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Wonderglow

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I'm no poet but I wrote these in Bio, please comment-

High Roads
The lives so lost
On this weary road,
Taken by evil
To horrors untold.
These people were mad
And lost to the light
Wading from darkness,
A glare in their eyes.
Something about them
Seemed so alive.
I'll pity them,
And on this road I walk high.
Surely, I know it-
That deep down inside,
This road I am walking
Is envied by night
...isn't it?

To Live
Don't deny it-
Something you can't hide.
It's building inside you,
Feel it come alive.
Now don't be afriad,
Ashamed, don't lie.
Stop trying to avoid it-
Your darkness inside.
It's life, it's legend
It's always been around.
In the corners,
Behind streetlights,
In the shadows on the ground.
The feeling of being
As it consumes you within;
Embrace your darkness
And let the living begin.

Please
To see and not to greet;
To not be part of one's day.
To hear but not to speak;
It feels that you're far away.
Please don't keep from me,
What is most pleasant about you-
That mood held everyday,
I want to feel it too.
Although it's been spoken often,
My words just can't get through.
I'll only say it once more-
I want to be with you.

Lovely Lies
Sometimes,
Walking through this world alone,
I'm not going to die like this-
Or at least you won't be the one to know.

Ignorance is bliss,
I'll take that back again.
Not with my art, not with your actions,
But a distraction of my own.

These lovely lies
Kill feelings inside-
I can fix and change my own soul.

Define fake, this world I will take
And mend it into my own.

You'll never know, and neither will I;
I'll suffocate my thoughts
With these lovely lies.
 

King Sora X

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Cosidering your age, and the overall themes of these poems, you got great concepts in each of them. I'm surprised, actually. I didn't think they would be good at all(given the way they were formatted), but I can see now i was wrong. All of these are great. I do believe however, that the last one could use some revising and even re-write. It seems to be a bit out flow then the others. Having said that, I do love it. Keep the good work up, and hope to see more :).
 

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that was wonderful
full of feeling and i saw how the words flowed into each other
you are a poet
 

Jesus

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no need
props are giving where props are deserved
 
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