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Fanfiction ► Riku FOR PRESIDENT.



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That's right!

The one!

The only!

And most certainly hottest person on the world....

ME!!! RIKU!!! IS GOING FOR PREZ!

That's right! And this time, no 40-year-old heartless will take over me! Alright, *Ahem* ....

Vote me presidente, and I assure you!!! I SHALL MAKE THE KAIRI X RIKU PAIRING COME TA LIFE!!!!!! Yo Kairi! Get up here!

Hi!

*Makes out with Kairi*

*Slaps Riku* Jerk! *Stomps away*

Ow! See you back at the islands, girl! Heh... She knows she wants me. *Ahem* .............

If I am voted presidente! I SHALL MAKE THE SORA X RIKU PAIRING COME ALIVE!!! SORA! Get yo Keyblade-ass up here!

5 Minutes later...
*Arm twitches, with a keyblade stabbed through chest* I can't...... Feel....... My........ Body....... My hot hot body........
Later........ After Riku's Surgery...
Riku: *Peeing in an outhouse*

Kairi: *Tips over outhouse* THAT'S FOR MAKING OUT WITH ME, ASS-FACE!

Outhouse: *Tips, with water and other stuff churning inside*

Riku: Oh..... Oh God....... OH DEAR GOD. OH..... IT'S EVERYWHERE!!! AH! IT'S IN MY KEYBLADE WOUNDS!!! OH!!!! OH GOD!!!!!
After the incident, Riku never ran for president again. And everytime he saw an outhouse, he'd wet himself.

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The Dream

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hah that was funny with Riku making out with Kairi, but you should have made him force Kairi and Sora make out.
 

Danica Syer

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I guess it'd be better with more description and more story to it. But it was all right. The ending was okay though.
 

Cinollex

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I guess it'd be better with more description and more story to it. But it was all right. The ending was okay though.

This.

Writing in "script" form is all well and good, but, at times, it comes across as half-assed.
The humor's decent, albeit a little cheap.

Again, try more description. And plot.
 

Efflictim

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This.

Writing in "script" form is all well and good, but, at times, it comes across as half-assed.
The humor's decent, albeit a little cheap.

Again, try more description. And plot.


This.

But the humor was good, I liked it.
 

Chakolat Strawberry

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You could be more descriptive and add more stuff to it. Ending was gross, didn't like it so much IMO.
Needs more plot too. Even if it is one of those quicky stories.
 
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