the feeling of dead sights

[Deaddude15]

i look at the grave...dead and depressed

i look for comfort in memmories, but i can just feel my pain

what i could had done if i was living, the hate i couldve let go

but when i look at the good times, i feel even worse

i thought i could do the things i did, but i couldnt

if only i did things differently, the difference of the bad times

but if i could hav changed, i wouldve did better things

i wouldve not got in painful situations for anybody

i would not have been killed in the first place by a stranger

and most of all, i would have told people i had loved how much i care about them

that they had someone they could go to for help

but that was the past, and now i stand in front of my grave

to haunt my never ending home on this earth

 

[Lumen et ignem]

Sounds good. You get the story across easily. Maybe you could divide the lines up into stanza's.

 

[Reverie]

The poem is short for my taste, but it was a nice read. Just watch out for the capitalization on the i's.

 

[Terraearthman15]

well you did good but m aybe try not to talk about death at the begin of the peom