Had I not known this piece was influenced by that song, I wouldn't have been able to read that text... Unless it says something totally different ;-; Text placement is great, but I don't like the choice of font (actually I hate it and I think it's ugly). Also, I feel like the background is too sharp compared to the stock, which in turn feels too soft. I think it'd be better to reserve the grainy-texture that's causing the sharp feel in the background to specific areas of the background, such as the lighter areas and then make them more transparent/less noticeable in the darker areas. So pretty much instead of the grain having constant value everywhere, it works with the value of the rest of the bg.
That being said, maybe it'd be better to increase the difference in value for the background. Darken the dark areas a bit, especially if they're closer to a brighter effect. Creates a nice strong emphasis, and you can do this subtly so it doesn't dominate the piece either. Adding in some more minute shadows to the left of piece (immediate left of the orange ray of light) in that cloudy area might work too.
Now from what I see, you have some sort of light source shining down on her from the top of the piece, which I think would be better if the source was a tiny bit stronger, sort of to emphasize the stock itself.
Finally, I'm just taking some assumptions here, but I assume the rays of light are supposed to be cause of the distortion and kinks in her limbs right? If so, make them a bit stronger near her arms because if that is the effect you were going for, they're a bit too weak for what you were going for. They're strong as they get farther away from her, but dimmer the closer they are so I think the intensity should be done in the reverse effect.
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Despite all of that, I like it. Oh and you added an 's' to the end of 'bullet'. HAHAH GRAMMAR NAZI.
Edit: Oh and in the top left corner, that spherical effect you used. If you centralized that more, it might bring more cohesion to the piece. Right now, it kinda feels like it's just floating there and not really adding to the piece nor taking away from it. The other effects work because they surround the stock, but that one is kind of just... there.
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i think her face in the dupe at the bottom could be slightly more distorted, but not enough that you can't tell. IDK MANG
i'm tired of typing this post now ;-;
