Fanfiction ► Is any of this for real.....or not?

[FlyingTomato1]

you had to wonder sometimes if he even knew the definition of funny.

XD
LOLNESS!You very funnies!

OMG!SORA!RIKU!
*drools over sora's hottness*
*Stares a gap at riku*
YAY!Riku is here!Did i tell you that you make Sora sound so droolin hot!!!OMG!
*Passes out from excitment*

 

[Noezel7]

yeah well i don't think you need my fan fic to know Sora is hot

 

[Souretsu Gear]

Noooooo! can't wait till chapter! I'm going to be gone for the weekend! Nooo! Make more Chapters! The title really means what the story is about amazing! Can't live with out this cool fanfic! *Falls on ground and goes crazy and screams*

 

[Noezel7]

You know if you guys praise me to much i might get sloppy with my writing!

 

[Souretsu Gear]

I know I noticed but its really good even though it is really hard to decipher either your hack typing or elite typing.

 

[Noezel7]

thanks alot!

 

[Noezel7]

i know this is double posting but i don't think it really matters. i don't know when the next chappy will be posted so don't go mental on me. Except you Sora, you can go mental.

 

[FlyingTomato1]

I mean like you make sora's personality hot!
Opinon;Is Sora hotter in Kh1 or KH2?
Me;KH2!!
What do you think?
I wish Sor awas real!His hottness would blow up the earth so maybe thats not a good idea.What i'm not obbsessed or something..<.<-->.>..(lol!XD)

Noezel;except you Sora, you can go mental.
Me;ROTFLMFAO!!!!!!!
*explodes...<.<-->.>

 

[Noezel7]

FT1 you scare me sometimes.(KH2)

 

[Noezel7]

oh did you all read redharry's new chappy for silver wings? this one is really good!

 

[FlyingTomato1]

Me scary?Naw,thats not true.I'm schitzofranic!hahaha!Well, i dont know maybe..Somethimes i'm really happy or sad or actin crazy(on purpose,maybe..XD)
or angry or stuff!The truth is i'm that kid that smart kid that aviods everyone and actually is extremly soical when i'm with friends.
ie.
School;Anti-Soical Weirdo
Home+with friends=Yippie!=D

 

[Noezel7]

well at school i am the smart kid(not trying to brag) and at home i'm on here talking to you guys

 

[FlyingTomato1]

Lol.At home i read and draw and watch tv and such.But...Every single waking moment i have i sell it to KHinsder.Did you see mt new avatar?I gots lots now that me make and such.Also did you check my fic.There is somethin special i posted.You may want to check it out.

 

[redharry123]

scitsifrinic?......*reads dictionary*....OH! no new chapter? have to...wait?...WHAT! NO! MUST HAVE CHAPTER! MUST HAVE SORA AND RIKU HOTNESS! HOTNESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!....<.<...>.>.....O.O.....um....yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa i need you to write a chapter....NOW! TYPE ! TYPE WOMAN TYPE! FASTER! MOVE THOSE FINGERS MOVE MOVE MOVE!


oh hey , srry to change the subject, but i'm gettin a sig made for my fanfic! just thought u might want to know. i'm goning to let my fans post it in their sigs. so...ya...ok um........NEW CHAPTER NOW!...please....

 

[Engulfed]

Hey Noezel, since everyone here is praising you like a golden God, I decided to, instead of going "OMG U ROCK", which you do, I'd give you some constructive criticism to help you out

“You know Sora, no matter what happens or what your going through, we’ll stick with you till the end.” I felt tears starting to come to my eyes. I had become such a crybaby lately. So instead of letting them see me cry I ran forward I little bit, keeping my back to them, with my hands place behind my head.


“Thanks you guys,” I chocked out. “I hope I can repay you someday, for all the things you’ve done for me.” I turned and smiled the biggest smile I could possibly make. They laughed and in turn so did I. I turned back to the gate, hesitating a little. Did I really want to know what these dreams meant or was I destined to know? Either way I was about to find out.

Though this is very emotional and good, too much emotion turns a Drama into a Soap Opera, which can sometimes be a little annoying. Also, Goofy seems to have said this a little too late. It would have made more sense for him to do that right after Sora became 'normal' again. Though it was a nice thing to say, at the time it's a bit uncomfortable.

“Hey Sora, long time no see.” Leon always made me laugh. I mean he wasn’t trying to be funny but he always said everything in such a serious tone, you had to wonder sometimes if he even knew the definition of funny.

Just a few things. After such a sad good bye in the first game, Leon seems to be a little to distant when speaking to Sora. Even though it's normally in his nature, it just seems that after closing Kingdom Hearts and defeating Ansem would, Leon could have given a little more gratitude.

They all had gathered, Aerith, Cloud, and even Yuffie. I had to remind myself that Yuffie was a ninja not a nurse, thinking back to the nightmare that started all of this. I explained my problem to the group, each of them listening closely. By the end of the story Leon looked confused, Cloud’s expression hadn’t changed, Aerith looked at me in disbelief, and Yuffie laughed hysterically. That made me feel great.
“So....so....you’re trying to tell me that you think there are two realities. Oh my God that’s the funniest thing I have ever heard ” Yuffie fell to her knees, laughing with tears comming to her eyes. Everyone gave her the same look, are you really that retarded?

Is she? Seeing how Sora was very serious about this, and that, as I said before, Sora deserves a lot more gratitude (and respect) than for her to be rolling on the floor laughing...

“No your right, it was stupid, see you guys later.” I stormed out of there in a raging fury. When I got outside I lashed out with my keyblade at a nearby statue. It shattered into a million pieces.


“How stupid am I. How could they ever understand?” My body sunk to the ground. I put my head in my knees. I was trying to calm down but I just couldn’t. Suddenly I hear footsteps come running towards me.

Once again, so much emotion. You sometimes almost make Sora seem a bit femminine. But, I suppose he can be sometimes in the game, but more like a little 4 year old girl, not a girl who's on her period. (No offence to girls here)

“Yuffie didn’t mean to be cruel, it’s just when she gets scared she tries to make a joke. She didn’t mean to make you mad. Please forgive her.”

The diolouge is a bit....uh, sketchy. Cruel is an odd word for him to say. Anyway, I'd just 'tune' those 3 sentances up if you care to edit your story.

“We have no time to discuss the details! If Kairi is in danger I need to go, NOW!” I tried to run but Cloud and Leon held me in place. I kept struggling but as soon as I was about to break free, Yuffie slapped me in the face.

Once again, Sora tries to run away. A bit jumpy, but I understand his intentions

As I opened the doors to go outside to the ship to rest, I realized that it was nighttime. I had never been in Hollow Baston at night. I also noticed a slight fog. I shrugged and tried to feel my way through the fog. Before I could take another step, a force stopped me from moving forward. Instincts told me that something was wrong. I summoned my keyblade and prepared for an attack. In front of me the fog started to clear. I squinted to see if my enemy was the one causing the fog. As soon as I saw who was in front of my very eyes, my mouth went dry. I let the keyblade fall to the ground and I fell to my knees. Why was all of this happening? There in front of me was Riku, with soul eater in hand.

Now that I've given you a few negative thoughts, I gotta say- this final paragraph is an A++! It's very well written and I wanna know what happens next!!

So, I'm not saying that you're story is bad, it's VERY good. I just wanna help you out so you can be even better than awesome!

 

[Cloud_Unchained]

OMG!This is the best fanfic ever!You must post more!I'll give you 3001 muffins!This is better stuff than all those books and other fanfics i read.It's so good it made me cry from its pureness!

You must not read very much.

The storyline isn't all too great. Making yourself Sora doesn't work all too well. It's alright for a fic, but you really should think some of this out before writting it down.

 

[Noezel7]

thanks for the help engulfed and cloud unchained it's ok if you don't like it. everyone is entitiled to their own opinon and i will not put down anyone for not liking my fan fic. its kind of nice seeing someone find flaw in what i have writen so i thank you both, engulfed and cloud unchained. i will improve as time goes on, i promise.

 

[FlyingTomato1]

Noezel!I'm making a Is any of this for real...or not Siggy!

 

[Noezel7]

thank you!

 

[Engulfed]

Wow, a whole sig dedicated to you and your fic!
Now that's a fan.