Fanfiction ► LOST TIME MEMORY [Kingdom Hearts] - Preview!

[Mason Stark]

Re: LOST TIME MEMORY [Kingdom Hearts] - Complete!

I was not expecting that at all. Enigma is the one to have killed his Majesty, Riku and Sora?! :O I was really shocked by this and sadden how they died. I didn't think it was possible for somebody to destroy the keyblade either. Finally got that mystery revealed, since I think you wrote something similar to this before. It amazes me how each story and each tidbit you revealed Rena, is connected to one another. The feelz I got from this script were both heart breaking and amazing. Enigma is a really cool bad guy too. Curious why a simple blade can kill Mickey, Riku and Sora like that. Or maybe that's just the reality of it all, and its not like they were untouchable to begin with. Thanks for giving us another script to read, Rena!

Yup! When he does this, he sets off a chain of events that leads into Overbit Chaos. He kills them off so that he can take over the worlds without any interference from the Keyblade Masters; he knew that, if he tried to see any of his plans through with the Keyblade wielders around, he would get nowhere. So, he kills them off, then goes and does his thing. I think the element of surprise is also a BIG reason why they were outmatched. He hides in the shadows and attacks versus staying out in the open. He's a sneaky asshole lulz. (Also, there's a LOT more to his weapon, but you'll find out what I mean later on mwahaha xD)
I FEEL SO BAD ABOUT WRITING THAT SCENE THOUGH ;A; Especially the King Mickey part... In the original version, it was more descriptive and it was just. ugh. why ;__;

But yay, thank you so much!! ;w; I wasn't sure if it would be too heartbreaking, but yaaaay it is! (...wait, that's a bad thing XD;; But that's what I'm aiming for!) I don't have any other scripts, but thank you so much for taking the time to read it! ;w; Glad you liked it!

That was actually awesome to read, I'm extremely curious and filled with a plethora of whys and hows. Your writing style is great and I love that you include the SFX prompts too because instead of just writing them and us reading them, when I read the prompt I hear the SFX in my head as I read and it really sets the scene.

Wicked!

Yay, thank you so much! I found that, even though I put most of the SFX cues in the script, it's much easier to know what kind of SFX goes where during editing if they're on their own, so that's why I did that. But yay, I'm glad that it helps set the scene more! ;w; As for answers to what's going on, though, I am working on a fanfic that will explain all that! I'm working on several radioplays that will explain the fanfic's backstory and the characters' backstories, so that's the reason for all of the scripts. But yay, I'm glad that you like, too!

I don't have anymore scripts right now, but would anyone be interested in an audio preview of the prologue? I'm working on editing that one now, and I've got most of the recordings back from the voice actors working on this project. They are RIDICULOUSLY talented and I'm so glad that they're working on this omg ;A; Sora's lines are really heartbreaking, Riku is just perf ahhhh ;~;, and Enigma's voice is absolutely amazing. He is wickedly evil lulz. (And he actually sounds a little like Hans from Frozen, especially during the coy/sadistic lines. SO COOL ;w

whoops rambling, but, if anyone would be interested in hearing a preview, let me know! c:

 

[Mason Stark]

Re: LOST TIME MEMORY [Kingdom Hearts] - Complete!

Hey, everyone! I have a preview for you guys, though it's a little bit different...

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(yaaaaay i'm so excited to post this xD;

 

[KingdomKey]

The sneak peek preview sounds great, Rena. I imagine you have some friends helping you voice SRK and King Mickey? I think its awesome though! I can't wait for more.

 

[Mason Stark]

Yay, thank you so much! And well, I held auditions a while back, but I've become friends with one of the actors, which is awesome~ xD But they're doing an amazing job! I'm really excited about how the whole thing is turning out~ ;w; I'll see if I can post more soon, but, for now, there's that!

 

[Mason Stark]

WOOOO RANDOM UPDATE

Okies, I started working on another script (Aex's script, unfortunately, wasn't working out the way I wanted it to, so I'm stepping away from that one for a bit and working on another one!), and I wanted to see if I could get some feedback on this small part. It's a first draft thing, but I wanted to see if this one part, where the ??? character starts asking about Rena's home, seems natural/realistic enough. If it's not, please let me know!

Otherwise, enjoy this tidbit! Any feedback would be very appreciated!

Spoiler Show

(Premise: There's a storm in Rena's homeworld, and she's scared, waiting for the storm to pass. As she waits, though, she discovers a phone that seemed to magically appear. She picks it up, trying to figure out how it works, when someone calls her. In a panic, she tries to throw the phone away, but accidentally answers the phone instead.)

???:
Hello?

RENA:
(mutter) Oh no...

Realizing that the phone was accidentally answered in the frenzy, Rena starts to panic. She pulls her knees into her chest and hides against the wall, as if hiding from someone. She cautiously stares at the phone a distance away.

???:
(concerned) Rena! Hey! You there?

Knitting her brow, she looks around curiously. This person knows her name? Kinda weird... But she doesn't make a mention of it, since she's more worried about the fact that oh crap, she answered the phone! (The thought of talking to strangers is scary enough, but this is so much worse!)

She bites her lip. She needs to think of a plan and fast. All she has to do is hang up the phone, right? Easy! But, as she stares at the phone lighting up the entire room, she becomes very apprehensive, treating the situation like someone else is in the room.

???:
(concerned) Rena, if you're there, please say something...

She comes up with a plan. An absolutely, super-duper brilliant plan.

RENA:
N-Nobody's here!

???:
(confused) Huh?

RENA:
I'm... I'm in-vis-ibi-ble! [Pronounced kind of like a kid who can't pronounce the word, so it's kind of muddled together]

She nods, ecstatic about her plan.

???:
Uhh... well, I can still hear you...

Halfway into a stand, she freezes. Wait... he can?! Oh no, her plan's not working! Looking around hastily, she tries to think of something else.

RENA:
(nervous) Uh-umm... n-no, you can't! Nope, you can't hear nothin', nobody's here!

She sneaks over, the floor squeaking as she tries to remain inconspicuous.

On the other end of the line, the man is just frustrated. (After all, this is kind of an urgent situation.)

???:
[grumbles] (frustrated) Kiddo, this is a really bad time for games...

RENA:
(nervous) I-It's not a game! It's super serious! 'cause... 'cause you're imagining stuff!

Rena scoops up the phone, trying to figure out how to hang up the call. She remains perplexed.

???:
(frustrated) Will you quit fooling around and listen to me?

Rena discovers the hang-up button. Her eyes light up. Yes! The nightmare's almost over!

RENA:
Sorry, mister, I'm super-duper busy right now, and I gots to go, soooooo... I'll talk to ya never-later, bye!

???:
(panicked, rushed) Wait! Wait a second!! The world's ending!

RENA:
(confused) ...huh?

???:
(panicked) Kiddo, the world is ending. Please, I need you to listen to me, okay?

Rena stands in the centre of the room, feet turned inward as she stares at the device. Off in the distance, thunder rumbles.

RENA:
(uneasy, scared but not really showing it) N... no, it's not...

???:
That storm outside? It's not a normal storm. That's the darkness coming. If we don't do something, you'll disappear with the rest of this world.

Gulping, the girl takes a step back, holding the phone a bit further away from her. It's like she's trying to stay away from ???.

RENA:
(uneasy, starting to sound more scared) But... but it's just a storm... It'll go away soon...

???:
And, when it does, everything else will be gone with it.

RENA:
(uneasy, disbelief) N... no! Everythin'll be fine!

???:
It's not going to be. (unsure what to say) I... I know you're probably scared, but this is really important, okay? I can help you get out of there, but you have to believe me--

RENA:
(uneasy, scared) No, I-I don't believe you...

???:
Look outside, then. What's out there?

Hesitantly, the girl looks to the door. After a moment of hesitance, she goes over to the door and looks through one of the spaces between the wooden planks.

???:
Well?

RENA:
It's... just dark out...

???:
Purple sky? Dark orb? Anything?

RENA:
I-I dunno...

She steps away from the door, confused by what's going on. She's scared, although she wouldn't let ??? believe she was, and doesn't want to believe him. She goes back to her original spot, hiding in the dark as if hiding away from ???. As she walks over, though, the man continues to speak.

???:
(serious) Everyone else in the world is gone, kiddo. They... [pause; rethinks his words, since he doesn't want to scare Rena] (hesitant) Something... Something really bad happened to them. If you stay here, the same will happen to you.

Rena sits down and stares at the phone, looking lost.

RENA:
I... I'm just gonna wait for the storm to be over... It'll go away soon...

???:
(frustrated) It's not going to go away. Rena, you have to believe me!

She puts the phone on the floor a distance away, turning away from it.

RENA:
(uneasy, scared) Please go away...

???:
[frustrated sigh] (giving up) Why won't you believe me?

There's an odd silence between them, ??? lost as he wonders what to do or so while Rena wants him to go away so it's like this never happened. Thunder rumbles again in the distance. The man starts to hatch a plan, however: he's going to find her breaking point.

???:
(piquing up) Hmm... hey, Rena?

Rena says nothing, hugging her knees into her chest.

???:
Lemme ask you something... [beat] You're... on your own, right?

She lifts her head up, looking at the phone.

???:
(pushing the subject) How long have you been on your own?

RENA:
(doesn't want to talk about it) N-no, I'm not alone...

???:
(forcing the subject) No, tell me: how long have you been alone?

RENA:
I-I dunno...

???:
What, you've never had a family? A real home? Anything?

RENA:
I--

???:
You've been on your own this whole time with nothing. No one to care about you, anything.

RENA:
(hesitant) So... what...?

???:
How long have you been on your own, Rena?

RENA:
(uneasy) I dunno!

???:
(stern, forceful) You do know!

RENA:
(uneasy, scared) I don't, leave me alone!

???:
(stern, forceful) Tell me!

RENA:
I don't--

???:
(stern, forceful) Tell me, Rena!

RENA:
I don't want to be alone anymore!

The girl pulls her knees into her chest, trying to hide the fact that she's upset. ??? has found her breaking point.

RENA:
(muffled, since she's hiding her face; upset, trying not to show it) I-I've been... alone for a really, really long time... But I hate it. I hate it so much... I don't want to be alone anymore...

???:
[beat] I'm... sorry I had to do that. But I know you don't want to be alone anymore. I've got something that can fix that.
Rena becomes curious, lifting her head up.

RENA:
W... what?

???:
A home. A real home.

RENA:
(surprised) H-huh?

???:
(uncertain) It's... kinda hard to explain, but I know that you have a home somewhere out there. If you trust me and let me help you out of here, then I can take you there.

Rena sits upright and hurries over to the phone, scooping up off of the ground.

RENA:
W-where is it?

???:
Not on this world. It's somewhere far away, somewhere a lot better than this place. If you trust me, I'll get you there. What'd ya say?

Rena pauses for a moment, staring down at the phone.

RENA:
(trying to piece the whole thing together) I... I've got a home?

???:
Yeah.

RENA:
(still piecing everything together, but she starts to get excited) With... with a family 'n everything?

???:
Yeah, actually...

Her eyes light up. She hugs the phone, as if to hug ???.

RENA:
(ecstatic) Please take me there, mister! Pleaseplease!

???:
[chuckles] (grinning) That's what I'm doing, kiddo!

RENA:
[grins] Thank you! Thank you lots!!

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[KingdomKey]

Rena, the number one rule is to ask "who" is speaking on the phone! You poor girl. I can't believe she bought what ??? said. I imagine this to be some sort of ploy to get Rena to do what ??? wants. I really hope Rena doesn't get hurt from this. It was a fantastic script, and you could feel your heart beating inside of your chest from how ominous this was. Every reaction was top notch, and felt so realistic. I was quite surprised by this random update. I look forward to anything else you choose to show us, Rena=D

 

[Mason Stark]

Rena, the number one rule is to ask "who" is speaking on the phone! You poor girl. I can't believe she bought what ??? said. I imagine this to be some sort of ploy to get Rena to do what ??? wants. I really hope Rena doesn't get hurt from this. It was a fantastic script, and you could feel your heart beating inside of your chest from how ominous this was. Every reaction was top notch, and felt so realistic. I was quite surprised by this random update. I look forward to anything else you choose to show us, Rena=D

Oh my goodness, thank you!! Lemme see~

Actually, the mysterious dude is a good guy lulz xD; The script didn't show that too well, unfortunately, so I'll have to add something in to show that he's a good person. He's super trustworthy, promise!! He's trying to save Rena, and he has to rely on some outlandish things to help her, like throwing a phone through a portal, because he's not strong enough to open a portal for himself, and hoping that she picks up the call lulz. But yay, it was realistic!! Thank you! ;w; I'll try to show more later~ (I might post the whole scene, once it's mostly done!) I do have a tiny, tiny excerpt right now, though!

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Rena: Who're... you?
???: A friend.
Rena: But... how'd you know my name 'n stuff...?
???: (unsure what to say) It's... it's a long story... Really long, actually. Look: I promise, I am a friend. I'm here to help.

 

[Xehanort-X-blade]

8D you have talent i wanna read more your a fabulous writer nomura could use in expert writer like you Takushi Rena

 

[KingdomKey]

Oh my goodness, thank you!! Lemme see~

Actually, the mysterious dude is a good guy lulz xD; The script didn't show that too well, unfortunately, so I'll have to add something in to show that he's a good person. He's super trustworthy, promise!! He's trying to save Rena, and he has to rely on some outlandish things to help her, like throwing a phone through a portal, because he's not strong enough to open a portal for himself, and hoping that she picks up the call lulz. But yay, it was realistic!! Thank you! ;w; I'll try to show more later~ (I might post the whole scene, once it's mostly done!) I do have a tiny, tiny excerpt right now, though!

You're welcome. Always happy to provide feedback.

Ohhh, I wouldn't of thought that at first. Okay, I'll take your word for it, because I care about Rena's safety. The phone was thrown from a portal?! ouo Whoa. This mysterious person wouldn't happen to be from the future, right? Yup, it was really realistic. Again, you're welcome. Also, the final version you've shown me in the spoiler makes the script a lot lighter. So, I think I could believe a little of this mysterious person's claim about being her friend, and looking out for her best of interest. (No idea if I said that last part right. xD)

 

[Mason Stark]

8D you have talent i wanna read more your a fabulous writer nomura could use in expert writer like you Takushi Rena

Oh wow, thank you!! ;w; That's really flattering haha, thank you lots! c:

You're welcome. Always happy to provide feedback.

Ohhh, I wouldn't of thought that at first. Okay, I'll take your word for it, because I care about Rena's safety. The phone was thrown from a portal?! ouo Whoa. This mysterious person wouldn't happen to be from the future, right? Yup, it was really realistic. Again, you're welcome. Also, the final version you've shown me in the spoiler makes the script a lot lighter. So, I think I could believe a little of this mysterious person's claim about being her friend, and looking out for her best of interest. (No idea if I said that last part right. xD)

No worries, Rena's going to be super safe, promise! But the mysterious dude definitely goes across as a not-necessarily person in that excerpt I showed. (He's trying to save Rena, but she doesn't trust him annnnnd she's also in denial about the world ending, so he has to say something to get her to trust him, which, unfortunately, involves something that really bothers her) I'm gonna have a fun time trying to show that he is trustworthy haha xD;

And yosh, you got it right! He's definitely looking out for her best interest~ I feel bad that I can't explain why he's a friend and why he wants to help her, but he's definitely a good person. (Oh and I forgot about this lulz. He's not from the future xD His story is more related to something that happened in the past, though, hence why he says he's a friend and such.)

 

[Mason Stark]

Update time! I've been working super hard on another script (...i just realized i've posted previews for it lmao, it's actually pretty different than the current version now xD), but I wanted to get some feedback on it before I finalized it and sent it out to the KHOC cast to record.

I'm looking for some beta readers to give feedback on the script in its current state and for once it's finished. My hope is to have it done maybe next week at the earliest (by the 15th), so recording can start before the end of the year.

So if anyone would like to help, I'd greatly appreciate it! I'll give cookies, too! ;w;

 

[KingdomKey]

Update time! I've been working super hard on another script (...i just realized i've posted previews for it lmao, it's actually pretty different than the current version now xD), but I wanted to get some feedback on it before I finalized it and sent it out to the KHOC cast to record.

I'm looking for some beta readers to give feedback on the script in its current state and for once it's finished. My hope is to have it done maybe next week at the earliest (by the 15th), so recording can start before the end of the year.

So if anyone would like to help, I'd greatly appreciate it! I'll give cookies, too! ;w;

I'll be one of the beta's if you'll have me, Rena. Anytime I can help you out with OC will be a pleasure. So, just send it my way. I'll have it done either tomorrow (Friday) or over the weekend.

 

[Mason Stark]

I'll be one of the beta's if you'll have me, Rena. Anytime I can help you out with OC will be a pleasure. So, just send it my way. I'll have it done either tomorrow (Friday) or over the weekend.

Alright, awesome! Thank you so much! I seriously appreciate it ;0; The current draft is a little messy (there's notes all over it lulz), but I'll send it your way~

 

[Mason Stark]

HIIIIII I HAVE AN ANOTHER PREVIEW C: Well, an audio preview lol.

The first radioplay has been through a rocky production, but I'm working on it more now and I wanted to share a preview of one part of it really quick~ This is basically one character talking, but I really like how it turned out, so I wanted to share it ;0;

Here it is! I may take it down soon, but any feedback would be awesome~ ;w; Otherwise, I'm gonna keep working on it so I can post the full thing soon-ish lol

 

[KingdomKey]

HIIIIII I HAVE AN ANOTHER PREVIEW C: Well, an audio preview lol.

The first radioplay has been through a rocky production, but I'm working on it more now and I wanted to share a preview of one part of it really quick~ This is basically one character talking, but I really like how it turned out, so I wanted to share it ;0;

Here it is! I may take it down soon, but any feedback would be awesome~ ;w; Otherwise, I'm gonna keep working on it so I can post the full thing soon-ish lol

OHMYGOSH! Please keep it up! I love hearing this character talk! I got chills from his laugh and oh, oh, gosh, I want to know which character it is that's speaking! I'm so full of hype right now! It's so awesome!