Fallen Rose

[Anzai Koyanagi]

She loves me, she loves me not
The rose is plucked, the petals dropped
and one by one they disappear,
Fading to the ground

You start with hope, and believe
but before the end you want to leave
You feel as if your promise
will fade when it's done

She loves me, she loves me not
It's near the end, your heart stops
as the final petal, falls to the ground.
You look down at it, in silence

Though the flower was just a stub
two petals fell, leaving the nub
So now, what was the outcome
Is it love, or loneliness?

 

[Enchanted Rose]

Quite good tbh.

It's a great thing to write a poem about, as plucking a flower is highly symbolic. I think its perfectly the right length, and its nice that is so simple.

3rd stanza was the best, 2nd could have been a lot better.

Your bizarre rhyme scheme does make it flow less well, however. But I think you were definitely right in making the final couplet unrhyming just to unsettle the reader with the question "is it love, or loneliness?"