noticed that Dilan was beginning to give way. The mysterious figure noticed too. It leaped towards the Darkside, then hulred the two weapons at it's head. They returned to him simultaneously.
"Hmm... didn't put enough into that...
He thought to himself silently. Then something clicked.
"Hey, ballerina guy! he yelled up to Dilan.
"What do you want?"
"Leave this one to me, go and protect your friends."
"This is my battle, I can do this myself!"
"No you can't! You're already starting to weaken! Go help your friends, ok? F-R-I-E-N-D-S, got it memorized?"
So Dilan took the words of the sranger and slowly backed off from the Darkside, then summoned a great wind sheild to protect the three. Then he ran over to Ienzo and Braig =, picked them up, then rsn back to the sheild and handed them to Aeleus.
"Wait here", Dilan grunted.
"What about you?" asked Even.
"I'm going to finish what I started."
And so he ran back to the Darkside, then said to the young man with the weapons and muttered "let's finish this".
And finish it they did. The man with the two weapons re-summoned them, then he released a new power within him, which caused the weapons, the charkarms, to circle around him, creating a wall of fire. At the same time, Dilan had all six lances forming tornadoes around him.
"I can handle this punk alone, watch this!" yelled the man.
"Oh yeah?" Dilan said competitively.
"Let's go!!"
And so they both released their explosive attacks simultaneously.
The power of the two attacks combined was magnificent. It shook throughout the whole town aswell as the castle.
*
The two stood there, looking at each other and panting.
"I think my work here is done", said the man, looking at the fading Darkside.
"Thanks for the help", said Dilan, offering his hand.
"Anytime", said the man, taking Dilan's hand and shaking it.
Then, just like that, the man faded into the darkness.
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