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Need a Name
I love the way you described the inside of the cafe with it's customers. Seriously, that had my mouth dropping open, because it was well done. What intrigues me the most is how quickly the conversation changes. Or the fact Stephanie still can't get his name. It feels like there's the potential of something starting between the two, except it feels more like friendship a tiny bit. Or that the guy himself, has a way about him in avoiding questions and creating new ones with that silver tongue of his. Including the fact that he gets the girl to reluctantly agree to his whims. With that said, I'm impressed, because it's not often I come across that type of character in most stories.
Spaghetti
I feel like at the end there it was a metaphor with the spaghetti and alfredo sauce. I really liked how much Gracie was concerned about Sam being late, because it's easy to relate to that in a real life situation or scenario. Of course, Sam leaving the hospital after being banged up from an accident wasn't the wisest thing to do, but it isn't unheard of either. I really felt the genuine concern there, along with fear, because being in an accident can shake anyone up. So seeing Gracie comfort him was heart warming to me.
Red String
Wow, this took my breath away. I actually feel for her and the idea of a red string binding a person together in fate. No break up is easy nor is getting over a person you've created tons of memories with. In the end, it felt kind of hopeful, except it's really not. I know people in real life who actually feel that way, because the concept of a red string attaching you to someone is very real and it isn't easy to cut it apart. So I feel bad for the protagonist in this one. All in all, it feels like you pulled at my own heart strings with this one, Annoyance.
Fleeting Ghosts
I'd like to say we can escape from our ghosts, because as long as you give it power over you, it'll never leave you alone. I suppose that's like fighting your inner demon or ghosts you're running from. I like how you described it within the story, where the protagonist constantly sees the remnants of his ghost; while at the same time, pondering if he sees hers. I can see this being a battle of loss or a breakup though. I suppose it depends on how I'd like to interpret it. Gives my mind a lot to think on, which brings me great joy.
As for your haiku's, I like them a lot. I'm not really sure what to say about them, but some I find either empowering or inspirational too. And it feels like it's based on something real at times, but I might just be reading into it a bit more than usual. Overall, happy to catch up and read everything you've posted, Annoyance.
I love the way you described the inside of the cafe with it's customers. Seriously, that had my mouth dropping open, because it was well done. What intrigues me the most is how quickly the conversation changes. Or the fact Stephanie still can't get his name. It feels like there's the potential of something starting between the two, except it feels more like friendship a tiny bit. Or that the guy himself, has a way about him in avoiding questions and creating new ones with that silver tongue of his. Including the fact that he gets the girl to reluctantly agree to his whims. With that said, I'm impressed, because it's not often I come across that type of character in most stories.
Spaghetti
I feel like at the end there it was a metaphor with the spaghetti and alfredo sauce. I really liked how much Gracie was concerned about Sam being late, because it's easy to relate to that in a real life situation or scenario. Of course, Sam leaving the hospital after being banged up from an accident wasn't the wisest thing to do, but it isn't unheard of either. I really felt the genuine concern there, along with fear, because being in an accident can shake anyone up. So seeing Gracie comfort him was heart warming to me.
Red String
Wow, this took my breath away. I actually feel for her and the idea of a red string binding a person together in fate. No break up is easy nor is getting over a person you've created tons of memories with. In the end, it felt kind of hopeful, except it's really not. I know people in real life who actually feel that way, because the concept of a red string attaching you to someone is very real and it isn't easy to cut it apart. So I feel bad for the protagonist in this one. All in all, it feels like you pulled at my own heart strings with this one, Annoyance.
Fleeting Ghosts
I'd like to say we can escape from our ghosts, because as long as you give it power over you, it'll never leave you alone. I suppose that's like fighting your inner demon or ghosts you're running from. I like how you described it within the story, where the protagonist constantly sees the remnants of his ghost; while at the same time, pondering if he sees hers. I can see this being a battle of loss or a breakup though. I suppose it depends on how I'd like to interpret it. Gives my mind a lot to think on, which brings me great joy.
As for your haiku's, I like them a lot. I'm not really sure what to say about them, but some I find either empowering or inspirational too. And it feels like it's based on something real at times, but I might just be reading into it a bit more than usual. Overall, happy to catch up and read everything you've posted, Annoyance.