ok my story is about Namine and Roxas. Namine is the governer's daughter who can't enjoy her life because she has no freedom. Roxas is one of the governer's secret agents. When Namine sneaks out to go to a concert halfway around the world,it's Roxas' job to look after her. Can this party girl get along with this cool talk no-it-all pretty boy? Will love blossom for these two? Find out!
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I could see this working as a comedy. Is it a comedy? *hopes* Lol.
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Sounding good already!!!! Can't wait for it XD
i can't wait either.... my conputer is retarded....
thank you,thank you,thank you for posting.
here's the first chapter
Chapter 1 ~ Why not
Hmm,What to wear,what to wear. Namine was trying to decide what to wear tonight for her date.She was thinking about getting serious with her so-to-be boyfriend.
I can't wait to get to the restant.
She kept thinking about Wyatt taking her in his arms and ask her to be his girlfriend.
Ohh,now if only I knew what to wear tonight.
She decided to wear her little black dress with a white sweater and black high heels.
Just as she came down the stairs, Wyatt's car pulled out in front of the house.
She jumped in the car and kissed Wyatt on the cheek.
" It's nice to see you,too." he seemed jumpy when she kissed him.
" Well we should be going." Wyatt and Namine drove around in his car for half-an-hour.
When they got to the restant, Wyatt got out of the car and opened the door for Namine
"Thank you" she told him.
They walked into the restant and the waitress took them to their table in the back.
" I'll have a coke and she'll have an ice tea." The waitress took their order and walked off.
" So you wanted to talk." Wyatt was trying to avoid her.
" Uhh,we can talk about it later."
"Okay" Namine replied. The waitress came back with their drinks and walked off again.
" Now we can talk ,Namine."
"Okay"
" Now, Namine, your very special to me,but..."
"But" Namine knew what was going to happen.
",but I can't stand seeing the governer's daughter,so I want to break up."
Namine felt like she was going to cry.
" I'm really sor-" just then, a guy in black came over.
"Okay, Namine it's time to go."
"Fine Axel" Namine stood up and walked out of the restant. She got into the black truck and didn't say a word all the way.
When they got to the house, Namine jumped out of the truck and stormed into the house.
" There she goes again."
"You know Axel, you don't need to crash my dates all the time."
"I don't want to, I have to and your father said-" Namine couldn't take anymore and ran to her room.
Why me and why not someone else?
here's the first chapter
Chapter 1 ~ Why not
Hmm,What to wear,what to wear. Namine was trying to decide what to wear tonight for her date.She was thinking about getting serious with her so-to-be boyfriend.
I can't wait to get to the restant.
She kept thinking about Wyatt taking her in his arms and ask her to be his girlfriend.
Ohh,now if only I knew what to wear tonight.
She decided to wear her little black dress with a white sweater and black high heels.
Just as she came down the stairs, Wyatt's car pulled out in front of the house.
She jumped in the car and kissed Wyatt on the cheek.
" It's nice to see you,too." he seemed jumpy when she kissed him.
" Well we should be going." Wyatt and Namine drove around in his car for half-an-hour.
When they got to the restant, Wyatt got out of the car and opened the door for Namine
"Thank you" she told him.
They walked into the restant and the waitress took them to their table in the back.
" I'll have a coke and she'll have an ice tea." The waitress took their order and walked off.
" So you wanted to talk." Wyatt was trying to avoid her.
" Uhh,we can talk about it later."
"Okay" Namine replied. The waitress came back with their drinks and walked off again.
" Now we can talk ,Namine."
"Okay"
" Now, Namine, your very special to me,but..."
"But" Namine knew what was going to happen.
",but I can't stand seeing the governer's daughter,so I want to break up."
Namine felt like she was going to cry.
" I'm really sor-" just then, a guy in black came over.
"Okay, Namine it's time to go."
"Fine Axel" Namine stood up and walked out of the restant. She got into the black truck and didn't say a word all the way.
When they got to the house, Namine jumped out of the truck and stormed into the house.
" There she goes again."
"You know Axel, you don't need to crash my dates all the time."
"I don't want to, I have to and your father said-" Namine couldn't take anymore and ran to her room.
Why me and why not someone else?
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Okay I know it's short but this is my first story so be nice.
Awwwwwwwwwwww.....sucks to be Namine!
Lol great chapter, not bad for your first!
Lol great chapter, not bad for your first!
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*Waves at 'princess of heart*
Anywho, on to the fic. XD
Nicely done, but I'd suggest typing your chapter out in MSWord before you post, to avoid mistakes. And use paragraphs where applicable.
Keep writing, practise makes perfect, 'kay? :3
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Anywho, on to the fic. XD
Nicely done, but I'd suggest typing your chapter out in MSWord before you post, to avoid mistakes. And use paragraphs where applicable.
Keep writing, practise makes perfect, 'kay? :3
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*waves back at snowdog*
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thank you both, I would like to thank snowdog because she is a wonderful writer and it means so much to me that you read my story. Thank you for reading `princessofheart.
Aww you're welcome! Can't wait for the next chapter
yeah I was thinking about making the next chapter about Roxas. By the way, Roxas is going to sing some of his voice actor's songs later in the story lol (Jesse McCartney is so cute)
YAY!!! Roxas!!!
*steals Roxas*
The sad thing is I don't know why I did that:toungesmile:
Well you can have him back for the next chapter.
*gives Roxas back*
*steals Roxas*
The sad thing is I don't know why I did that:toungesmile:
Well you can have him back for the next chapter.
*gives Roxas back*
thank you for giving him back,but I won't put the next chapter up until we have ten people reading this or we hit 40 post.
Meh. I like it, but, hopefully, there WILL be some decent fighting. That's what I really enjoy.
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^ I doubt it, this is sounding like a Romance fic! :3
Princess Namine, you read my fic? Wow, thanks a lot! ^-^; And it's no problemo. Anytime, 'kay?
Princess Namine, you read my fic? Wow, thanks a lot! ^-^; And it's no problemo. Anytime, 'kay?
Well, I like fighting. Most of my fanfic so far has been related to fighting, but there is love interest.
By the way, snowdog, I don't think I ever thanked you for giving me fanfic tips and for making a character, so thanks.
By the way, snowdog, I don't think I ever thanked you for giving me fanfic tips and for making a character, so thanks.
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Awww, thanks! :3
Back on topic... new chapter? lol.
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Back on topic... new chapter? lol.
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By the way, I wasn't saying I don't like it, I just like fighting. It sort of appeals more to boys when there is added fighting, as girls like some romance. Just try to balance it out a tad.
Keep it up!
Keep it up!
I will say girls like romance because I'm a hopeless romantic. Also snowdog your a great writer.
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