Fanfiction ► never say (yes) . . .

[Mason Stark]

Okies... let me explain this before you start reading. xD; This is so very experimental. I have writer's block... but this plot bunny has been running around, SCREAMING at me to write about it. So, I did... but not in a normal boring way.

I got bored with writing in a standard format? <3 So, let's try this!

Also, if you read my KH fanfic, this actually has NOTHING to do with Pieces of Heart. Rena and Aoi are both in it... but this is based more on what happens in my roleplay, Traces of Aftermath. Or what I want to happen to Rena and Aoi. xD; I dunno if it'll happen, so I'm writing it here!

Let me know if the style is too weird... I might not do more of this, but if it's good, I might! xD;

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click... click...

Each footstep felt heavy. Slow... and steady...

The girl tempted to be hasty and follow the group before her, but why? Why keep close to your friends?

When you're curious...

they don't matter...​

click... click... click...

When you're curious...

they walk away...​

fading out of sight...​

Her deep blue orbs slipped past the walls...

"Hm."

Those eyes darted down. Staring at her chest... at her hand over her heart.

It was as if it had crawled there on its own; subconsciously, she presumed. A firm frown pressed into her features. Her nails tempted to dig into her chest...

to keep her heart safe...

To keep it safe from that pang. That feeling...

something familiar here...

but what?​

Her footsteps...

halting.​

Her eyes...

darting.​

"..."​

Home... is a funny word. She never learned its meaning... but she knew it.

it was there. in her chest. she knew what home was.

Are you home?​

She scoffed.

No. It wasn't home. It was just a word... not a place, a thing. not a feeling... or thought...

This girl only wandered.

Scum.

That's what they said.

Refugees are nothing more than scum.​

Lying there in the street...

with nowhere to go...​

Until he opened her eyes.​

This town is a fake. A lie.

a fake?

Of course.​

This world never treated refugees badly... yet there was no one here in the first place.​

...fake?

Didn't you hear me the first time?​

mhm...​

"Of course you did."

A... voice?

She was cautious... turning slowly...

"...or else you wouldn't remember that little chat."

i know that voice...​

"Ah..."

it's his voice...​

A step back.

"Aoi."​

Her sapphire orbs bore into his emerald pupils.

her fists grew tighter.​

knuckles turning white.​

i'm not scared of you.​

"What'd you want?"

what a malicious smirk.

his thin lips spread apart.​

with a malicious grin.​

standing tall.​

towering over the girl.

i'm never scared of you...​

"Reminiscing?"

A blank stare from the brunette.

"...huh?"

A tap on his temple with his finger.



"Means thinking about the past."

"Oh..."

The brunette glanced away from the man.

looking so short in comparison.​

and silly with her blue-hued clothes and big shoes.​

Clammy fists inching to fumble with the hem of her t-shirt.

"Hm."​

Those blue eyes forced back into the man.

him with that stupid cloak... and clunky boots...​

emotastic blonde locks with a messy bald spot.​

"Hm..."

eyes looking back to the side.​

"I'm not thinking 'bout nothin' like that..."

little liar.​

"Trust me, I know."

She looked back up at him...

that wicked grin growing wider.​

"I heard it."

"...you did?"

"Of course."

a chuckle.​

"I can hear things."

"like what?"​

"Thoughts."

"can you...​

read minds?"​

"Correct-o~"

She jerked back.
searching for a sharp intake of breath.
but her eyes never turned away from him.

"You heard..."​

"Every word."

Tension.
She hissed
dug her shoes into the floor.​

"How?"

"I just can."

"Then what did I remember?!"

"The poor little brat wants a place to call home."​

A snarl slid through her teeth.

"Lia--"

"They called you scum."​

Breath hissed out of her nostrils.

"No, they didn--"

"Just because you were a refugee."​

"Poor thing..."​

"Living in the streets."

"all..."​

"...alone."​

in those cold ...

bitter ...​

streets ...​

​

where you'd freeze.​

where you'd starve.​

wishing...

it would​

go . . .​

​

"away."

"..."
No answer
ever
escaped from her.​

click . . .

. . . click​

​

Her eyes locked on the floor.

as he stepped past.​

"Oops."
did i hit a nerve?




"...no."​

Sapphire pupils. he felt them staring into his back.

"...of course I did."

Those wicked green orbs stared into those blue pupils.

"Thoughts can't lie."​

Her brow... furrowed.

maybe he did.
being a refugee...


was . . .





terrible.​

"Was it really that bad?"​

click . . .
. . . click​

"Don't you want a place to call home?"

" . . . "​

her gaze jerked away.​

A hand.

"ah..."​

To no longer wander.

to never be cold...​

to never face rain with nowhere to go...​

to never starve.​

to never sleep in the street.​

to never be called scum.​

to never . . .

be . . .​

​

"alone."​

"I know can show you where home is..."
i just need a yes.

click . . . . .


. . . . . click​

There was no longer a hand before her...

there was only him behind her...​

"Well?"​

mhm...​

Home...

sounds...​

good.​

"Yeah."
i want to find home.​

A chuckle.

"Good."​

SNAP

what--

"NNGH!"​

Fingertips in her skull.

digging deeper
deeper
deeper
deeper
deeper​

deeper!​

"AH!"​

static.

static.​

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

​

static.

static.​

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

good job for a first try.

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

you follow orders.​

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

exactly what a--

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

should do.​

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

A . . .

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

プペット？

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

correct.

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

every emotion ;​

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

action ;

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

thought ;​

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

are controlled

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH​

by me.​

SZHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

"Nngh!"​

burning.
screeching.
scratching.
fighting.
attacking.

stabbing.

as he dug through her thoughts.​

No!

"AHH!"

You can't--

"Le-- mme--"

I won't let you!​

"Too late."

"the parasite's hacked its way in..."​

you won't ever escape from me again.​

i will always be . . .

right . . .​

be . . .

hind . . .​

you.​

"But for now..."​

you won't control anything.

you're mine . . .​

"kiddo."

"N-no..."

shing

"A h h . . . "​

Metal . . .

escaped from his finger tips.​

rising up . . .

fading down . . .​

eclipsing . . . and covering . . .​

the shuddering girl's . . .​

skull.

shing . . .​

metal crawling over
those spikes and bangs​

metallic thread
sewing her mouth shut.

metallic sliding down
shrinking
covering her neck
her torso
her arms
her hands​

metal sinking
into the centre of her chest

a black hollow hole over that​

heart.​

metal covering
the flash of light and dark
that brought her keyblade

the faithful weapon melting to her hand.

never to leave her side.​

And a metallic blindfold
that failed to hide

her half-opened

emerald orb.​

srish
the rustle of pleather.

his hand had fallen to his side.​

Orbs scanning over the girl . . .

An archer.
a human archer nobody . . .

a

pathetic

little

puppet.​

What a malicious smirk.
eclipsing his features

as he leaned towards her ear.

"You're mine now, kiddo ..."​

 

[jazznam]

The style isn't weird but it manages to get the attention of the reader (that varies on many of the people's attention span on this forum ).

You can try even setting out from description on the left hand side, what the character is thinking in the middle and the right with nouns, adjectives and verbs. Keep it up and experiment some more, I was thinking of some other things you could do to it as well. You can pester me through PM if you're interested.

 

[Raynie]

^ Agreed.

Gah, you know all the things I said over MSN I really liked it, I know that coding must have been a big pain. The fast-pacing was done perfectly in my opinion, like you said, the arrangement really makes your eyes shift side to side, like the story itself seems to do. (hope that made sense :B)

Keep it up!

 

[star_seeker24]

It's a different, but very good style of writing!
It's like a dark story.
What I mean by that is the plot is very dark and what happens is.
I like it!
You're a very good writer!

 

[Mason Stark]

WOW. This got a better response than I expected. xD; Thank you so much for the comments! I thought everybody who read this was going to go 'zomg i can't read this DD: too confusing' but looking around on the page (or screen...) keeps the readers interested, I guess. xD;

The style isn't weird but it manages to get the attention of the reader (that varies on many of the people's attention span on this forum ).

You can try even setting out from description on the left hand side, what the character is thinking in the middle and the right with nouns, adjectives and verbs. Keep it up and experiment some more, I was thinking of some other things you could do to it as well. You can pester me through PM if you're interested.

Oooo~ Good idea. D: I might try something like that... I put stuff in the centre, though, for emphasis. To be suspenseful or whatever? xD; I dunnooooo. But, yeah, I'll definitely try that stuff next time I write something like that! :3 I'm gonna be PM you, too, about that stuff! Thank yew for the comment and the suggestions! x3

^ Agreed.

Gah, you know all the things I said over MSN I really liked it, I know that coding must have been a big pain. The fast-pacing was done perfectly in my opinion, like you said, the arrangement really makes your eyes shift side to side, like the story itself seems to do. (hope that made sense :B)

Keep it up!

I already said stuff on MSN, but RAYNIEEEE. FLAMMIT CHOO'R AWESOME ;0; *glomp* Thank yewwwww!

It's a different, but very good style of writing!
It's like a dark story.
What I mean by that is the plot is very dark and what happens is.
I like it!
You're a very good writer!

Yay! Thank yew! :3 And yay for it being a dark story, too xD; I don't think it's as dark as I want it to be, but meh. DARK STORIES ARE AWESOME. D

I'm gonna try this style some more and probably post it on here... unless it's original. xD; This is technically original, but meh. It references KH stuff... Thank yew guys for the comments!

 

[jazznam]

You're welcome. Just PM me whenever you want and I'll respond as soon as possible.

 

[Mason Stark]

FWEEEE SECRET NINJA... messaging. D: Yeahhhh.

I wrote another story in this style ('cause it's fuuuuun!) but it's not nearly as dark. BOO. D: It's not fun unless it's dark. (...okies maybe. maybe not.) This is a backstory thing to my character, Aoi, from my fanfic. And he actually doesn't act like this at ALL in my story. Here it goes!

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crystalline ; in U & I

"Go, Aoi!"

Eye on the target. Those blue orbs never looked away.

Weapon in hand. His bare fingers clutched the handle.

Sight on him.

that pompous ass.

i'll beat 'em this time!​

​

The countdown begun.

Three . . .

two . . .​

ONE!

"Ha!"​

SHING!

the final match.
and that boy just kicked setzer's ass.​

"You did great, Aoi!"

He couldn't help but grin the entire time. The boy wasn't normally arrogant, but he had a good reason to this time.

"Thanks, Ten."

Blues orbs scanning the prize. Over and over again...

A trophy.
With four crystal orbs; colours on a rainbow.

Blue.
Green.
Yellow.
Red.​

Green.​

Blue.

yellow . . . red​

"For what?"

His sapphire blue gaze slipped over to the brunette.

A petite girl with messy light brown locks. With peach-kissed skin and sky blue orbs. She certainly looked like a boy with her black vest, sleeveless t-shirt, capris, and sneakers.

Blue orbs gazing into the other.

Aoi caught sight of her smile...​

that soft smile, curling only at the edges.
a smile that makes your heart flutter

and tints your cheeks crimson.​

His gaze jerked away. Darting to the trophy to his side.

Then to the open palms resting on his tan shorts.​

With that, he wore a sheepish smile.

"I couldn't have done it...

if you weren't there..."​

A soft, sweet giggle.

His gaze shifted back to her.
to set sights on that wonderful grin.

"You're welcome, then."

Her hand fumbled to the side.

"Here."

srisch​

He caught her fumbling with the squeaky plastic.

"For winning."

His eyes lit up.​

It was something so simple...

He ecstatically peeled away the plastic. Clutching the wooden stick. Immediately throwing the top of the bar into his mouth.

Ice cream!

Sea-salt ice cream.​

He loved the stuff.

And Ten knew that well.​

"Yeah!
Got som-fin' for ya, toos!"​

Ten giggled as Aoi started to act like a dork. Mouth full of ice cream, his voice muffled.

The scrawny boy stretched to the side.
Latching onto a golden spiral.

SRISHHHH​

Dragging it closer.

He gulped down the ice cream.
Lying the already half-eaten bar untidily on the tattered plastic.

Pulling taunt on his blackened wristband.
Pushing his messy, dirty blonde locks out of his peach-tinted face.

chinch

chinch​

"Here."

chinch​

The petite girl stared down at her palm.

"Aoi...​

this is your's... I can't take that..."​

"Yes, you can!"

Her gaze shifted to him.

with that dorky grin of his. Sitting at the edge of the clocktower...​

just smiling and staring through the glass.​

"It's what friends do... I'm not just gonna keep the thing for myself.

That would be stupid."​

"'sides...

blue's your favourite colour...​

"right?"​

"Hm."
That soft smile returned.
Her gaze shifting to the glass in her grasp.

"Yeah.
It is."​

She raised the glass orb over the air.
Gazing through the blue-tinted world within it.​

The boy sat up straight.

Straightening his sleeveless white shirt.​

His thin arm raised in unison.

His fingers pressed cautiously around the glass.​

As he peering into the green-tinted world within the glass orb.​

Silence.



Stillness.​

"What're you going to do with the other ones?"

His gaze jerked to the left.

Gazing at the two lonely orbs on the trophy.​

red...
...yellow​

"I dunno..."

Pocketing the orb.

Hands behind his head.​

Leaning back against the wall of the tower.​

"I don't have anyone else to give 'em too..."

"..."​

chinch

chinch​

"I'll find someone, though."

Ten surveyed the boy
as he placed the orbs in his pocket.​

The boy turned, gazing at his friend.
And smiled.

Only moments after he took another bite of ice cream.​

She giggled.

"You've got a little..."​

The boy glanced down at his nose.

"...Oh."

He untidily wiped it off on his wristband.

"Better?"

Ten smiled.

"Yeah."​

The walk back to each other's houses was simple.

From the train station

down one long path​

and down another.​

Aoi clenched to the thin base of the trophy in one hand.

And carried his Struggle bat in the other.​

Ten walked by his side.
With her arms placed behind her.​

"I hate that they put the Struggle at the end of the summer..."

"Yeah..."​

"It's no fun!

You fight, then you gotta do homework. Sucks."​

"...Have you even done your homework?"​

"Uhh..."

"Aoi!"
Ten grumbled, folding her arms.
"You're gonna get in trouble!"​

The boy rolled his eyes.
"Homework's stupid.

What's the point?"​

"You're gonna have to do it
even if you don't want to.
We all have to do it!"​

"Yeah, yeah..."

"They'll... kick you out of school!"​

"So? School's stupid, too!"

"It's not..."​

"Says a te--"

His gaze snapped onto her.

He gulped...

never say mean things to your friends.​

"...I'd rather... get out of here."

Her sky blue orbs snapped onto the boy.

"...You wouldn't!"​

"This place is so boring...

You're...​

...........​

...I'd rather​

go on an adventure.​

Or somethin'.

Better than sticking around here."

"And how're you going to get out of here?"​

"I... haven't figured it out yet."

"...You won't leave me
will you?"​

His head turned ever so slowly to the side.

He met her gaze...​

"...No. I'd never leave you."

"I won't leave you, eith--"​

"...Ten?"

Footsteps to a halt.






"What . . .


is . . .


that?"​

What a strange sight.

creeping closer.​

With its golden orbs.​

and malicious claws.​

And its black flesh.​

"I...

dunno..."​

clunk
the trophy on the ground.​

click . . .

click . . .​

​

"Be careful, Aoi..."​

A wide grin.

"I will."​

"...Oy!"
click.

click.​

​

The blue bat pointed at the creature.

"...Back off!"​

It stared at him curiously.
With its big golden eyes.
Its antenna twitching.​

"It looks...
kinda cute..."​

He rolled his eyes.

"You think everything's cute."​

"I bet...​

it's a really nasty thing.​

like a monster, or somethin'."​

poink!
"Oy!"​

Aoi jabbed the bat into the creature's head.

"What are ya?!"

"What are you doing?!"
She sounded dumbfounded...
and defensive.
"It could bite you! Or... something!"​

The creature only shook its head after being poked.​

"...Look."

click.
He turned around.

Gazing at his friend.​

"It's harmless."

click.
click.
click.​

"I bet it's...

a dog or somethin'..."​

Ten rolled her eyes.
Smiling.
"No dog looks like that, Aoi."​

He huffed.
Folding his arms.
"Like I know what every dog looks like!"

"C'mon."

click.​

click.​

​

"Let's go."

"...Aoi!"​

"NNGH!"​

That creature.

Obviously.​

didn't​

like

being​

poked.

"Aoi!!"

She stared in horror
at the dark creature.

As it ripped its claw
out of Aoi's chest.​

Triumph!

The creature darted off

with a ruby heart in its claws.​

As the boy
slammed into the concrete.

Staring up at the twilight sky
with wide eyes.
Shuddering.​

what's--




happening--

"A-Ahhh..."​

click.




click.

"A-Aoi...?"​

Her voice



"Oh no..."

started...

"Aoi...?


to...

don't . . .



g. . ."



fade.




Everything...

started to ...
grow ...



dark
...









No!






I can't fade yet!









do you

remember...



your . . .


true . . . . . .


name?​

"Yeah."

i do...​

"Ah..."

Her hand reached inside her pocket. Feeling something within it.
Something that hadn't been there before...

The girl raised her hand.
And opened her palm.

There...

A ruby, glass sphere...

Rena's deep blue gaze surveyed over the crystal.

Huh?

She blinked. Once. Twice.

I've never seen this before...

Her gaze darted up from the brick street, to the twilight sky.
She held up the orb over the air.

Where'd it come from?

The sun sparkled in the red-tinted glass.

"Whoa..."

A smile curled at the edges of the brunette's lips.

"Cool..."

See, Ten?
I said I'd find someone to give it to.​

You don't know the way I am as a friend...
but I am one.
You'll see.

- 兄​

 

[Lectori Salutem]

I like how you wrote these. It was different, and nice to read. The first had a wonderful psycho Aoi. The second is really nice, is it his actual past? If it is, then I really like his past. Good job, I wouldn't mind reading more stories like this.

 

[Sparks]

I really like it alot. The form and the desricption. I'm in love!!

 

[TwilightRiku_13]

Okay, those two chapters were really great. The first chapter was really good because it has Aoi being a crazy bastard, but it was the second chapter that I really loved. I absolutely loved hearing about Aoi's past, especially with the mention of his girlfriend, or at least a friend who is a girl, Ten and how he turned into a heartless. So, Aoi gave the red crystal to Rena, but who does he give the yellow crystal to? Ven, maybe? Also, how did his eyes turn from blue to green? I guess it was from turning into a nobody? And will Aoi ever see Ten again? I hope so. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

 

[Mason Stark]

Wowwowwowwowwow thank yew so much, guys! <3

I like how you wrote these. It was different, and nice to read. The first had a wonderful psycho Aoi. The second is really nice, is it his actual past? If it is, then I really like his past. Good job, I wouldn't mind reading more stories like this.

Yay for different! xD; Nice to read ish gewd, too. :3 Thank yew for the comment! And, yup, that's his actual past... or I guess a sketch of it? 8D; I dunno... His past isn't 100% concrete, yet, but I know most of it!

I really like it alot. The form and the desricption. I'm in love!!

Wowzers, thank yew!

Okay, those two chapters were really great. The first chapter was really good because it has Aoi being a crazy bastard, but it was the second chapter that I really loved. I absolutely loved hearing about Aoi's past, especially with the mention of his girlfriend, or at least a friend who is a girl, Ten and how he turned into a heartless. So, Aoi gave the red crystal to Rena, but who does he give the yellow crystal to? Ven, maybe? Also, how did his eyes turn from blue to green? I guess it was from turning into a nobody? And will Aoi ever see Ten again? I hope so. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

Wow, I'm surprised everyone likes the second one more. XD; Thank yew! <3 I think Ten's just his friend... even with all of the references to Aoi liking her. I dunno who he would give the yellow crystal to, though... Definitely not Ven, 'cause he hates the kid a LOT. xD; I don't think he would give it to Xatzku either, even though they're teammates or whatever. As for his eye colour, it actually didn't change in how you'd think it would! PLOT TWIST YAY! His change for becoming a Nobody was his age... He's about 14 or 15 in his backstory, and he's running around in PoH, looking like a 17 year old. I'm writing a drabble with him sorta-kinda meeting Ten, too! It's not in this fun style, though. DD:

And, since I hate leaving comments on fanfics without posting up a new chapter or something, here's a tidbit of what I wrote recently... I'm gonna try that style again, though it may be with another dark story. I have no clue what it should be about yet, though. xD; Here's this tidbit! (and it's a first draft and isn't coded. 8D; just so you know!)

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"C'mon."

A metropolis in forever blackened night. Trapped in forever rainfall.

"Hm?"

The two misfits splashed through the puddles.

clickclicksploshclick

They rushed through the labyrinth of darkened alleys and desolate streets.

"We're gettin' out of here."

The girl followed behind the teen, scrambling to keep up with him. A blank stare in her eyes, she blinked slowly as she glanced up at him.

"...To where?"

The teen tempted to brush the wet bangs out of his face. Hiding beneath a dark hood, trapped in a repugnant, dark cloak; the only good thing about it was that it kept the rain off.

He snarled. Brow furrowed as his sapphire blue orbs darkened.

"Anywhere but here."

SHING!

 

[TwilightRiku_13]

Hm, a plot twist with his eye color change? I wonder how they could have changed; man, I really can't wait for you to explian that. I also can't wait to see who you give the yellow crystal to; if it's not Ven or Xatzku, then I have no idea who it could possible be. Anyway, awesome update. So, is this the present or the past? I ask because the person talking about getting out sounds a lot like Aoi, especially with the mention of blue eyes, but the other person with him sounds like Rena, and I'm pretty sure his eyes were green when she met him. It almost sounds like Aoi's eyes can change color, from blue to green. Oh well, I guess all will be explained in time. Anyway, great job, and I look forward to more.

 

[Danica Syer]

Wow. Interesting. I love the start and all. It's like all over the place. Not to the point your not telling your story. I mean like I can follow through. Sweet is what I'll say for this. Keep it up! ^_^

Gahhhhh I've haven't read your other fics you mentioned, would I/should I be confused????