okay dude, you said if i liked your fic to post it here, so here's what i think about your fic: awesome!!!! this fic is way awesome!!! it's like really smart, and Rory's way kool. (toning down enthusiasm.) so, i give this (hella awesome) fic: 150/10
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Inferno has (fianlly) returned to save your fanfic KC, It was on page 6 in the threads section! Good thing I logged back on, huh?
Hey I'm an eighth grader this year too! BTW If you can get on you computer but not online, the type the story in Microsoft Word and wait to post it!
That alternate personality thing that you guys are doing at the bottom of posts (not the Sig) is pretty funny; I have one but I don't let him type... Did I say one? it's more like twenty... lol
That alternate personality thing that you guys are doing at the bottom of posts (not the Sig) is pretty funny; I have one but I don't let him type... Did I say one? it's more like twenty... lol
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Lo and behold, here is the next chapter of Their Story!
Seriously guys, I really am sorry about not upddating for such a long time. I, uh, well I really don't have an excuse except for school, which is downright hectic. Thanks inferno for helping keep this fic alive while I go through the long and winding road of school. And keybearer_yoshi, thanks so much for your gracious compliments. New readers are always gladly welcomed! So, without further ado (because we've already waited long enough!), here is the next chapter to Their Story! Good luck and enjoy!
His search for the right thoughts was cut a little short when Roaricki yanked Moonflow from the rock face and started plummeting down the last hundred feet of the ravine.
Sora was becoming extremely light-headed as they fell at what felt like the speed of sound (which was simply impossible).
"What the heck are you doing?" Sora managed to yell as they rocketed down the ravine, afraid that they wouldd crash into the ground as soon as they got there.
But, of course, there came no answer from Roaricki. He was much too busy figuring out how he would pull this off while keeping Sora alive. Plus he probably wouldn't have answered anyway.
They fell further and further down the ravine, headfirst, just a few dozen feet out of reach of the collapsing topside of the ravine.
Sora had let go of Roaricki by now. He just couldn't take it. He had been clinging to Roaricki's trenchcoat so hard that his hands were now stinging from having the blood flow through them again. But this pain was nothing compared to the stomach-wrenching sensation of diving down a thousand-foot ravine, just dozens of feet away from a falling, crumbling cliffside.
As they fell, Sora saw that they were falling slightly faster than the roaring apocallypse of falling boulders, and the further they fell, the farther they became from the crumbling cliffside.
When they were far enough way from the falling cliffside, Roaricki screamed, "Grab on!"
Instantly Sora locked his arms around Roaricki's waist. Immediately after he felt Sora's arms wrap around him, Roaricki raised Moonflow, and with a mighty heave, plunged the glimmering blade back into the wall of the ravine. But they weren't jerked to an abrupt stop as Sora thought. Instead the tremendous momentum they had gained while falling made the translucent blade slide down along the rock wall, with Roaricki, who gripped Moonflow, hitching a ride with it, and Sora, who held onto Roaricki like an idiot.
As Moonflow sliced through the rock, sliding down the wall, friction started to take control, and Sora saw that slowly, ever so slowly, they began to slow down as they finally neared the bottom of the ravine.
When they were twenty-five from the bottom, Roaricki increased the pressure of Moonflow on the rock wall, and sparks started to shoot out from the rock wall, the friction heating the rocks up so much that they almost caught fire and melted. And then, with a final lurch, Moonflow stopped, ten feet above the bottom of the ravine, the sensation of friction finally gripping the blade.
They dangled there for a second, looking a slight bit awkward; Roaricki held onto Moonflow, and Sora held Roaricki's waist in a death lock. Then, after a few moments of catching his breath, Roaricki jerked Moonflow out of the rock and they fell to the ground, Roaricki landing gracefully on his feet, while Sora hit the ground hard on his back.
For a moment the bewildered teen coudn't believe it. He was on solid ground! He would have kissed the grass, but that would have gross, not to mention lowering Roaricki's view of him even more.
As he looked up just then, still lying on his back, he knew that he had spoken (or thought, if anyone wanted to get technical) too soon, because at that moment he heard a loud rumble, and saw the whole gigantic, crumbling ravine crashing down upon them. He tried to get up, but he couldn't move. He was too much in shock.
Roaricki, with a grunt, picked up the scrawny teen up off the ground as if he was a bag of feathers, and then ran full throttle away from the collapsing ravine and to the outer boundaries of a nearby forest. Turning around, he saw the whole ravine finally give way and then collapse in on itself, the falling ship-sized boulders crashing down on top of the mountain of huge rubble that would have crushed them in seconds. The Crenshaw Ravine was no more.
As Roaricki stared upon the settling rubble, he knew that his beloved Kingdom Clasm was buried somewhere underneath all of it, now nothing but a long, jagged piece of bent and twisted obsidian, trapped under serveral tons of rock.
A discordant voice broke him from his remorse.
"Um, Roaricki? You can put me down now."
Roaricki's eyes went wide in embarrassment as he set Sora down on the ground, looking at him for a quick second.
"Uh, yeah, sorry," he stuttered, barely audible. He rubbed the back of his furry neck in awkwardness.
Sora felt a little awkward as well. He was also thinking of how they had just survived a gigantic, crumbling ravine. He looked up at Roaricki, trying to meet his stern, golden eyes, but then looked to the ground.
"Yeah, it's okay," he mumbled, barely audible as well.
There was another moment of silence as they stared at the ground, both feeling extremely uncomfortable.
It was all interrupted when a crow let out a sharp, twanging caw on the tree above them.
They were both snapped back to their old thoughts and ways, and they turned away from each other.
As Sora turned back around to face Roaricki, the tall, black-furred superior abruptly turned his back to Sora, facing the forest.
"There is a pass back up into the cliffs through these woods."
There came no answer from Sora as he stared at Roaricki's back. The tension between them was still there.
"Oh," he finally said, not knowing what else to say.
Roaricki then started to walk into the woods.
"Just stick close and follow me, kid," he said flatly.
Sora stuck out his toungue and gave a face to Roaricki's back, and then followed him grudingly into the woods, the ravine delimna behind them. --
Seriously guys, I really am sorry about not upddating for such a long time. I, uh, well I really don't have an excuse except for school, which is downright hectic. Thanks inferno for helping keep this fic alive while I go through the long and winding road of school. And keybearer_yoshi, thanks so much for your gracious compliments. New readers are always gladly welcomed! So, without further ado (because we've already waited long enough!), here is the next chapter to Their Story! Good luck and enjoy!
Chapter 28
"Um, Roaricki? You can put me down now."
There is a funny thing that happens when you are about to die. Contradictary to what other people say, you life does flash before your eyes. You realize that you will never fulfill your hopes and dreams, and that you will never see certain people ever again. You also think to yourself, So this is how I die? I haven't even lived a full life yet! This, however, was not the case with Sora, as everything was going much too fast for him. He just looked up at the crumbling ravine that was about to crash down on him not even able to think straight. He had no idea what he thought about all this. "Um, Roaricki? You can put me down now."
His search for the right thoughts was cut a little short when Roaricki yanked Moonflow from the rock face and started plummeting down the last hundred feet of the ravine.
Sora was becoming extremely light-headed as they fell at what felt like the speed of sound (which was simply impossible).
"What the heck are you doing?" Sora managed to yell as they rocketed down the ravine, afraid that they wouldd crash into the ground as soon as they got there.
But, of course, there came no answer from Roaricki. He was much too busy figuring out how he would pull this off while keeping Sora alive. Plus he probably wouldn't have answered anyway.
They fell further and further down the ravine, headfirst, just a few dozen feet out of reach of the collapsing topside of the ravine.
Sora had let go of Roaricki by now. He just couldn't take it. He had been clinging to Roaricki's trenchcoat so hard that his hands were now stinging from having the blood flow through them again. But this pain was nothing compared to the stomach-wrenching sensation of diving down a thousand-foot ravine, just dozens of feet away from a falling, crumbling cliffside.
As they fell, Sora saw that they were falling slightly faster than the roaring apocallypse of falling boulders, and the further they fell, the farther they became from the crumbling cliffside.
When they were far enough way from the falling cliffside, Roaricki screamed, "Grab on!"
Instantly Sora locked his arms around Roaricki's waist. Immediately after he felt Sora's arms wrap around him, Roaricki raised Moonflow, and with a mighty heave, plunged the glimmering blade back into the wall of the ravine. But they weren't jerked to an abrupt stop as Sora thought. Instead the tremendous momentum they had gained while falling made the translucent blade slide down along the rock wall, with Roaricki, who gripped Moonflow, hitching a ride with it, and Sora, who held onto Roaricki like an idiot.
As Moonflow sliced through the rock, sliding down the wall, friction started to take control, and Sora saw that slowly, ever so slowly, they began to slow down as they finally neared the bottom of the ravine.
When they were twenty-five from the bottom, Roaricki increased the pressure of Moonflow on the rock wall, and sparks started to shoot out from the rock wall, the friction heating the rocks up so much that they almost caught fire and melted. And then, with a final lurch, Moonflow stopped, ten feet above the bottom of the ravine, the sensation of friction finally gripping the blade.
They dangled there for a second, looking a slight bit awkward; Roaricki held onto Moonflow, and Sora held Roaricki's waist in a death lock. Then, after a few moments of catching his breath, Roaricki jerked Moonflow out of the rock and they fell to the ground, Roaricki landing gracefully on his feet, while Sora hit the ground hard on his back.
For a moment the bewildered teen coudn't believe it. He was on solid ground! He would have kissed the grass, but that would have gross, not to mention lowering Roaricki's view of him even more.
As he looked up just then, still lying on his back, he knew that he had spoken (or thought, if anyone wanted to get technical) too soon, because at that moment he heard a loud rumble, and saw the whole gigantic, crumbling ravine crashing down upon them. He tried to get up, but he couldn't move. He was too much in shock.
Roaricki, with a grunt, picked up the scrawny teen up off the ground as if he was a bag of feathers, and then ran full throttle away from the collapsing ravine and to the outer boundaries of a nearby forest. Turning around, he saw the whole ravine finally give way and then collapse in on itself, the falling ship-sized boulders crashing down on top of the mountain of huge rubble that would have crushed them in seconds. The Crenshaw Ravine was no more.
As Roaricki stared upon the settling rubble, he knew that his beloved Kingdom Clasm was buried somewhere underneath all of it, now nothing but a long, jagged piece of bent and twisted obsidian, trapped under serveral tons of rock.
A discordant voice broke him from his remorse.
"Um, Roaricki? You can put me down now."
Roaricki's eyes went wide in embarrassment as he set Sora down on the ground, looking at him for a quick second.
"Uh, yeah, sorry," he stuttered, barely audible. He rubbed the back of his furry neck in awkwardness.
Sora felt a little awkward as well. He was also thinking of how they had just survived a gigantic, crumbling ravine. He looked up at Roaricki, trying to meet his stern, golden eyes, but then looked to the ground.
"Yeah, it's okay," he mumbled, barely audible as well.
There was another moment of silence as they stared at the ground, both feeling extremely uncomfortable.
It was all interrupted when a crow let out a sharp, twanging caw on the tree above them.
They were both snapped back to their old thoughts and ways, and they turned away from each other.
As Sora turned back around to face Roaricki, the tall, black-furred superior abruptly turned his back to Sora, facing the forest.
"There is a pass back up into the cliffs through these woods."
There came no answer from Sora as he stared at Roaricki's back. The tension between them was still there.
"Oh," he finally said, not knowing what else to say.
Roaricki then started to walk into the woods.
"Just stick close and follow me, kid," he said flatly.
Sora stuck out his toungue and gave a face to Roaricki's back, and then followed him grudingly into the woods, the ravine delimna behind them. --
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awesome chap dude! (graciouse compliments? kewl.)
(graciouse compliments? kewl.)
I HAV N"T BEEN RABID IN SOO LONG!!!! *jumps up and down trying to fly*
Still SOOOOOOOOOO COOOOLLL hehehehehhehehehehhehehehehehehhehehehehheh2ehehehhehehehehehehehheheheheheheheheehehheeheehehehehhehehehehehehehehhehehehehehhehe
Still SOOOOOOOOOO COOOOLLL hehehehehhehehehehhehehehehehehhehehehehheh2ehehehhehehehehehehehheheheheheheheheehehheeheehehehehhehehehehehehehehhehehehehehhehe
He KC! I bet you already know this, but you kinda should corretct that chapter. I know you were rushed and didn't have time, but it kinda detracts from the story... Good job though! I like how Sora sticks out his tongue at Roaricki, it reminds you how he is still immature.
Magic Cow Monk: One must balance all elements for their story to be complete.
Me: What the heck... Sorry... I hate it when stuff like this happens!
MCM:Be one with the milk...
Me:SHUT UP! PS.Keep up the good work KC!
Magic Cow Monk: One must balance all elements for their story to be complete.
Me: What the heck... Sorry... I hate it when stuff like this happens!
MCM:Be one with the milk...
Me:SHUT UP! PS.Keep up the good work KC!
me:..........*glomps Rory, Sary, & Sora* YAY!!! THE FIC LIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIVES!!!! ^_^
Sora: GET OFF!! IT'S DISGUSTING!!! >_<
Kaze: Freedom!!!! ^_^
Aozora: Not for long......-_-;...
me:..........*glomps Kaze, too* BWAHAHAHAHAHA!! >=D
Sora:*sigh* Nice chap, KC.........V_V
Sora: GET OFF!! IT'S DISGUSTING!!! >_<
Kaze: Freedom!!!! ^_^
Aozora: Not for long......-_-;...
me:..........*glomps Kaze, too* BWAHAHAHAHAHA!! >=D
Sora:*sigh* Nice chap, KC.........V_V
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I fixed the chapter, inferno, and I'm going to start proofreading them before I post them.
Thank you so much, k_k, yoshi, and Sora Shade for all of your comments. I'll wait for WM and MG before I go on to the next chapter. Plus I got some planning to do. In the meantime, eat, drink, and be merry!
Thank you so much, k_k, yoshi, and Sora Shade for all of your comments. I'll wait for WM and MG before I go on to the next chapter. Plus I got some planning to do. In the meantime, eat, drink, and be merry!
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Allright, a new chappy!
Hmm, looks like Sary needs to do a little favor for Rory after that whole mess XP.
Now, on to Mystic Wind, which I've been meaning to update for the past week X_x
Hmm, looks like Sary needs to do a little favor for Rory after that whole mess XP.
Now, on to Mystic Wind, which I've been meaning to update for the past week X_x
good chapter
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I thought you'd have continued by now KC. Hope i bought ya enough time to figure out the next several chapters. Well here i am, i give your last chapter a thumbs up and i demand the next chapter when possible.
OH YEAH!!! I found your Fic and saved it from... DUH DUH DUH! PAGE FIVE!
Now I have to correct the post I made on winged M's Fic...
Darn it! My Computer won't let avatars show up at first!
Now I have to correct the post I made on winged M's Fic...
Darn it! My Computer won't let avatars show up at first!
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Weird, i was told that this page was gone.... well luckily inferno saved it. Which leads to a very valid question. Where exactly IS KC? The story must go on!
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I dunno. MAybe he got grounded. Or maybe he's just lazy XP.
Alright, now I'm officially the Story-Saver! page 4 this time...
Nearly wrote 'age' 4, lol. Come on KC, People just don't write stories like you do...
By the way, how does everyone like my redone avatar? I just inversed the colors, but I think it looks awesome!
P.S. KC, don't get so hurried that you make a lot of mistakes,
we've waited this long, we can wait a little longer, but I won't
always be around to save your fic you know! lol
Nearly wrote 'age' 4, lol. Come on KC, People just don't write stories like you do...
By the way, how does everyone like my redone avatar? I just inversed the colors, but I think it looks awesome!
P.S. KC, don't get so hurried that you make a lot of mistakes,
we've waited this long, we can wait a little longer, but I won't
always be around to save your fic you know! lol
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KC's been missing for an awfully long time. What do ya think happened to him? I doubt he'd abandon a story in progress, especially after having it left the way it is without telling somebody. Anybody any idea what happened or where they went?
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No...not really
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I still don't know...I still give the same reasons as before.
Or he might ust be feelign real uninspired right now, like I have been with MW.
Or he might ust be feelign real uninspired right now, like I have been with MW.
He might not be coming back, but I'm still going to keep this up for others to read.
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