Fanfiction ► FF7: Angel's Child

[Rika17]

This is a story I've been thinking about for a while, it came to me when advent children came out and little by little i've been plotting the story, though i'm still thinking of what to put, i'll try best to make it a great story
This story takes place one year after Dirge of Cerberus, it's mostly about a girl name sukie, i'll tell you more about her later and what her purpose is
Anyways here's the intro of the story, i hope you like it and i don't own FF7

Prolouge
Grey clouds cover the sky of Gaia, below was a building that sat ontop of moutain that over looked the land, it was a place for healing and rest for anyone to come in or better known as the healing loudge
Inside was a man named Rufus Shinra, once head chair and president of Shrina Electric Company that was respected and adored by all, parades in his honor, now sat in wheelchair in a small room that was inside a small building, staring at the window in front of him, watching as the world went by before him

Guilt ran through his body as he thought about the terrible things he had done to this world
"I was consumed by power," he said softy "I've should have know better"
Just then two men wear black suit came into the room
"You called for us, sir?" said one of them with red hair and pony tail
Rufus kept looking at the widow not making eye contact with the two men
"Yes...I need you to do something for me," he spoke
"What is it that you wanted us to do sir?" said another man with no hair and dark sunglasses
Rufus slightly turn his chair around
The two men staighten up
"I need you both to find a relative of mines"
End Prolouge

 

[Lycanthrope]

Very, very short. It could use to be longer. Granted, I understand its a Prologue, but its still too short. It honestly took me about 10 seconds to read it. Also, it could use to be spaced out more.

On the plus note, I didn't see many errors grammatically.

 

[shadow_heartless]

Hm........short but it sounds interesting and there arnt that many grammar errors on it

 

[Squall]

Nice effort,keep it up but next time try to write longer.

 

[Haku]

I think that it was a good start so far, all of the things that needed to be fixed that I was going to post were already said, but you'll do better next time.

 

[Rika17]

alright, i'll do better, it is my first fic after all, i'll write more later

 

[Lycanthrope]

Well, its certainly not bad for a first try. I'd suggest reading some other fanfics around here, so you get a better idea of how long it should be, and how to write good cliffhangers.

 

[Rika17]

ok, i'll do that, that for the tip

 

[Lycanthrope]

You're welcome. Don't hesitate to PM me if you ever need fanfic advice.

 

[Nelo Angelo]

hey Rika! you made a fic. cool, its based on the FF7 story and its after DoC, my fav game.
openings pretty good for a short one.
yeah look around like Double F said and i know you'll get better.
im keepin my eye out on this one. good luck.

 

[Rika17]

thanks, i haven't played ff7 in long while so i forgot what went on, though i have DoG, but there are some parts of the game i didn't get in the ff7 series, i want my character to go back to the same places that cloud went to when he went on his journey, for instants what was the name of town that cloud and gang went to when cloud told his story of septhiroth??

 

[Rika17]

You're welcome. Don't hesitate to PM me if you ever need fanfic advice.

kay, i will, you can count on it:thumbup:

 

[Nelo Angelo]

the town was called Kalm. i know everythin on ff7 Rika. need any assistance i'll be there to help.

 

[Rika17]

Thanks, now on with the story!!!
Chapter 1:
Enter Sukie, The Greatest Mechanic Ever!!!

The sun was shinning and the sky was a perfect blue
On the land, a man with blond spiky hair wearing sunglasses, rode on plains with his 4 wheeler motorcyle gleamering in the sun
It was another day at work for him, for his job was to delivery anything that you ask for, wheather it be a package or a message, it would be sure to reach it's destination, Strife Delievery Service was his job's name and him being the owner of the company it's was his responsible to see that every package reached the sender, during rain or shine, your package will come to you.
Today's delivery was in a small town called Kalm, it was a peaceful place, where a chocobo ranch stood outside the town, here the people where kind folk and welcome you with open arms, but now that midgar was destroyed more people began to live here and slowly the town began to expand and grow as the population grew.
The spiky blonde finally reached the town, he got off his bike and carried a brown package under his arms
He walked into the town and saw all the bustling people going here and there, talking to one another as smiles appeared on their faces
The blonde smiled, knowing that there was finally peace in the world, though the last time he came here the world wasn't as serene as it was before, back then it was ominous and full of peril, but thanks to him and several of his good friends the world was at peace and complete with happiness
The blonde sighed with relief and close his eyes
"It's good to be back here in such a long time, the people here are soo happy and full of peace," he thought
As he was taking in the fine atmosphere of the town, a girl with long black hair with glasses on came running towards the blonde and bumped into him
The blonde man dropped the package as the girl with long black hair and glasses fell backwards to the ground
"Ouch!" said the girl
The man went over to her to see if she was alright
"Are you alright?" he said
The girl sat up and rub her head and look up to the blonde man with anger in her eyes
"Why don't you watch were your going"
She quickly got up and continue on running
The blond man look at her with dissappointment
"Uhh...your welcome,"
He got to his feet and dusted his pants and pick up the package that dropped, then he look back at to where the girl ran off to
"I guess, not everyone here is as happy as i thought," he said and continue on walking to deliver the package

 

[Nelo Angelo]

hehe...cloud. im likin this so far. brings back some great memories. excellent work rika, i'll be lookin out for the next chapters.

 

[Rika17]

thanks, i'm planning to put the orginal characters in my story along with some new ones

 

[Nelo Angelo]

i just cant wait to see vincent.
so that girl was sukie was it.

 

[Rika17]

giggle, you'll just i have to wait and read, giggles
Back to the story
Chapter 1

The Blonde man walk at the end of town to deliver the package, at the end of the town was garage called Kalm's Autoshop, it was a small shop not as big as the other shops that the blonde went to, to get his bike fix up but pretty well structured
"I guess this is the place," he said
The man enter the shop, inside the smell of oil and trasmission fluid filled up the shop, a few automobiles were park inside with hoods up, and several tools were on the floor
Inside the shop a women with long black wavy hair sat at a desk doing some paperwork
The man went over to her
"Um...hello there,"
The women looked up and smiled at him
"Oh...hello, may i help you?"
"Uhh...yes, i'm here to deliver a package for..."
The blonde man looked at the name on the package
"uhh...sukie...?"
The women smiled at him
"Oh...she not here right now, she left a few minutes ago, but i can take the package for her, i'm her big sister, Mina"
The man looked at the women
"oh...okay then,"
The blonde handed her that package and gave her a clipboard
"Just sign here,please,"
Mina toke the package and signed the clipboard
"here you go and thank you for the package,"
she gave the man back the board
The man smiled
"your welcome, have a nice day," he said
"You too," Mina replied and wave at the man as he left
The man walk out of the shop and head back to his bike, he got on his bike and turn it on, but suddenly the bike went dead and the ignitnion wouldn't turn on
"No, not now,"
He tried to turn it on again and again but it the engine wouldn't turn on, the man sighed
"Great..."
The man looked at the end of town saw the autoshop
"Well...I guess, i'm just gonna have to take it to the shop"
The man got off his bike and pulled it into town and straight to the shop

 

[Nelo Angelo]

aw come on make em a bit longer. i get really into it, cuz i can imagine it in my head, but then its finished. make the next chap a long one, i think this is a good fic.

 

[Rika17]

alright, it just, i like to take my time, and i'm still thinking of what should i put in next
Chapter1

The blonde man pull into the shop with his bike by his side
"Hello?" he asked looking around to find the same women on the desk
The women looked up to see the man again
"Oh hello again, do you need any help?"
The man looked at his bike and then back at her
"Well...umm...yes...sorry to bother you...but my bike...sort of went dead on me,"
The women look at him in sorrow
"Oh my...that's terrible, here why don't you put your bike in the garage, the mechanic should be here any minute now,"
the blonde man nodded
"Thanks i appreicate it,"
He toke his bike to the garage and set it to where are the other vechiles were, he then went to the desk were the women sat in and toke a seat by her desk
He then turn to her
"So where is the mec..."
Just the man was rudly innterupted by another female voice
"HEY MINA! HAS MY PACKAGE COME IN YET, CAUSE I REALLY NEED IT!!!"
Mina and the blonde turn to look at a girl with long black hair and glasses
The blonde man stared at the girl and thought to himself
"Hey, it's that girl that bumped into earliar,"
"Oh Sukie, welcome back" said Mina
The young girl just brush her off with a quick response
"Yeah, yeah, where my package?"
"Oh right," Mina went under the desk and picked up the package
The girl toke the package
"Ah thanks" Sukie went for the door
"Sukie! Wait!" Said Mina
Sukie stop right at the door and turn her head around
"Whaat? Can't you see that i'm in rush here?"
Mina just stood still
"I know and i can see that, but you have a customer,"
Mina pointed in the direction of the blonde man
Suki went into shock
"It's YOU!" Suki pointed her finger at him
Mina just looked at both of them and smiled
"Ah soo you two know each other?"
The blonde man and sukie just stared at each other
"YOU, you were the one that bumped into me!"
The blonde man just sat there wide eye
"If I may correct the problem here, you were the one who bumped into me,"
Sukie just shoke her head
"Nooo, you were the one who bumped into me, you were just standing there in a daze,"
The blonde man stood up and just fire back at her
"You were the one running, you should of watch were you were going!"
Sukie threw down her package and went towards the man
"At least I don't stand in a daze and wait for people to steal my wallet!"
The man walk towards her
"At least i have the couresty to say excuse me, when i'm in rush!"
Sukie was in the man face
"Well at least i move out of the way, when i see a rush hour!"
The man was in sukie face now
"Well at i have the privilege, of asking someone if there okay when they fell down, like you did!"
They two of them just kept going at it until Mina couldn't take it anymore
"QQUUIIEETT!!!"
They both stop bickering at each other and turn to look at Mina
Mina clear her throat
"Sorry, but you two really needed to stop,"
Sukie put her hands behind her head
"I don't see why you have to apologize, Mina, it was absolutely this man's fault"
The blonde man turn to sukie with anger in his eyes
"My fault, anyone with eyes can see it was mostly your..."
Mina got fustrated again
"ENOUGH!!!"
Sukie and man turn their attention to Mina
Mina had her hands on her hips
"I swear, the both of you act like brother and sister,"
Suki just turn around and went for her package
"Whatever," she said and pick up her package and went for the door
Just then Mina stop her
"Just wait right there sukie! You have a job to do!"
"And just what is that, i'm already busy as it is!"
Mina pointed to the man
"This man's bike has broken and you need to fix it,"
Sukie glared at the man
"Whaat!?"
The man also had the same expression
"Wat a second..."
The man turn to Mina
"Are you telling me that this girl is going to fix my bike?"
Mina looked at the man with a sure look
"I'm sorry i forgot to tell you,"
The man looked at her with wide expression
"So you mean..."
"Yep,"
They both turn to suki and mina introduce her to him
"I would like you to meet Sukie, the mechanic of Kalm's Autoshop"