Fanfiction ► Without The Heartless (AGAIN)

[darkriku14]

dun duun duuuun! wat will happen next? Post more soon!!

 

[King Cloud]

a drug dealer....wow.....what an amazing father figure XD loved the chapter, Gabriel

 

[Monkey]

Bleh, I dont like this fanfic at all. o.o You havn't gotten ONE charectar right. >.< You could still maintain funiness if you used real humor instead of slapstick, and actually maintained the charecters personalities. x_x;

 

[SoulEater]

Good chapter!

Akira's Grandfather is a crackhead drug dealer, how nice -_-;

Post more soon!

 

[Dread]

Post soon gabe...cant wait =P

 

[Cloudisawesum1]

Dang!This is better than i thought!Tyra and mMyras dad is a crackhead.lol

 

[TwilightBlade370]

this is a really good but really really really long story . keep writing tho.

 

[SoulEater]

Ya know it kinda makes you wonder.

What is Tyra and Myra's mom like? Is she a darranged crackhead too?

And heres another thing. When you were describing Tyra and Myra, you said they were like unbelievably hot girls. How did those kind of girls come out of a crackhead's wife? Oh well, I guess we will never know.

 

[Thelonepickle]

Bleh, I dont like this fanfic at all. o.o You havn't gotten ONE charectar right. >.< You could still maintain funiness if you used real humor instead of slapstick, and actually maintained the charecters personalities. x_x;

Sorry Monkey butt, but we stopped caring about other people's opinions on this fic when we got to page 37... So yeah...

Gabe, your sig is done!

 

[KingGabriel_VXI]

ROTFLMFAO!!!! LOL MONKEH! Mad cause I wont read your f**king fanfic? Aww dont be mad monkey. Lets listen now;1) I never meant for this to be funny; its a romance. It was never SUPPOSED to be funny at all. 2) I dont even know what slap stick is! 3) I didnt say you had to read it, did I? Unlike you, I didnt beg. =\ 4) Why keep the character's identities?! WHY?! Thats boring. Its a fanfiction, meaning I choose how it is. I choose the characters, I chose the story line, I choose how I want it to go. So I TOTALLY TURNED THE MUTHAF**KING TABLES AND THEN BAM! I put some Gabby in it. 5) Alot of people dont like romances. Alot of people dont like Gabby, but the fourty somethin otha people posting in her do. =P




Now.
Shock chappy as I like to call em.

Eugene: hugs Tyra) I missed you so much!
Myra groans and sits on the couch with Akira. Riku sits next to her.
Eugene: So, Myra...You picked up a pro wrestling wanna be?
Riku: What?!
Myra: Don’t start this, Eugene.
Eugene: You even have his baby?! Didn’t your mother teach you anything before she croaked?
Myra: Well, maybe I did it on purpose!
Eugene: Why didn’t you marry someone smart? Wakka is smart. Tyra found her a good man!
Tyra: COUGH!!!!
Myra: Riku is smart!
Eugene: What the hell kind of name is that?
…I would rather have Riku as a name than Wakka. Wakka…sounds like stupidity.
Akira: Leave daddy alone!
Eugene: Aww, aint that cute! Lemme hold 'er!
Myra frowns and refuses to give Akira up.
Eugene: Aww, come on!
Myra: holds Akira)
Eugene: Fine. Be that way… So, are you still stupid?
Myra: clenches teeth) I'm’ not stupid, Eugene.
Eugene: Last time I checked, you are supposed to call me dad.
Myra: Dads don't beat their children.
Eugene: You brought that on yourself, Myra. Besides, children deserve to be slapped around a few times, right Riku?
Riku: No.
Meanwhile… Eugene’s cigarette outside is catching fire to his house.
Myra: I never did anything!
Eugene: You just don't remember because you’re so slow!
Riku: Hey! What's your problem?!
Myra: I remember it perfectly!
Eugene: You don't even remember my name!
Akira wanders off to the bathroom while everyone is yelling.
Suddenly an explosion stops the yelling and the house catches on fire.
Akira: Gasp!
Akira's skinny butt gets stuck in the toilet.
Myra: Gasp!
Riku: What the hell?! Come on!
Riku grabs Myra and carries her out.
Eugene runs out the back.
He stops by the bathroom.
Akira: Help me!!!
Eugene: ... (runs out)
Akira: Mommy!
Eugene comes out by everyone else.
Myra: Why didn’t you get my baby?!!!!!
Eugene: …She’s your kid.
Riku: You son of a bitch!
Riku runs back inside to get Akira.
Riku: Akira!!!
Akira is pouring tears.
Akira: DADDY! (cries)
A spark flies into Riku's eye.
Riku: Agh!! (rubs eyes) Akira?
Akira: cries) DADDY!!!!
Riku: rubs eye) Where are you?!
Smoke rises everywhere. A cloud of smoke smothers Akira.
Akira: coughs) Daddy...
Akira slowly passes out. Riku takes a deep breath and runs into the bathroom to get Akira. He carries her out.

 

[Thelonepickle]

AAAAAAAAH! Well, Riku's actually standing up for his family now, that's good! Sora, shoot Eugene! Now!

Ahem... Nice chap, Gabe! Such a cliff hanger! Poor little Akira! My sis says "hi."

 

[dual_wielder]

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO...................AKIRA *WEEPS* no akira can't die, she's cute! and that Eugene guy is soooo gay like Cid! XD yey riku loves his family!

 

[lilazngurl963]

yay! go riku! u the man!!

 

[KingGabriel_VXI]

Wow. xD I didnt notice hoe "brave" Riku was acting.

 

[Thelonepickle]

Where's your new sig, Gabe?!

But yesh, Riku's being plenty brave compared to how Wakka was when Sora and Kairi were in the water being attacked by sharks...

EDIT: You put your new sig up! Yay! I'm glad you like it!

 

[eughey]

i love this fic, i am gonna hug it and squeeze it and call it george.

by the way by any chance did eugene come from eughey? ur #1 fan?

probably not, eugene sounds like the stereotypical crackhead abusive father. Just say yes though to make me happy.

say it!!!! why wont u say it??!!! *sob*

 

[lilazngurl963]

eughey.. please dont cry....

 

[KingGabriel_VXI]

Oh naw. I told you, I wrote this a year ago and I didnt edit anything as far as names or anything like that. Eugene came from the typical nerd name. I wanted the nerdiest name ever to make his first impression a BAD one. ANd I didnt get it from eughey, I dont even know how to pronounce that.

 

[Katattack]

Uhh......I hate the name Martin.

For me that's one of the worst.

 

[eughey]

i dont know how to pronounce it either..........

i just wrote some letters and thot it sounded good