Fanfiction ► First KH poem

[~*Kamberlyn*~]

Don't be afraid

The darkness is near,
Light seems out of sight.
You're alone with your fears,
It's as empty as night.
But don't be afraid,
There's a light burning bright.
It's always been there,
You just have to find it.​

How do you like?

 

[yado]

Not bad i didnt like the last line for some reason but good

 

[~*Kamberlyn*~]

Yea, I know, most of it rhymes but that...it's eh.

 

[Atnihs]

atnihs:*sniff*that was beautiful.
shinta: suck it up!


nice poem kam.

 

[Lost Heaven]

That's really good, but for some reason I don't really like the last line either. But anyway, nice job.

 

[~*Kamberlyn*~]

Maybe I should make a "It's great but I don't like the last line" club. Then we can have jackets! =D

 

[the 4th Islander]

*claps* yay!!!! woooooo!!!!!!!! awsome! I loved it!

the reason people don't like the last line is probly cause it doesn't really ryme/rime (can't spell)

 

[yado]

SWEET JACKETS. are you gonna make any more. JACKETS RULE!

 

[JakeBlade]

That's a really good peom!(Better than anything I could write)

 

[Lost Heaven]

I don't know why I don't like the last line, but bcuz it didnt rhyme is not the reason. There are a lot of poems where the last line doesn't rhyme and it still sounds beautiful.

 

[Niwa]

I like it but the last line no likey

 

[baller4eva14]

that was good do another