Fanfiction ► The New Angel

[Avalanche]

yes if only life was more like anime...
good chapter

 

[Darkness of White]

thanks Colin, i just wish more people would read it and tell me what they think, i want to get better at this, but if i dont get comments from readers, then i cant really better myself

 

[Ban Mido]

Is this really Jen? You seem to have way too much skill to be the Jen I know!

lol, anywho, great job!

 

[Darkness of White]

really? you think so? wow thanks! i just write what i see in my mind...i guess i really owe my speech teacher one, he is the one who said that my speeches are always really well written.

 

[Nelo Angelo]

You are definetly talented at this. Its really good, honestly. Keep it up :thumbup:

 

[Avalanche]

i hate short series but i dont enjoy long ones either
*points at naruto*

 

[Darkness of White]

you finished D.N.Angel then? does the story make more sence?

 

[Avalanche]

yes a a lot more.....
i just see one problem with your ff after i've seen it
in episode 13 when daisuke goes 20 years into future his son is daitai (sp?)
but it is a fan fic your writting

 

[Darkness of White]

its an alternate future, he changed it when Dark was sealed. Dark and Daisuke made the promise that they were inside eachother, so when Derek died, Dark took his body to give them a son again.

 

[Avalanche]

okay my dad might make me get off soon

 

[Darkness of White]

does that explain how the story is different from the series ok?

 

[Avalanche]

yes it does at first i was like who the heck where these ppl(in your ff)
now .....gah i forgot

 

[Darkness of White]

lol, well there is going to be a new character or 2 in the next chapter, and the return of an old one

 

[Avalanche]

... am i maybe one??? okay now i really have to leave

 

[Darkness of White]

no, you arnt, it was finished before you asked about it, sorry, maybe chapter 5 or 6?

 

[Avalanche]

okay you have a point
goodnight
... we both need to get on eairlier

 

[Darkness of White]

well this can be concitered spamming, so lets keep it to the FF please, i dont want this thread closed

 

[Avalanche]

alright sorry so how many chapters have you written?

 

[Darkness of White]

currently, i have 4 complete chapters and im working on the 5th

 

[Avalanche]

you mentioned that the 4th chapter would have two new characters and one old
how do the fit in with the story?