What do you think of this story im working on?

[ForeverBueaty]

Heyyyyy !

I am making this story about this girl named "Jessie" and her mom that move into this old house, the first thing they notice is that theres dream catchers everywhere(like hanging off the ceiling, hanging on every corner of the walls in the house..something like that). As they take the dream catchers done, strange things start happening like scratchy sounds in the walls or they would come home and mud would be on the walls with someones foot prints like someone walked in with muddy feet(etc etc). So Jessie starts noticeing that there is this girl(little older then her) is always in her dreams...like in the background of them. As days gos by she starts sleeping through days like she would wake up 2-6 days later. The first time this happened she wakes up in the hospital becuz they thought something was wrong with her. So days go by and she finds out that many years ago a girl and her family lived in the house. her dad was really mean and going crazy so one night while the girl was sleeping he kills her in her sleep. Jessie decides to try to talk to the girl but everytime she tried in her dreams...the girl would run away. then she hangs a dream catcher over her bed and it just ticks the girl off and thats when the girl gets mad. and talks attacking.

This story will have Jessie exploring the dream world.

what you think?

 

[Nutari]

Well, if you go about it right, it would be a decent idea. What you're going to want to do is really stress the dark elements of the story and make it borderline horror. The girl in her dreams has to be like a nightmare after the dream catcher gets put up. You will also have to explain how a spirit can physically manifest in order to leave foot prints and such. Dont leave any holes for critics to attack and itll be a good piece of work

 

[Nyangoro]

We can't get any idea of the quality of this story until you write it. Ideas are the very, very beginnings of story creation. Almost any idea can be made into a solid story. Seemingly terrible premises can turn into masterpieces with the right writing. Likewise, the most brilliant concepts can be rendered a mess by poor storytelling. An idea tells us nothing of the story's quality, only the story itself can do that

 

[Nutari]

Nicely put. That was what I was trying to say lol.