The Weight of Silence



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Nutari

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Well, I would like to present to you my first (of many hopefully, because I love this poetic form) Villanelle. I've grown a general dislike for free form poetry. I have found that I enjoy structure and form, and so, I have learned how to write in the Villanelle form, originally a French and Italian form. Also, for those of you who end up reading this poem, I am indeed a Christian- so I am speaking through the Christian lens here. Enjoy!

The Weight of Silence

The silence of God is overwhelming; deafening.
The weight of the silence can crush, and leave the soul strained.
In moments of utter hopelessness, He stands before me, beckoning.

The will is weak. This darkness in me is enveloping,
My mind, my soul, my heart. These, Satan hopes have gone unclaimed.
The silence of God is overwhelming; deafening.

The days go by, and I plead for life anew. My voice echoes- unending,
Unanswered. But, God speaks in whispers- “You are mine, you are claimed!”
In moments of utter hopelessness, He stands before me, beckoning.

I have given myself to passionate folly; I find His embrace threatening.
My weakness killed Christ; What darkness have I entertained?
The silence of God is overwhelming; deafening.

Razed. Desolate. What have I become? None hear my ceaseless screaming.
I am a slave Lord! Please, I must be unchained!
In moments of utter hopelessness, He stands before me, beckoning.

Life is wasted if you are unquestioning.
Who am I? Where is God? He is here, and I am reclaimed.
The silence of God is overwhelming; deafening.
In moments of utter hopelessness, He stands before me, beckoning.
 

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Wow, that's actually pretty good! :O

Just for a moment, it sounded like lyrics to some kind of a song. :)
 

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Thanks! I'm going to be reciting this at a poetry slam next week! Wow, I forgot about that set xD
Good luck there! :)

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I'll start off by saying this was a well written poem. I haven't heard of Villanelle before, but that's okay. I think its rather awe inspiring to see different types of poetry on here. I'm more of an open minded kind of person, so I can't really comment much on this poem per-say, since I'm not religious whatsoever. Regardless, it was refreshing to read, and I truly do hope to see more poems from you in the future, Nutari. And I think I understand what some of this poem is about. :)
 

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I'll start off by saying this was a well written poem. I haven't heard of Villanelle before, but that's okay. I think its rather awe inspiring to see different types of poetry on here. I'm more of an open minded kind of person, so I can't really comment much on this poem per-say, since I'm not religious whatsoever. Regardless, it was refreshing to read, and I truly do hope to see more poems from you in the future, Nutari. And I think I understand what some of this poem is about. :)
I will be doing more in the near future. I'm going to be presenting this at a poetry slam next week. I hope to be inspired to write more soon. I think everybody can relate a little to this particular poem, but it's a matter of the fine details that people may not be able to, unless they choose to go through the wrestling I have in my faith.
 
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