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Chapter One
Suchii sat up and looked around.”Two years.”He dusted off his uniform.”Blue and gray,what were they thinking?”He walked to the balcony and ran his fingers through his greasy brown hair.He watched as soldiers in the same ugly uniform trained.”The Keyblader,but why?”He muttered.In the distance he heard a horn blow.Battle.Great.He swung his sheathed sword over his shoulder and ran.He went through the marvelous hallways of the castle,but didn’t pay attention.Suchii ran for the “Wide Field”.
Suchii drew his sword as he looked at the enemies.Shadows,Neo Shadows,Behemoths.Great.He charged at the enemies,cutting through the Shadows.He reached a man with a Royal blue and almost black uniform.”Sir…Fight…Alone…Behemoth.”The man nodded.He slashed at Heartless.Suchii ran at a Behemoth,preparing to jump.As he reached one of the giants,he jumped,but only feet off the ground he was slashed by a Neo Shadow.”OOF!”
He rolled over onto his back,only to see dozens of Heartless standing over him.They moved away and the Behemoth moved for the kill.Suchii’s eyes swiveled from left to right,looking for his sword.The Behemoth got ready to fire.As Suchii looked at the purple giant,he had one thought:
Dead.
Chapter One
Suchii sat up and looked around.”Two years.”He dusted off his uniform.”Blue and gray,what were they thinking?”He walked to the balcony and ran his fingers through his greasy brown hair.He watched as soldiers in the same ugly uniform trained.”The Keyblader,but why?”He muttered.In the distance he heard a horn blow.Battle.Great.He swung his sheathed sword over his shoulder and ran.He went through the marvelous hallways of the castle,but didn’t pay attention.Suchii ran for the “Wide Field”.
Suchii drew his sword as he looked at the enemies.Shadows,Neo Shadows,Behemoths.Great.He charged at the enemies,cutting through the Shadows.He reached a man with a Royal blue and almost black uniform.”Sir…Fight…Alone…Behemoth.”The man nodded.He slashed at Heartless.Suchii ran at a Behemoth,preparing to jump.As he reached one of the giants,he jumped,but only feet off the ground he was slashed by a Neo Shadow.”OOF!”
He rolled over onto his back,only to see dozens of Heartless standing over him.They moved away and the Behemoth moved for the kill.Suchii’s eyes swiveled from left to right,looking for his sword.The Behemoth got ready to fire.As Suchii looked at the purple giant,he had one thought:
Dead.