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Nelo Angelo

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seriously soki, you like it? thanks man that means a lot. i shud have the next chap up today, bare with me.
 

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thanks again you guys, you rock.
im workin on the next chap, hopefully more people read this.
 

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thanks DJ, theres gonna be a few more. the next chapters gonna hav a big surprise for nelo. wait for it.
 

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Hey nelo! This is a pretty interesting fiction you have going here. I'm enjoying it ^_^

There are some grammatical errors here and there, as well as some missing punctuation and run-on-errors (extended sentences which should have been two individual sentences)

“Okay, stop, you’re good,”
Hehe, that made me giggle. Reminds me a bit of the Matrix.

Anywho, I like where you're heading. Just remember to watch what you write and NOT to rush through your story.

<3
 

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thanks D, im definetly gonna take those comments on board.
gonna improve on the next chapters. gonna have the next chap later on today.
thanks again.
 

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Hehe, that made me giggle. Reminds me a bit of the Matrix.<3

*cough Seraph cough*

You've really suprised me. I thought that this story had promise from what I could gather from the opening, but I wasn't sure if you could capitalize. I humbly apologize Angelo-sama.

Please continue writing this. I especially enjoyed the battle scenes.
 

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Wow, that right there just screamed matrix to me. But, it was nicely written.
I think I might now where mitsunare comes from, but I wont spam this thread with that kind of junk.

I anxiously await the next installment.
 

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thanks suzaka.
(yeah, that was another matrix element but dont worry thats probably the reference to the matrix. i did get the name mitsunare from you-know-where, but the characters totally different.)

should have the next chap up tomorrow.
 
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That last chapter seemed just a little cliche to me.

No offense though.
 
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