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Fanfiction ► Chocolate Brown



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revengematron3

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Oh good God. I can't believe I wrote such a... such a thing of evil! Pure evil! Please forgive me! I'm so scared I might not ever come back to see the responses EVER. Oh merciful god, have mercy on my soul...

God: NO

*Cries*

I basicaly just slapped this on here, so i didn't go through the small pains of italicising or bolding or anything like that. I'm that lazy. And after re-reading this I have come to the conclusion that I must die. Kill me now.

Genre: Romance/general
Pairing: SxK
Section: Kingdom Hearts
Rating: Teen/ PG-13 (Just to be safe...)
Short One-Shot


Chocolate Brown

Brown.

Chocolate was brown.

Sora’s hair was brown.

When she realized this small similarity it made her compare the two: Sora and chocolate.

Sora was always there to comfort you.

So was chocolate; Sora can’t always be in your pocket.

Sora talks to you; the things he says sometimes makes you want to melt. He’ll last for the rest of your life and after.

Chocolate says nothing. Chocolate melts. It won’t ever last.

Chocolate will disappear into your mouth in minutes.

Sora won’t leave until you want him too.

You never do.

Sora wanted to spend the rest of your lives together.

Chocolate doesn’t.

Sora cares.

Chocolate couldn’t care less.

But…

Chocolate was right here and now. Sora wasn’t.

He wouldn’t be for a long time.

A bite…

Chocolate tasted sweet and milky.

What would Sora…?

Kairi looked at her bitten piece of chocolate.

She had memories of Sora.

Of all the times they played…

Of all the times Riku would tease Sora…

Of all the times they sat together in the sun, enjoying life…

When she and Sora would talk during the setting sun and enjoy each other’s company…

She would just have memories of eating chocolate.

Kairi looked at the chocolate in her hand—at chocolate in general.

She loved chocolate.

But compared with a certain spiky-haired lazy bum…

She threw the chocolate into the ocean.

Kill me... NOW
 

Thelonepickle

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...

*eats a piece of chocolate*

Ummm... *kills*

Okay, now that that's outta the way, your fic was alright. I mean, it was literate and stuff. It wasn't really anything special, though. I mean, it could've been more descriptive, but I guess it was alright. Just a little... bland. ._.

So yeah. Not bad. Not good.
 

warboyX

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*Catches Chocolate*
mmmm.... chocolate... Drools*

this fan fic is kinda like a poem dont ya think?

It was kinda weird and depressing
 
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