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Ok, im just gonna give you guys a preview of my story and i will work on it throughout the week, and if you would like give me your opinions so i could make this story even better...
Overview:
Through many years of corruption and hatrid throughout the world, it has destroyed and weakened the planet, and it is dieing, people and machines take over the creatures and environment destroying anything in its path. The world has come to its end and nothing will bring it back, not even the technology and power of humans can stop its iminent destruction and the wrath of hell will soon consume the world....
Prologue Part 1:
From the firey depts of hell, a powerful demon called "Kil'Jaden" or as know to many as "the devil" has been awoken by the corruption and destruction of this planet. He has unleashed a power unlike any other to destroy the world from the inside-out. He chose a target, the perfect person to take, a person with the ultamate power almost in the entire world, the President of the United States. He began the sacrifice and the ritual begins....
Meanwhile in the barrens of the Artic Circle....
Walking back from his catch of the day, Jak tosses the meat on the table while bleeding from his left hand. He also sees his right hand covered with the blood from his other hand and begins to yell at himself.
"God damn! Not again," he yells. He then looks at his arms and looks back into his past from the hundreds of scars he has been delt with.
He runs outside, and begins to look how horrible his life is; he then slams the old, wooden door so loudly it could be heard for miles. His house is like a massive "garage shed" made completely out of woods from nearby trees. He also was brought up, but not by his parents, an old man named Fredd. Fredd is a generous, kind man, with a messed up childhood. He smoked drugs and drank at 15 and never was the same, now hes slowly dieing and lives far from Jak, away from the cold. He left Jak when he was only 4 years old. He managed surviving by living in a cardboard box and eating fish from the rivers that are nearby. When he was 6, he became an expert hunter and hunted, wild bears, wolves, and snow leperds. When he was 11, he was attacked by a massive bear he called "Misha", and will never live the day down and was always on the lookout of her. Now hes 17, and still he lives this very moment, and still searches for Misha.
Overview:
Through many years of corruption and hatrid throughout the world, it has destroyed and weakened the planet, and it is dieing, people and machines take over the creatures and environment destroying anything in its path. The world has come to its end and nothing will bring it back, not even the technology and power of humans can stop its iminent destruction and the wrath of hell will soon consume the world....
Prologue Part 1:
From the firey depts of hell, a powerful demon called "Kil'Jaden" or as know to many as "the devil" has been awoken by the corruption and destruction of this planet. He has unleashed a power unlike any other to destroy the world from the inside-out. He chose a target, the perfect person to take, a person with the ultamate power almost in the entire world, the President of the United States. He began the sacrifice and the ritual begins....
Meanwhile in the barrens of the Artic Circle....
Walking back from his catch of the day, Jak tosses the meat on the table while bleeding from his left hand. He also sees his right hand covered with the blood from his other hand and begins to yell at himself.
"God damn! Not again," he yells. He then looks at his arms and looks back into his past from the hundreds of scars he has been delt with.
He runs outside, and begins to look how horrible his life is; he then slams the old, wooden door so loudly it could be heard for miles. His house is like a massive "garage shed" made completely out of woods from nearby trees. He also was brought up, but not by his parents, an old man named Fredd. Fredd is a generous, kind man, with a messed up childhood. He smoked drugs and drank at 15 and never was the same, now hes slowly dieing and lives far from Jak, away from the cold. He left Jak when he was only 4 years old. He managed surviving by living in a cardboard box and eating fish from the rivers that are nearby. When he was 6, he became an expert hunter and hunted, wild bears, wolves, and snow leperds. When he was 11, he was attacked by a massive bear he called "Misha", and will never live the day down and was always on the lookout of her. Now hes 17, and still he lives this very moment, and still searches for Misha.
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