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Well this marks a return to my active fanfic writing. as i present to you guys and gals. an introduction into my world of One Piece.
Chapter 00: Introduction


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Here's the official first chapter of my story. but unlike most of my stories the main characters don't appear right away. but this chapter is important you guys! So read it and don't skip it!


Chapter 01: The Marine Captain Roronoa Fuumiko

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I'm in love with this story already. Why? Because its One Piece related. I really like the introduction of characters, and feel familiar to them already. It's extremely interesting to see Fuumiko had made up her mind to become a marine, instead of a pirate like her father. I wonder why her dream was to be a marine from the start.

Now then, there are a lot of grammar mistakes to be seen, and a few spelling errors. You also need to use periods at the end of the sentences, the characters happen to speak in. Don't get me wrong, you told the story well. In the introduction, you have a lot of 'there' instead of 'their'. Next time you write, I hope you'll look here: http://forums.khinsider.com/creative-writing/182017-lets-talk-grammar.html

This way, you can use them more properly. C:
 
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ryaneden

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I'm in love with this story already. Why? Because its One Piece related. I really like the introduction of characters, and feel familiar to them already. It's extremely interesting to see Fuumiko had made up her mind to become a marine, instead of a pirate like her father. I wonder why her dream was to be a marine from the start.

Now then, there are a lot of grammar mistakes to be seen, and a few spelling errors. You also need to use periods at the end of the sentences, the characters happen to speak in. Don't get me wrong, you told the story well. In the introduction, you have a lot of 'there' instead of 'their'. Next time you write, I hope you'll look here: http://forums.khinsider.com/creative-writing/182017-lets-talk-grammar.html

This way, you can use them more properly. C:
Sorry for the spelling errors i was feeling good when i finished that up. also i used BGM from the series to help me write the chapters ^_^
 
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