I really like it! I can't wait for the next updates.
Fanfiction ► KH: Org. XIII: Vacation!
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Thanks for the comment! I'll update Monday-Friday when I can, I WILL ALWAYS UPDATE the weekends.
omg, i can't believe I didn't think of that. That just made the possibilities for this story 10 times funnier. Can't wait for the next update!
I'm enjoying this fanfiction so far. But I kinda laughed at this part. Zexion, a bookworm? No, I get it! Just is funny that's all. I'm still reading but so far it's good. Just make sure it sounds more like it has description and so forth. Also when you mention 'we see', I think it sounds better if you can just "describe". It sounds better.
Hm, thanks for the tip! I'll be sure to take advantage of it.
Not like Xemnas needs it...
O_O Hammsterviel? (yeah I completely spelled that wrong.)
Don't feel bad, from now on, let's call him Hamster Evil... or Hamsterveil. Anyway, yes it IS him.
I had feeling it might him, at first when you said squeaky voice i thought of Pleakley,
Hm, I could dare say that his voice is a little soft, even when he screams.
CHAPTER FOUR:
Touching Hawaiian grounds!
The luxurious S.S. Gummi Cruiser lands it's anchor in the soft and clear Hawaiian sands and drops a rubber slide. From that slide, the fourteen members come dropping with the wind hitting their cloaks and getting a refreshing feeling of that tropical breeze they began to feel.
Just as the final member comes down, Roxas, Xemnas walks up to a palm tree filled with coconuts.
"OK everyone, we have arrived at Hawaii." Xemnas said while standing in the shadow of the palm tree
"From here and fort, you will be assigned to a group consisting of three members." Xigbar said while getting a sticky note from his pocket
Xigbar hands the sticky note to Xaldin and he reads "The following group, Bravo, will be composed of Vexen, Lexeaus and Zexion."
"Hmph! I hope this wild goose chase won't melt my brain down." Said Vexen
"You're instructions are as followed: You will search for Hawaiian provisions such as coconuts, ice cream and cold beverages." Xaldin said
Vexen, Lexeaus and Zexion then left.
"Group Foxtrot will consist of Saix, Demyx and Luxord. You're assignment is to search for any Hawaiian looking figurines and/or jewelry." Xaldin said
"We were sent here just to enter a gift shop?!" Exclaimed Saix while letting out a fiery wrath through his eyes
The three of them leave with a doubt on their faces.
"Group Slate will be formed by Axel, Roxas and Xion. You will look for hearts and Heartless." Said Xaldin
"Hm, we get all the action, they get the boring assignments... NICE!" Said Xion
The three of them leave.
"What about us, Superior?" Marluxia asked
"You and Larxene will help us get the hotel rooms ready down at the Hawaiian Frog Hotel." Xemnas said while walking out of the beach
"That's all? We will only unpack some boxes and out them on empty rooms?" Marluxia asked
"Don't make it look like some boring thing! You will be also unpacking the Nobody ENH we were experimenting on." Said Xigbar while catching up with Xemnas
A strong wind breezed through a coconut and it hit Marluxia's head
"OUCH! I saw that Number II!" Marluxia exclaimed while caressing his head
"I just aimed the wind at a coconut, nothing more." He replied
"GRR!"
"Let's go and unpack the things... YOU WILL UNPACK THE ENH! Ha ha!" Larxene said while running towards the crates
"No way!" Marlxuia said
"I called it first!" Said Larxene
"Ow no!" Marluxia said
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Why do i get the feeling that Xemnas's plans will clash dramatically with Hamsterveil's?
Looking forward to the next update!
Looking forward to the next update!
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Xemnas getting a tan. Hah.
This looks promising, can't wait for the next chapter.
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Hooray, an update!!! I feel bad for all the Org. members with the crappy assignments; I'm sure they all rather be doing what Xion, Roxas, and Axel were sent to do. So, what is this Nobody ENH thing that Larxene and Marluxia have to unpack? Part of me has a bad feeling as to what it is, but I guess we'll all find out soon enough. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.
ya I have a bad feeling too. who's the squeaky voice and why is it squeaky?
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^It sounds like Hamsterviel, and if I remember correctly, he's from Lilo and Stitch.
alright another update
hahaha! maybe it is Hamsterviel. ^ ^
Let's just say that Xemnas never though that the ENH Nobodies were going to turn out useful.
Xemnas getting a tan. Hah.
This looks promising, can't wait for the next chapter.
His a Nobody! You never know how nothingness can react to your skin!
ENH stands for ENHanced, you should get some ideas out of that word.
He IS Hamsterviel!
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Also, on a side note, tell me how someone that spends 24/7 of his "whole life" watching a heart-shaped moon form keeps getting tanned? It must be the Room of Sleep!
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