Just finished reading the re-write of the first chapter. GREAT improvement. Hope it keeps getting better.
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yay! now people like my fic! Chapter 6 in the end of the week.
Well, I was thinking here with myself and I decided that, after a week with no updates, you deserve chapter 6 now, and chapter 7 will be coming after Sunday.
So, here it is! Enjoy.
Chapter 6: Reuniting and Separating!
So, they headed to the Radiant Garden. They landed in the marketplace, and had a surprise.
"Donald! Goofy! How did you get here?" - Asked Sora, hugging his friends, happy to see them once more.
"Sora! It's so good to see you again!" - said Donald, with his unique voice. "The King left us here before he picked you up. The heatless are back!"
"We know this. We saw them in Twilight Town. Man, no matter what we do, even if we destroy them once, twice, they'll come back." - Replied Sora, angry and sad. "Let's go to Merlin's house. Maybe he knows what we can do."
"Sora, while you go to Merlin's house, I, Ansem, and your fella here will go to the laboratory. We'll need to check it out." - Said Mickey, already running off.
Then Sora went to the borough. But there, lots of heartless were swarming…
"Oh, no! We need to get past through them!"- Said Sora. "You guys ready?"
"Yeah."- Replied Riku, summoning his way to the dawn keyblade.
"We're ready!" - Said Donald already casting thunder on the heartless.
"Come on, Sora!" - Said Goofy, throwing his shield.
"I'm fighting too!" - Said Kairi, with her new keyblade, given to her by Riku in the world that never was.
Then, they fought the heartless. But it seemed that, the more the fought, the more they started to appear. Then, when all of them were tired, they were almost defenseless, until a coated man appeared. Only Sora saw him, because the others had passed out, but he couldn't see his face. And then, he began to sleep…
"Don't worry. I got everything covered." - Said the same coated man. Sora was dreaming, and still knowing that, he couldn't wake up.
"Who are you?" - Asked Sora. The man wouldn't show his face, but at least he'd know his name.
"I'm a friend." - And then, he took off his hood, showing a man with brown hair, blue eyes, and a keyblade in his left hand.
Than, another coated man, appeared before him. He was smaller than the other, yet he was as mysterious as the other man.
"Who are you? Where am I?" - Asked Sora, trapped in his own dreams, in a strange canyon.
Then, the other man took off his hood as well. "I'm another friend."
"Roxas?" - Asked Sora
"No. I'm Roxas." - And another coated guy appeared, but without his hood. He and the mysterious friends disappeared, and with them, Sora's dream.
And then, Sora woke up. He was in a house. A house that he had been before. And a familiar voice said. "He woke up! Come here!"
"W-Wha…Where am I...?" - Asked Sora. "Leon…Yuffie…Aerith…Merlin….Cid…Are those you?"
"Yes. Thought you wouldn't awake, sleepy boy." - Said Leon, ironically. "You've been off for three days."
"Three days?! What exactly happened?" - Asked Sora, more confused than before.
"Well…"(Flashback Mode) "Some coated guy brought you here. He said that you would be okay. And then, he departed without a single word." - Said Cid.
"What happened to the King and to the others?" - Asked Sora, worried about his friends.
"Relax. They woke up yesterday. Now they are at Ansem's lab." - Said Leon. "You can go there now."
"Okay. Merlin, can I talk to you for a moment?"- Asked Sora, with a plan in mind.
"Yes, yes, what is it lad?"- Replied the wizard.
"Have you ever heard of Yen Sid?"-Asked Sora
"Yes, yes. In fact, he was my teacher. Why are you asking?" - Asked Merlin, with a smile on his face.
"I thought that I could ask for his help. But, I would like no one else to know this. Can you take me to him?" - Asked Sora.
"Okay. I can create a portal. Now, stay back. Bibbidi… Oops…this isn't the right spell. Portal Magus!" - And then, a door appeared in front of them. "Now, now, just a moment. Sora, you need to be fast there. And, seek only the advice you need."
And then, Sora entered in the portal…
Author's notes: Donald and Goofy might sound strange to you, but it is because they didn't appear in previous chapters. Next episode will be different: It will cover two actions instead of one! What actions will it have, you will only know there.(Unless you're a good reader)
P.S. - Yes, Yen Sid is coming back.
So, here it is! Enjoy.
Chapter 6: Reuniting and Separating!
So, they headed to the Radiant Garden. They landed in the marketplace, and had a surprise.
"Donald! Goofy! How did you get here?" - Asked Sora, hugging his friends, happy to see them once more.
"Sora! It's so good to see you again!" - said Donald, with his unique voice. "The King left us here before he picked you up. The heatless are back!"
"We know this. We saw them in Twilight Town. Man, no matter what we do, even if we destroy them once, twice, they'll come back." - Replied Sora, angry and sad. "Let's go to Merlin's house. Maybe he knows what we can do."
"Sora, while you go to Merlin's house, I, Ansem, and your fella here will go to the laboratory. We'll need to check it out." - Said Mickey, already running off.
Then Sora went to the borough. But there, lots of heartless were swarming…
"Oh, no! We need to get past through them!"- Said Sora. "You guys ready?"
"Yeah."- Replied Riku, summoning his way to the dawn keyblade.
"We're ready!" - Said Donald already casting thunder on the heartless.
"Come on, Sora!" - Said Goofy, throwing his shield.
"I'm fighting too!" - Said Kairi, with her new keyblade, given to her by Riku in the world that never was.
Then, they fought the heartless. But it seemed that, the more the fought, the more they started to appear. Then, when all of them were tired, they were almost defenseless, until a coated man appeared. Only Sora saw him, because the others had passed out, but he couldn't see his face. And then, he began to sleep…
"Don't worry. I got everything covered." - Said the same coated man. Sora was dreaming, and still knowing that, he couldn't wake up.
"Who are you?" - Asked Sora. The man wouldn't show his face, but at least he'd know his name.
"I'm a friend." - And then, he took off his hood, showing a man with brown hair, blue eyes, and a keyblade in his left hand.
Than, another coated man, appeared before him. He was smaller than the other, yet he was as mysterious as the other man.
"Who are you? Where am I?" - Asked Sora, trapped in his own dreams, in a strange canyon.
Then, the other man took off his hood as well. "I'm another friend."
"Roxas?" - Asked Sora
"No. I'm Roxas." - And another coated guy appeared, but without his hood. He and the mysterious friends disappeared, and with them, Sora's dream.
And then, Sora woke up. He was in a house. A house that he had been before. And a familiar voice said. "He woke up! Come here!"
"W-Wha…Where am I...?" - Asked Sora. "Leon…Yuffie…Aerith…Merlin….Cid…Are those you?"
"Yes. Thought you wouldn't awake, sleepy boy." - Said Leon, ironically. "You've been off for three days."
"Three days?! What exactly happened?" - Asked Sora, more confused than before.
"Well…"(Flashback Mode) "Some coated guy brought you here. He said that you would be okay. And then, he departed without a single word." - Said Cid.
"What happened to the King and to the others?" - Asked Sora, worried about his friends.
"Relax. They woke up yesterday. Now they are at Ansem's lab." - Said Leon. "You can go there now."
"Okay. Merlin, can I talk to you for a moment?"- Asked Sora, with a plan in mind.
"Yes, yes, what is it lad?"- Replied the wizard.
"Have you ever heard of Yen Sid?"-Asked Sora
"Yes, yes. In fact, he was my teacher. Why are you asking?" - Asked Merlin, with a smile on his face.
"I thought that I could ask for his help. But, I would like no one else to know this. Can you take me to him?" - Asked Sora.
"Okay. I can create a portal. Now, stay back. Bibbidi… Oops…this isn't the right spell. Portal Magus!" - And then, a door appeared in front of them. "Now, now, just a moment. Sora, you need to be fast there. And, seek only the advice you need."
And then, Sora entered in the portal…
Author's notes: Donald and Goofy might sound strange to you, but it is because they didn't appear in previous chapters. Next episode will be different: It will cover two actions instead of one! What actions will it have, you will only know there.(Unless you're a good reader)
P.S. - Yes, Yen Sid is coming back.
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sorry for my lateness again my friend. but i caught up. its getting interesting indeed.
im guessing those were those knights?
and your getting better too. good job.
im guessing those were those knights?
and your getting better too. good job.
Glad you're liking it my friend.
Thanks! I need to thank you and the others for helping me. Without you, I wouldn't kow where I would be now.Sorry for my anxiety, but Chapter 7 is here!
Chapter 7: Meeting with Yen Sid!/ Labbing!.
…And found himself at the base of a particular castle. Then, he entered on it and began to climb the long stairs. Meanwhile, Leon left Merlin's house and went to the lab. But on his way to the postern, he had to fight a lot of Heartless, some of which he have never seen before. At least, on the base of the castle, he could rest a bit.
"Yen Sid must be at the top. I should continue climbing the stairs." - Said Sora, halfway to see the powerful Mage. Then, he finally made it to Yen Sid's room.
"Ah…you came again, as I expected. What do you need, keyblade master?" - Said Yen Sid, as he was staring at Sora.
"I need your help. Since you are a powerful mage. I thought that you could help me." - Said Sora, looking directly at the eyes of the mage.
"What do you need?" - Replied Y.S.
"Well, I wanted you to open a portal for me, please." - Said Sora, wanting things to happen fast.
"To…Where?"- Replied the old wizard.
"To a place called 'Station of Serenity'. My nobody…knew that place, so I wanted to check it out."- replied Sora,
"Well, keyblade master, portals are not my specialty…" - And as he said that, Sora fell with an frustration face."But, I can help you. "
"Really? How?" - asked Sora, with an better face.
"This might be risky. I need to extract Roxas from you, so he can help you." - Said the wizard, looking at Sora's face, which was showing excitement and fear at the same time.
"How can you do that?" - Asked Sora.
"Of this. I'm afraid I don't know…" - Replied Yen Sid looking to the roof thinking of a way.
In the Radiant Garden, Leon had already entered in the laboratory.
"So, how are things in here?" - Asked Leon to Mickey, wanting to know what the progress they made was.
"Welp, we already cleaned the lab and now we're trying to extract the data necessary from Ansem's computer. Where is Sora? "- Asked the tiny king, wanting to know how the keyblade master was.
"He's at home" - replied the swordsman. "He woke up, but he's still weak to get here."
"I bet that he'll be here anytime soon." - Said the tiny king, relieved to know that Sora was okay. "I need to talk to Ansem."
Back to Yen Sid's tower, Sora was already departing, when Yen Sid called him.
"I might not know how to help you know, but I'll try to help you. Until then, go forth on the new journey that awaits you." - Said the wizard.
"I'm on a new journey already?" - Asked the puzzled Sora.
"Yes. Go now. There are people waiting for you." - Said Yen Sid as Sora left his room.
And as Sora got back to Merlin's house, only he was there.
"Where are the others, Merlin?" - Asked Sora, surprised to know that no one, with the exception of Merlin, was there.
"Ah, they had another matters to attend to, lad. So, why don't you go to the lab? I bet everyone is waiting for you there. "- Said the "loony" wizard.
"Okay. I'm going there." - And Sora left Merlin's house, heading for the lab.
Keep it up Hybrid, I've seen alot of Kh fanfics here but yours is very unique ^_^
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that was another good update. your style is differnt to others, i like it.
maybe at friday. Oh, I'm still announcing for two days for KH Haven (can't have more than one pic at the sig yet.). Then, The banner will be there. Promise.
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I love it. lol. Great job.
'kay, Chapter 8 is here!
Chapter 8: Friends in the lab.
Sora finally arrived at the lab. It was kind of distant of Merlin's house. When he entered, the first person he saw was Kairi.
"Sora! You're okay!" - Said Kairi, looking at his recovered friend.
"Yeah. But I'm still wondering why I slept for three days." - Said Sora, walking around the clean lab.
"Don't worry about that. Now, you're here." - Said Kairi, as she was getting closer to Sora.
"Kairi..." - And, their faces were closer, their eyes closed, open mouths, but Riku spoiled their moment.
"So, you woke up. I thought you'd be sleeping more right now." - Said Riku, playing with Sora.
"Oh, yeah? I bet that if it wasn't for me, you would be the one that would be still sleeping!" - Said Sora.
"Okay. But we don't have time to play now. The King wants to see you." - Said Riku, leaving the room.
Aw…We were so close. Damn Riku. Why did he appeared in that moment? Thought Sora.
"What is it, Sora?" - Asked Kairi.
"Nothing. Just thinking."- Replied Sora, running off to see the King.
Then, King Mickey was chatting with Ansem.
"It has been a long time since we have speaked like that, my friend." - Said Ansem, remembering the days that they would chat since they met.
"Yes. But Ansem, why would you seek revenge on the Organization?" - Asked Mickey that still didn't know why his friend wanted to do that. But when Ansem was going to answer, Sora arrived.
"Your Majesty, what happened?" - Asked Sora, trying to get more information of what happened during his sleep.
"Welp, nothing important until now. So, you can help cleaning the heartless' manufactory." - And the King left to the city.
"Sora, may I ask you a favor?" - Asked Ansem, wanting the help of the keyblade master.
"Um...Sure. What do you want?" - Replied Sora, wanting to know what the researcher wanted.
"Since the nobodies are back, I need you to travel to other worlds and defeat them. They'll attempt to recreate the world that never was too. Until then, you need to destroy them, before they can do that." - Said Ansem, leaving the room.
"How can you be so sure?" - Asked Sora.
"They'll attempt to revive the world that never was to get the powers of the previous organization. Be careful" - And Ansem left the room, leaving Sora worried and confused.
Author's notes: Sorry, it took a while for me to decide what I wanted to do with this chapter.
Chapter 8: Friends in the lab.
Sora finally arrived at the lab. It was kind of distant of Merlin's house. When he entered, the first person he saw was Kairi.
"Sora! You're okay!" - Said Kairi, looking at his recovered friend.
"Yeah. But I'm still wondering why I slept for three days." - Said Sora, walking around the clean lab.
"Don't worry about that. Now, you're here." - Said Kairi, as she was getting closer to Sora.
"Kairi..." - And, their faces were closer, their eyes closed, open mouths, but Riku spoiled their moment.
"So, you woke up. I thought you'd be sleeping more right now." - Said Riku, playing with Sora.
"Oh, yeah? I bet that if it wasn't for me, you would be the one that would be still sleeping!" - Said Sora.
"Okay. But we don't have time to play now. The King wants to see you." - Said Riku, leaving the room.
Aw…We were so close. Damn Riku. Why did he appeared in that moment? Thought Sora.
"What is it, Sora?" - Asked Kairi.
"Nothing. Just thinking."- Replied Sora, running off to see the King.
Then, King Mickey was chatting with Ansem.
"It has been a long time since we have speaked like that, my friend." - Said Ansem, remembering the days that they would chat since they met.
"Yes. But Ansem, why would you seek revenge on the Organization?" - Asked Mickey that still didn't know why his friend wanted to do that. But when Ansem was going to answer, Sora arrived.
"Your Majesty, what happened?" - Asked Sora, trying to get more information of what happened during his sleep.
"Welp, nothing important until now. So, you can help cleaning the heartless' manufactory." - And the King left to the city.
"Sora, may I ask you a favor?" - Asked Ansem, wanting the help of the keyblade master.
"Um...Sure. What do you want?" - Replied Sora, wanting to know what the researcher wanted.
"Since the nobodies are back, I need you to travel to other worlds and defeat them. They'll attempt to recreate the world that never was too. Until then, you need to destroy them, before they can do that." - Said Ansem, leaving the room.
"How can you be so sure?" - Asked Sora.
"They'll attempt to revive the world that never was to get the powers of the previous organization. Be careful" - And Ansem left the room, leaving Sora worried and confused.
Author's notes: Sorry, it took a while for me to decide what I wanted to do with this chapter.
Nice. I really like this chapter. KEEP UP THE AWESOME WORK! (5 stared)
Don't worry, guys. Ale will be back soon, and in the next chapters, he'll be an important party member. Besides, he'll have a surprise in the heartless manufactory. That's for sure.
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ah so the heartless must be defeated again. cool.
nice one man. short but not too bad.
nice one man. short but not too bad.
Not only that. We'll travel to some unexplored worlds, and continue the story of others that we've already visited. And this fic will have an sequel.
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