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Miss Murder
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On the latest:
First one should rhyme more, have a better rhythm and such.
Second one ... how should I phrase this? Keep the sequences of lines in each sequence equal in length and flow. I'll probably have to elaborate on that ... but oh well.
On the third ... you're raping the same words for a while there. When using poetry, you shouldn't use the same words to rhyme with each other. It throws off most of the poem and everything.
But the emotions expressed in your writing are exquisite.
Some good advice I have for you:
Don't spit out poetry like Brittany Spear's babies. =/
Quality over quanity, love, quality over quanity.
What I'm saying is that it's better to have one awesome poem a month than to have six that need more improving on a week. That was an exaggeration, but you get my point.
<3
I luv joo!!
Keep it up.
You'll be an amazing writer in no time, though you're quite a good one as it is.
First one should rhyme more, have a better rhythm and such.
Second one ... how should I phrase this? Keep the sequences of lines in each sequence equal in length and flow. I'll probably have to elaborate on that ... but oh well.
On the third ... you're raping the same words for a while there. When using poetry, you shouldn't use the same words to rhyme with each other. It throws off most of the poem and everything.
But the emotions expressed in your writing are exquisite.
Some good advice I have for you:
Don't spit out poetry like Brittany Spear's babies. =/
Quality over quanity, love, quality over quanity.
What I'm saying is that it's better to have one awesome poem a month than to have six that need more improving on a week. That was an exaggeration, but you get my point.
<3
I luv joo!!
Keep it up.
You'll be an amazing writer in no time, though you're quite a good one as it is.