Fanfiction ► The Forgotten Warrior

[Nelo Angelo]

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[Suzaku]

Interesting premise. Please continue to write this, it could turn into an exceptional original fic.

Longer posts please!

 

[Nelo Angelo]

thanks man, i really dont know how you guys will react. that means a lot sayin that. i'll try and make a longer chapter.

 

[Suzaku]

Anytime. Come on people, tell him what you think.

 

[snowdog]

Very short but nicely written. <3

 

[Nelo Angelo]

yeah it is short but it was sort of an opening more than a chapter. the next ones gonna be longer. i really hope an awesome writer like you likes it snow.

 

[snowdog]

Aw, thanks!

Yeah, it's more of an opening. In that case, I shall be awaiting the first chapter. <3

 

[Nelo Angelo]

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[Ultima Star]

WOWhmy: AMAZING! NELO! it's is good and I like the first post too...I read it completely XD write more when you can!

 

[Nelo Angelo]

thanks FK, realy appreciate that. im gonna start writing the next chapter. hmm...not many people have read it yet. i'll wait a bit longer. thanks agen.

 

[Nelo Angelo]

hmm....no more views? come on.
i'll continue this story for those who liked it so far.
next chapter will be up soon today.

(sorry for double)

 

[The Merovingian]

Yo this is great Nelo man. Im impressed. cant wait for the next chapter.

 

[Nelo Angelo]

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[DJ GloriX]

Ah FInally read them, it's interesting, but for me a bit hard to follow sometimes but don't worry I get it, Getting very interesting now! ^_^ Nelo is cool, Kinda find it funny that his white mage is a coward XD Shouldn't a white mage...be at his fighter side healing him in need? XD
Keep it up hope to read the next chapter soon! ^_^

 

[snowdog]

Tis good Nelo ^.^ Just nitpicking, but keep an eye on grammar and punctuation. It wavers a little. Oh, and don't put "50", or "7". Write "fifty" or "seven".

<3 <3

 

[Nelo Angelo]

thanks snow, thanks Dj.
yeah i'll keep that in mind snow, thanks for that.

 

[Tyler Durden]

It's a pretty good story man.



Some things seem a little...familiar, but it's your story. Can't wait for another chapter.

 

[Nelo Angelo]

thanks kensei bro. familiar eh?

 

[Tyler Durden]

As soon as I read the thing about seven swords, it reminded me of the First Tsurugi. Mogi seems a lot like a moogle. Even the name is alike. And the cloak/cowl thing... it screams Auron or Vincent to me.


But like I said, it is an original story, and a well written one at that.

 

[Nelo Angelo]

yeah i did take all those elements, your quite right kensei-san.
(my neloangelo guy is a cross between vincent and vergil, my favourite eva game characters, but with a few extras of course)

i'll be postin the next chap today inshallah. i just passed my drivin test and im feelin great.