Machina and Rem. by an Aspiring Graphic Artist (I'm learning)

[SeaSalt IceCream]

Hey there, I don't often post things, but i'm keen to advance my skills as I will be studying graphic design at university next year - i'd like to get some feed back to improve my skills.

I started this by following a tutorial - but got bored and went off on my own little tangent. XD

Sorry - I know it's not amazing - i wasn't really sure how to go on from here though. :/

 

[King Sora X]

This is pretty cool, sis. I like how you have the triangles as the focus. REally loving the colors, too. Nice usage of the stars ^_^
I can't bring myself to give critique because this is just coolio.

 

[SeaSalt IceCream]

Naww Thanks very Much Bro ^_^

 

[King Sora X]

are you guys actually related?

anyway I love work like this, it looks stunning. also was machina meant to be there because all i see is rem

hehe, everybody thinks so, but no that's just how close we are in friendship.

 

[SeaSalt IceCream]

are you guys actually related?

anyway I love work like this, it looks stunning. also was machina meant to be there because all i see is rem

Well he is there - waaay in the faded background on the bottom right hand corner of the fog.
But It was mainly meant to be a Rem-centred picture

And no we're not related - its just what we call each other.
^_^
He's ma bro man!

 

[Amphetamine]

this is really nice.
i think the border should be taken off, and the second triangle outline should be a thinner outline.
also, emphasizing that butterfly more on the piece would make it really pop. maybe take its wing pattern to create a sweet texture.
some of it seems over-sharpened too, but it's not that big of a deal.
overall, it's really cool you should post more!

 

[SeaSalt IceCream]

Oh really? Well thanks!

I really do appreciate the feedback - and see everything you mentioned.
Sometimes it's hard to notice until it's pointed out to you - especially if you've been staring at the thing for hours >.<
That was my first piece with this kinda style - i'd like to explore it further i think.
I'm hoping to advance my skills a little further as i plan to study graphic design at a specialised university next year.
Which is why I'm very grateful for your feedback - so thank you for your time

 

[Eric]

To add on to what krank said about the triangle, I think the edges should be sharp as opposed to rounded. Assuming you used photoshop either a stroke set to inside would work or a selection of the solid triangle and then edit>stroke. This is a good piece though, keep it up.

 

[SeaSalt IceCream]

PS7, But yes I get what you're saying - it adds to the symmetry that's lacking from the piece - and now know better how to fix it! ^_^
That's why it helps to have multiple sets of eyes - cause sometimes i find myself staring at it for ages - knowing there's a problem, but not being able to pick out what it is.
So for that reason - I really appreciate the feed back. Thanks! ^_^