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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 41 posted)

Well, well, seems like Xehanort is now defending Vanitas from Terra, and Terra can't do jack squat about it.

Meanwhile, we get some great flashback scene from Ventus' trainning with Terra and Aqua, something that BbS Final Mix surely lacked.

Another great chapter on your part, Seph.
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 41 posted)

:D I'm smiling alongside with Ven.. Haha, he's clingy puppy, that's for sure.

As for Vantias, where did the block come from?! :O I know he's cut off from Riku, but is there more to it? Maybe deeper connection to Riku than we think?

Keep it going, Sephly!

Yep, I guess I tipped out a whole bowl of sugar in this chapter, but it does hold true to Ventus' character of being that clingy and affectionate (and enjoying affection from others). If anything, the game BBS itself in my opinion failed to a certain degree to actually clearly convey just how much Terra, Aqua and Ven mean to each other. There were two or three scenes and the Prologue that gave a glimpse, but that was it.

Nope, that wall comes not from Riku, as Terra notices this isn't Vanitas' power, but also not Riku's. It comes from Vanitas' connection with a completely different entity. Regarding the wall you might want to take another look at chapter 27.

Well, well, seems like Xehanort is now defending Vanitas from Terra, and Terra can't do jack squat about it.

Meanwhile, we get some great flashback scene from Ventus' trainning with Terra and Aqua, something that BbS Final Mix surely lacked.

Another great chapter on your part, Seph.

Uh, nope, as I repeatedly stated, Xehanort is only observing and not doing anything (except fighting Eraqus and Terra as well as commandeering Terra's body in the physical world). Xehanort is not the connection Vanitas speaks of.

The lack of TAV-friendship scenes is one of the few gripes I have with Birth by Sleep, so this was definitely very satisfying to write.

Hehe, thanks, greatly appreciated. ^__^
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 40 posted)

If you're talking about a certain picture I showed you some time ago, then yes, that is the connection. ;D
It won't be long now until this menace is revealed.

Yay, I guessed right! I'd suspect, the black brick wall also has to do this menace too! These moments with Vanitas and Terra have positively been my favorite scenes in the story so far. Oh, how excited I am, Sephy! Can't wait for the big reveal! The details in the fight, are always well done and I wonder why Vanitas exclaimed like that? Who is he worried the "menace" could be alerting? I do have one guess about this, maybe two.

I can understand why Vanitas would have so much loathing now, after you explained it. But, is Vanitas serious? He really wants to eradicate Xehanort himself? :O -is positively shocked- I mean, I can think of a few reasons why, considering his weaken state and the fact that he was used by the evil man.

The only other thing that came to mind; is it possible the connection between Ventus and Vanitas still there? I'd assume the pain he felt might be from it. However, I'm purely guessing.

Otherwise, loved, loved, LOVED, this chapter!
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 40 posted)

Yay, I guessed right! I'd suspect, the black brick wall also has to do this menace too! These moments with Vanitas and Terra have positively been my favorite scenes in the story so far. Oh, how excited I am, Sephy! Can't wait for the big reveal! The details in the fight, are always well done and I wonder why Vanitas exclaimed like that? Who is he worried the "menace" could be alerting? I do have one guess about this, maybe two.

I can understand why Vanitas would have so much loathing now, after you explained it. But, is Vanitas serious? He really wants to eradicate Xehanort himself? :O -is positively shocked- I mean, I can think of a few reasons why, considering his weaken state and the fact that he was used by the evil man.

The only other thing that came to mind; is it possible the connection between Ventus and Vanitas still there? I'd assume the pain he felt might be from it. However, I'm purely guessing.

Otherwise, loved, loved, LOVED, this chapter!

Yep, that wall has already been talked about in the story, as I pointed out to Roxas1563, in chapter 27. ;)
Calling the first main antagonist "menace" is actually a good idea until we learn the name. *ggg*

To be honest, writing the stuff between Vanitas and Terra was easier for me than all the fluff between Roxas and Ventus or the flashback with TAV. I sincerely believe I did well with that flashback and it oozes with cuteness, but it was very hard to write for me since I'm always on the fence if I show too much or too few emotion in such scenes.

It won't be long now, the next two chapters focus again on Roxas and Ven, which serves to lead directly up to the first indirect appearance of the "menace" in chapter 44 and its final proper introduction in chapter 46 alongside Xion.
When Vanitas talks about "using that one" to attack he's referring to Heart connections.
In chapter 30, Naminé explained the following to Kairi:
Naminé said:
However, there's also the danger of these connections being misused which brings about much danger for everyone...and that's the main reason I contacted you. I can feel there's something strange going on in both Sora's and Riku's hearts."
Before this, Vanitas exclaims that "so you used the direct connection between our hearts instead of the one with Riku for the defense part", meaning that the black wall that now protects Vanitas from Terra was created by the "menace" through its connection to Vanitas' heart.
So when Vanitas barks about "using that one" he is worried about the menace using its connection with Riku's heart to attack Terra. Since Vanitas' heart is inside Riku's, and Terra right now inside Vanitas' heart, casting an attack through this way could possibly alert Riku and someone else to what is happening. That the menace has a connection with Riku's heart is actually a hint towards who that menace IS, as beside Xehanort, who can be ruled out because Vanitas makes it clear that it [I]isn't [/I]Xehanort and Mickey, who would not attack Terra, there aren't that many connections Riku has that qualify (also when keeping in mind Sora's problems regarding his heart).

At least that's how I interpret Vanitas' character from information in BBS itself and taking the novel-stuff into consideration with caution. He's the type of being who would be unwilling and/or unable to admit that much of his current predicament, as Terra points out, is due to his own actions and his own fault to which others only react/reacted.
Yes, Vanitas is serious about trying to destroy Xehanort, however that is one of his longtime endgoals he has together with his new "connection" and he is well aware that he's in no condition at all (and will not be for quite a while) to act on that goal. Besides his personal hatred of Xehanort, there's also the issue that Xehanort is a competition for him in terms of his other endgoals.
This whole speech there was just done by him out of spite towards Terra and to brag about that despite him being beaten around like a ragdoll now, in the end their roles would be reversed.

To answer that I'd need to know which pain exactly you mean. Most of the pain both Ventus and Vanitas feel is from their hearts being nearly destroyed by the destruction of the X-blade back in BBS.
I won't say that there isn't any connection anymore at all, since the fact that at the core of Vanitas' new heart there is located a heart-part that originally belonged to Ventus' heart still stands. That doesn't mean though that any remaining connection there remains active, also since Ventus doesn't want it for obvious reasons.

Glad I managed to deliver something so likeable, hehe. ^__^
 
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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 41 posted)

I'm really quite interested in finding out who this Connection is. Based of off Vanitas' statement it's someone connected to Riku, so that kind of reduces the possible candidates, if it's not an original character.

I really like how you highlighted the Scientist aspect of Ienzo's character. It's also interesting to see that he kind of recognized Hope.

I really enjoy how you tend to develop the relationship of the trios more than the games then to. The last chapter shows more of their relationship then BBS probably managed.

You know what I keep wondering when we're with Roxas and Ven? Where is Xion this whole time? She should also be in Sora's heart, she'd probably also have a strong (indirect) tie to Ven. I find it funny that her presence hasn't been felt at all by the others yet.
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 41 posted)

I'm really quite interested in finding out who this Connection is. Based of off Vanitas' statement it's someone connected to Riku, so that kind of reduces the possible candidates, if it's not an original character.

I really like how you highlighted the Scientist aspect of Ienzo's character. It's also interesting to see that he kind of recognized Hope.

I really enjoy how you tend to develop the relationship of the trios more than the games then to. The last chapter shows more of their relationship then BBS probably managed.

You know what I keep wondering when we're with Roxas and Ven? Where is Xion this whole time? She should also be in Sora's heart, she'd probably also have a strong (indirect) tie to Ven. I find it funny that her presence hasn't been felt at all by the others yet.

Heh, yeah, and I also practically reduced the number of possible candidates in my last explanation. It isn't an original character, yet I got to say that in KH canon it probably was not really a character yet.

The main aim in this is twofold, for one it is to show that he really comes after his adoptive father and give some reason as to why he was the one to suggest the creation of that underground lab and two it serves to show that Ienzo isn't really evil, but rather amoral when it comes to his research.
It's still no excuse and using people as guinea pigs certainly isn't going to gain him many sympathy points (in-universe), yet
that he isn't completely nuts also shows in how he treated Hope during and after their battle, while Xemnas was perfectly fine to annihilate Lightning if he had gotten the chance.

That's one of the advantages of the written word. It allows you to go in much more detail with characters and their relationships than a game does, since a game always needs to keep focus on gameplay and diversity.

You really have a tendency to ask exactly the fitting things at the right time. This riddle is something that will be solved in the next few chapters, as Xion's first appearance isn't that far away anymore.

Hey Seph, isn't it time for you to post the next chapter?

Yeah, I have already prepared it for today, but sadly my time is up so I have to redirect it to tomorrow to actually post it.
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 41 posted)

Heh, yeah, and I also practically reduced the number of possible candidates in my last explanation. It isn't an original character, yet I got to say that in KH canon it probably was not really a character yet.

The main aim in this is twofold, for one it is to show that he really comes after his adoptive father and give some reason as to why he was the one to suggest the creation of that underground lab and two it serves to show that Ienzo isn't really evil, but rather amoral when it comes to his research.
It's still no excuse and using people as guinea pigs certainly isn't going to gain him many sympathy points (in-universe), yet
that he isn't completely nuts also shows in how he treated Hope during and after their battle, while Xemnas was perfectly fine to annihilate Lightning if he had gotten the chance.

That's one of the advantages of the written word. It allows you to go in much more detail with characters and their relationships than a game does, since a game always needs to keep focus on gameplay and diversity.

You really have a tendency to ask exactly the fitting things at the right time. This riddle is something that will be solved in the next few chapters, as Xion's first appearance isn't that far away anymore.

Oh is that so? I guess that excludes Maleficent, she would have been my first guess seeing other than Xehanort she has the closest ties to Riku's dark side. But I'm really interested in finding out who it could be.

I think that's actually a really good take on Ienzo, seeing that's how I'd imagine his personality to be like. I'm really interested in seeing his story unfold as well as getting a clear picture to why he's still helping Xehanort. I'm guessing it has to do with his thirst for knowledge.

Yes though even a game could convoy such information easily if they just added a few more scenes or optional dialog for the characters. Heck they could even go into it a little more in the journals.

Is that so? Well I can't wait. I can easily see her arrival as something that will cause even more confusion, also it will be interesting to see how she and Roxas will interact, seeing only she really would know of their friendship.
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 42 posted)

Oh is that so? I guess that excludes Maleficent, she would have been my first guess seeing other than Xehanort she has the closest ties to Riku's dark side. But I'm really interested in finding out who it could be.

I think that's actually a really good take on Ienzo, seeing that's how I'd imagine his personality to be like. I'm really interested in seeing his story unfold as well as getting a clear picture to why he's still helping Xehanort. I'm guessing it has to do with his thirst for knowledge.

Yes though even a game could convoy such information easily if they just added a few more scenes or optional dialog for the characters. Heck they could even go into it a little more in the journals.

Is that so? Well I can't wait. I can easily see her arrival as something that will cause even more confusion, also it will be interesting to see how she and Roxas will interact, seeing only she really would know of their friendship.

Maleficent is already scheming backstage while all this happens, yet with this she has indeed nothing to do.
It also doesn't have to be a connection to Riku's darkness, the connection alone already suffices.

There will be definitely some tidbits, but of course nothing too detailed since in the end Ienzo is a support and not a main character. ;)

True that, although that seems not to be the strong side of the staff of the KH games, as I remember the older Final Fantasies to be filled with these.
The route with the journals is something I hope KH III does.

Well, due to circumstances, it won't really be an "arrival" per se, but the reasons for that are easily understandable shortly after her introduction.

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Now it's finally time for Number 42. More Roxas and Ven-fluff, but there's already something in the background that suggests things won't remain as peaceful...

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XLII. Do you trust me?

He even felt the slight urge to hum a melody, but decided against it in order not to wake his "twin-in-looks".
He looks exhausted. But that's probably no wonder as he had to suppress his own pain and confusion to tend to me.

As Ventus studied Roxas' sleeping form further he noticed with uneasiness that his expression was slightly unresting and strained, his left hand twitching a little against the fingertips of his own right hand.
Does he have a nightmare? Now that I come to think of it...why did I even awake? It was certainly not our hands reaching out and touching each other; I did not even notice that until I contemplated to lightly scratch my own chest.

Closing his eyes and reaching out mentally, Ven tried to get a glimpse of the outside, the heart of his host. Despite his heart being essentially asleep, sometimes he could faintly feel something from the other heart that saved him.
Maybe there's something that...ah? There...did that...wake my inner self up?

Far away, faint, but persisting and steadily becoming louder, Ven could hear an unsettling noise accompanied by a shaking rumble.
Wh...What is this? It's very low...but it's unsettling.

A low moan was heard and Ven re-opened his eyes, glancing now into a mirror image.
Roxas' blue gems stared back at him, somewhat sleepy and a bit confused.
"Ven? What's...happening? Why are you awake?"

"There is...something. It disturbed my sleep, but I don't know what it is..."
"You mean this faint rumbling?"

Ventus nodded slightly. "So you can hear and feel it too?"
"I do. For quite a while to be honest...and it keeps getting more intense and louder as time moves on."
The boy under the coat gulped. "As if it is..."
"...moving, yes. Or more specific, approaching us."

After finishing that sentence, Roxas noticed where his outstretched left hand was located.
"Uh? Wha? I...I don't remember reaching out before I went to sleep."

"Me...me neither." The wounded boy answered slightly embarassed.
Ven's look-alike nibbled on his lower lip a bit before speaking again.
"It's strange...yet still, it's not that I mind it in any way."

Roxas gave him a small smile.
It's true, I don't mind at all. I am just happy that I'm not so lonely anymore. We know each other for such a short time and I nonetheless already like Ven...he makes me feel alive, accepted and...errr, how to put it? I am also so intrigued about our so many similarities...and his ties to Sora. Why is his heart inside Sora's? Does Sora know him? And how and why did I apparently hurt him for a longer time...that...that bothers me the most! Mainly because I don't friggin know anything about that! I only came to know that Ven even exists now, almost two months after my life in the physical world ended...
The lingering feeling of guilt inside Roxas was still there, nagging at his conscience.

Before he had realized it however, his hand had ceased to touch the fingertips of Ven's and instead moved forward to cover the other boy's hand completely.
Ventus made a short surprised sound at this before his expression also changed quickly to a friendly, smiling one.
"I certainly don't mind as well, you proved to be a nice guy. Yet I am surely interested what draws us into these subconsious actions of contact. It's still all somewhat confusing."

"We are two on that boat." Roxas answered with emphasis, taking his hand away with a slight blush and slowly getting up from his lying position. "So, how do you feel now? Has the pain got better?"
His tone got more concerned again as he studied Ven's expression and slight movements under the coat carefully.

Hearing the change in tone the wounded boy's smile deepened.
"I feel much better now. Thank you. The pain is still there, but I can constantly endure it now. It's even better than before you even entered my heart, so your presence does help to improve the healing ability of my heart."
He managed to speak those words without any shivering or sobbing at all, bent on prevent Roxas from worrying too much.

"Really? That would be so great news..." Roxas answered, a bit surprised by Ventus' steady voice and deep, genuine smile.
"Really! See this so you'll believe me!" Ven exclaimed brightly, pulling the coat down to waist-height and, with a bit effort, lifted himself up into a sitting position right beside his "twin".

"Whoa, careful. Don't overstrain yourself." The young Nobody shortly flinched in surprise before turning sideways a bit to face his look-alike.

Another low chuckle of the other blonde boy followed. "It's really okay at the moment, don't worry." He stressed in a soft voice, placing his right hand on his right knee and turning to face Roxas as well.

"You certainly look better as well. Your complexion doesn't look like a white bed sheet anymore."
He added aloud, again fixating his gaze on the other boy who now sat upright beside him, observing every slight change in his expression with caution.

Ventus lowly laughed at this. "If you say so. Gotta assume that's a good sign, huh? Even this..."
He carefully let his right hand slide over the long cut on his left hip, flinching as his fingers rubbed over the bare skin.
"...has got a bit better."

Roxas' eyes flickered a bit at seeing his look-alike flinch in pain, his posture stiffening.
"I'm so sorry for that." His whisper was very low, but since they were right beside each other Ven could hear it clearly.

"I know you are. Don't continue to blame yourself. You are already helping me and atoning for your mistake with this." The wounded boy answered in a soft, friendly tone, now surprising Roxas by gently placing his left hand on the other's right shoulder.

"It's just that it really bugs me to see you in pain so much; and I can't even explain why. And speaking of it, you shouldn't overstrain this as well by placing your hand on my shoulder!"
Shortly shaking his head in confusion, Roxas proceeded to bring up his own right arm, gently and utterly carefully caressing Ven's left shoulder with the fingertips of his right hand over the stab wound.

He can't explain why, oh my, while he looks like my age his mindset is clearly way younger. Ventus thought with slight surprise as he made his enjoyment of Roxas' treatment clear by blissfully closing his eyes for a short moment and humming happily.

"Eh?" The young Nobody blinked dumbfounded at the change in Ven's behaviour.
"I can tell you why. Not only because of guilt, but also because you came to care for me. I can see it in your eyes. It's also a natural thing for friends to care about each other." The boy with the maimed heart continued, returning Roxas' fixating gaze now.
"Y...Yeah. I guess I still don't exactly know the full meaning of being friends with someone and what parts it all includes." Roxas retorted meekly, almost sounding a bit ashamed.

"I would say no one knows the full meaning and all parts that it can include." Ven said, his free hand sliding over his bare chest before he shortly rubbed his chin. "After all, there are different forms of friendship as well."
As I had also to learn during my journey before everything...fell apart for us in the end. Terra...Aqua...I miss you so much...

The rumbling noise was heard again, significantly nearer, which let both boys shortly cringe in their sitting positions.

"What is this?" Ven asked warily.
"I don't know. But I don't like it one bit and I fear that if it reaches your heart you will be badly hurt." His look-alike answered, his expression worried and alerted.

Ven's eyes widened at this, giving Roxas a perplexed look as the young Nobody raised his head a bit higher, listening highly concentrated.
"It-it frightens me. Why? What is that?"
The sudden outburst and Roxas shoulders trembling increased Ven's confusion even more.

"Roxas, what?"
"You have to move, your heart can't stay in this part of Sora's heart any longer!"
Ventus question was interrupted by Roxas quickly turning towards him and gripping him by both shoulders while speaking hastily.
He flinched in pain as the other blonde boy's hand now squeezed the stab wound on his left shoulder.
"Ouch.. That's not possible, my heart is still asleep to the outside. The only reason you can talk with me is because you are inside my heart. I also can't wake up fully while still in here as then the heart of my host would immediately feel all the pain my heart feels. I can't do that to it."
Realizing what he was doing Roxas immediately let go of Ven's shoulders, delivering an apologizing expression.
"Then I'll move it."

"What?" Ventus blinked and tilted his head aside, even more confused.

"If you can't do it, I will take your heart and move it out of the way. This rumbling noise, I can feel it now better. It is dangerous, a mass of swirling energy, like a storm. It frightens me but we can't sit here and let it hit us. Ven, I don't want you to be hurt so badly again; you have just now recovered a bit and I won't allow that to be undone!"

The wounded boy just stared at his look-alike with big eyes for several moments, his arms now tightly closed around his own bare waist, making him look more fragile than he actually was.
"M-Move my heart? You?" He cursed himself that his voice was so meek and insecure.

Roxas slowly came to understand what he had now actually asked of his new friend, which made his wary, insecure reaction reasonable.

It's not even the fact that I once tortured his heart. No, I am actually asking him to put his very life, his essence, into my hands. But this rumbling, no, no, it's getting steadily louder, our time runs out!

Gulping, he moved his upper body a bit nearer to his 'twin'. He tried to let his determined attitude to do something overplay his fear completely and convince Ven of his sincerity.

"I know I am asking very much of you right now. I will only take your heart into my hands and move it to another platform inside Sora's heart so that energy storm doesn't hit you. Nothing more I swear. Do you trust me, Ven?"

"Of course I trust you. That is not what worries me. If that storm is truly targeting us it may also have homing capabilities and if you do get outside we won't be able to interact in any way anymore. Furthermore, if this energy is dangerous for me it is surely also for you."

Roxas felt that strange, warm feeling inside his own chest again and couldn't help but smile at Ven's outburst.

"Don't think of the worst case scenario yet. Even if it does have homing stuff, I'll find a way to counter it. I won't let your heart get more damaged than it already is! Of course we can still communicate, although then only through thoughts. Remember the sleeping spot I made you? The jacket you use as a pillow and the black coat are made from my memories, and when you hold on them it connects us.
Yeah, figures that this energy is surely also bad for me, but there's a difference between us right now, as I am more healthy and can possibly dodge it often. But real thanks for your concern."

"Ah! Yes, I almost forgot about this." Ven shortly tugged at the black coat that still covered his body from the waist down.
Roxas now displayed a more playful grin.
"Speaking of it, while I move your heart to another spot you should rest some more I think."

He leaned forward a bit more, this time very gently placing his hands on Ven's bare shoulders and affectionately, but also firmly pushing the wounded boy down into the 'pillow' again.


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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 42 posted)

Another very interesting chapter. I'm curious, is the threat that's approaching them really after both of them or only after one of them? Both senarios are kind of likely depending on what or who it is. I'm guessing it's either connect to the menace or is even the menace Van was talking to. Either way I'm intrigued and can't wait. Also I don't know why but I can't shake the feeling it might be someone familiar and not really intentionally harmful, though this is probably unlikely.

As usual the interaction between Roxas and Ven was quite enjoyable. I like how you show that Ven is mentally maturer then Roxas, which obviously is the case considering how Roxas is only little more than one year old and was kept from learning many things.

How exactly does Roxas plan on moving a heart? I'm sure I'll find out pretty soon but right now I'm kind of clueless.
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 42 posted)

Sephy, you write the fluffy parts between Ventus and Roxas brilliantly.

I'm curious what this approaching threat/energy may be, but, I can feel something like a fight coming on for Roxas in order to protect his new friend, Ventus. It amazes me how much they care about each other through their interactions. I think Roxas may end up carrying Ventus onto another platform in the forms they are in now or maybe, Ventus turns into a shard of his heart and gets moved? At least, those are my thoughts in how Roxas plans on moving Ventus.

I eagerly look forward to the next chapter.
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 42 posted)

*giggles* This was too cute! ^_^ I love it!!

But though, sounds like this storm or whatever it is is heading toward them.. That's not good! I wonder if it is who I think it is..?

Keep it rolling on, Sephy! :D
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 42 posted)

Another very interesting chapter. I'm curious, is the threat that's approaching them really after both of them or only after one of them? Both senarios are kind of likely depending on what or who it is. I'm guessing it's either connect to the menace or is even the menace Van was talking to. Either way I'm intrigued and can't wait. Also I don't know why but I can't shake the feeling it might be someone familiar and not really intentionally harmful, though this is probably unlikely.

As usual the interaction between Roxas and Ven was quite enjoyable. I like how you show that Ven is mentally maturer then Roxas, which obviously is the case considering how Roxas is only little more than one year old and was kept from learning many things.

How exactly does Roxas plan on moving a heart? I'm sure I'll find out pretty soon but right now I'm kind of clueless.

That I can actually say without spoiling too much: This threat is targeting neither Roxas nor Ventus, but Terra! The blondies are just in the way. ;)
It is indeed connected to the menace as it is an attack started by it. It won't be long now until things become much clearer.
Ohoo, the someone familiar might be not so far off, although we haven't seen that entity in this function in the canon series yet, but I can assure that any harm done by this technique is not only intended but highly wanted as well.

Would you believe me that those interactions are the ones that take me the longest to write alongside those between Sora & Riku? *ggg*
Much of the "mentally mature" stuff I also included because it was so obvious at the end of Days just how simple Roxas' definition and knowledge of friendship is. This was the case for Ven as well during the first half of BBS, but during his travels and befriending people like Hercules, Zack, Stitch, Peter Pan etc. really helped Ventus to expand his understanding on the concept, a difference between them that I just had to point out somehow.

Think about "Where the heart goes" from BBS with little Sora and you should get an idea. ^__^

Sephy, you write the fluffy parts between Ventus and Roxas brilliantly.

I'm curious what this approaching threat/energy may be, but, I can feel something like a fight coming on for Roxas in order to protect his new friend, Ventus. It amazes me how much they care about each other through their interactions. I think Roxas may end up carrying Ventus onto another platform in the forms they are in now or maybe, Ventus turns into a shard of his heart and gets moved? At least, those are my thoughts in how Roxas plans on moving Ventus.

I eagerly look forward to the next chapter.

Thank you, I'm really working towards developing them into a pair of brothers, lol.

Oh, there might be indeed a fight in store, but of a different kind than you would normally expect though.
This strong amount of care partly surely comes from their similar situations, but also from their innate connection and these somewhat puzzling parts of them reaching for each other without consciously instigating it.
Sora is normally included in that too, but currently the force that is blocking Sora's consciousness affects this as well.

These predictions aren't that off actually, like I said above to Adrian, imagine the "where the heart goes"-scenes from BBS and you'll get an idea on how it may work here. It'll be shown next chapter anyways. ^__^

Well, we're back at Roxas and action finally came back his way. Is some parasite feeding at Sora's heart?

Action is good, lol, Rox will have a lot of running to do.
If you think along the same vein as Vanitas has with Riku, no, not exactly. There is something feeding at Sora's heart (and anyone else's connected to him, actually), but it's not necessarily a parasite.

*giggles* This was too cute! ^_^ I love it!!

But though, sounds like this storm or whatever it is is heading toward them.. That's not good! I wonder if it is who I think it is..?

Keep it rolling on, Sephy! :D

Cute and fluffy is what it's meant to be, ;D.

Yep, it's headed their way, which Roxas can feel, that's why he gets so upset. Well, what do you think who it is then, lol?

Next weekend, next chapter, I'll try. <__<
 

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Lol, well, you did it perfectly! :D

As for who it is.. I can think of a few, but I better had wait for the next chapter to confirm it or cross it out, you know?

I guess work is sure keeping you busy, huh? :/ Just try your best to get it out. :) We got your back.
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 42 posted)

That I can actually say without spoiling too much: This threat is targeting neither Roxas nor Ventus, but Terra! The blondies are just in the way. ;)
It is indeed connected to the menace as it is an attack started by it. It won't be long now until things become much clearer.
Ohoo, the someone familiar might be not so far off, although we haven't seen that entity in this function in the canon series yet, but I can assure that any harm done by this technique is not only intended but highly wanted as well.

Would you believe me that those interactions are the ones that take me the longest to write alongside those between Sora & Riku? *ggg*
Much of the "mentally mature" stuff I also included because it was so obvious at the end of Days just how simple Roxas' definition and knowledge of friendship is. This was the case for Ven as well during the first half of BBS, but during his travels and befriending people like Hercules, Zack, Stitch, Peter Pan etc. really helped Ventus to expand his understanding on the concept, a difference between them that I just had to point out somehow.

Think about "Where the heart goes" from BBS with little Sora and you should get an idea. ^__^

Oh so the menace is using the connection between Sora and Riku too attack Terra from within Sora's heart and the Blondies are just in the way. So that also means the menace is probably someone connected to both Sora and Riku and is responsible for the wall stopping Sora from contacting Roxas and Ven.

I'm not suprised that character interactions are harder to write then action sequences especially if it's suppose to be emotional.
Yeah, but I don't think that's the only place where Ven would be maturer, after all he has a lot more experience with people and has also been thought in contrary to Roxas who was kept in the dark about so much.

Oh okay. So that's how they're going to do it, but how are they going to turn his platform and projection into a sparking ball of light?
 

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Oh so the menace is using the connection between Sora and Riku too attack Terra from within Sora's heart and the Blondies are just in the way. So that also means the menace is probably someone connected to both Sora and Riku and is responsible for the wall stopping Sora from contacting Roxas and Ven.

I'm not suprised that character interactions are harder to write then action sequences especially if it's suppose to be emotional.
Yeah, but I don't think that's the only place where Ven would be maturer, after all he has a lot more experience with people and has also been thought in contrary to Roxas who was kept in the dark about so much.

Oh okay. So that's how they're going to do it, but how are they going to turn his platform and projection into a sparking ball of light?

Yep, exactly, that's what Naminé spoke about when she mentioned to Kairi that connections between Hearts can be misused.
In general, it's a double connection at work here and the menace can choose which one to use, either the one between Sora & Riku or the one between the menace and Vanitas. Since Vanitas' heart is inside Riku's right now of course both ways would affect Riku.

That's why I'm always relieved when I managed to get a good balance in those.
That's indeed true as well, I was mainly using the friendship-issue as an example because that's the main topic they blondies talk about.

Awakening platforms and walkways can vanish, remember? Of course Roxas will have to leave Ven's heart first, but that's what we about to see unfold:

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XLIII. Holding your Heart

"Whoops, h-hey!" Ventus protested with a low surprised squeak, his legs flung upwards kicking on impulse, the coat falling off his lower legs in the process.

Roxas' grin widened at this reaction, he turning his gaze around to look towards Ven's flailing limbs without really thinking.
"The better you get, the more sprier you become...huh?" As he realized something on Ven's legs, his eyes widened a bit.
"That's...marvelous. Look Ven, your feet...you have a shoe on both now!!!"

The answer he got was a slightly annoyed grunt and when turning his head again he could see the wounded boy displaying a small frown.
"Tell me how to look when you're still holding me down by the shoulders?" Ven finally answered in a slight pouting tone, causing them both to burst into laughter shortly afterwards.

"Heh, sorry sorry." Roxas snorted chuckling, removing his hands so Ven could shortly move his upper body up again.
"Ah, you're right. Nice, now my projected form has also back its left shoe, which means my heart is truly healing at a faster rate."

"Yep, and since it works so good you should rest a bit more while I take care of that approaching energy storm." The other youth stressed and with a mischievous smirk, pushed Ven gently down again, also spreading the coat out over his half-naked form once more.
"Now be a good boy and rest more...after we evade that stuff we can talk some more in-depth." He continued, standing up and turning away.

Ventus had also a smirk, shortly scratching his left cheek with one finger before letting his hand slide through his blonde locks.
"Alright, alright. As you say...Doctor Roxas!"

Roxas looked left-hand side over his shoulder with an amused snort, his expression now mirroring Ven's completely. "That's the right attitude. I'll be back shortly, so stay sharp, Ven."

"You as well, come back safely." Ven exclaimed brightly, his smirk changed to a warm smile as he cuddled up in the coat again.

"Don't you worry, just focus on resting." Roxas whispered without turning to face Ven to hide his red cheeks, running away from the broken awakening platform to leave Ven's heart.
Damn it. Why does Ven make me feel embarassed so often? He is such a kind person...just like Sora if not even more. Now I am wondering even more who could harm such a being, or is it because Ven is so gentle and kind-hearted? That he is too nice?

As he passed more cracked walkways and awakening platforms Roxas quickly shook his head several times. Enough! Stop thinking about Ven and his personality, you idiot. The approaching danger is more important right now. I need to focus and have no time for being embarassed and flattered!
He scolded himself in his mind, switching back to a more professional attitude.

The crossover from Ven's to Sora's heart came, Roxas stepping from the last cracked walkway onto a platform that was intact and depicted Sora's picture.
I'm back. Uh? Whoa...
The young Nobody immediately felt something was off, the whole atmosphere in Sora's heart was heavier, more anxious than before.
Nearly tumbling, Roxas caught himself in the last second, pressing his feet firmly on the stained glass.

"Sora? What's happening here? Sora???" He started to shout, again futilely trying to contact his other.
Ghhh, again no use? Damn, I have no time to waste.

He turned towards the cracked walkway leading into Ven's heart.
"Now Ven, please entrust your heart to me!" He pleaded aloud, doing the same in his thoughts.

Alright. Here we go, be careful, Roxas. The touch of Ven's mind was warm and comfortable as he heard the boy's thoughts echo in his own.
The cracked walkway that lead away from Sora's platform was now engulfed in a bright, golden light as it disappeared, a glowing, golden orb remaining in its place hovering in the dark background.
Ohh? This...this is Ven's heart? I was inside that little glowing orb the last hours?
Roxas tilted his head in disbelief, his eyes widened with awe and the whole expression like a little kid staring at a christmas tree as the little golden orb floated closer to him.

Yep, you were exactly in here.

Ven answered and Roxas could swear that the other boy was mentally chuckling.
Quit staring and open your palm.
Ventus demanded, his tone still somewhat amused.
The orb was near enough now so Roxas could spot details. It wasn't actually a real orb at all. It was indeed a heart also shaped like a heart, the orb-like appearance coming from the golden light-corona surrounding the actual heart like an aura.
To his shock the heart itself had countless, thin cracks across its surface in a glowing, blood-red color in differing intensities which caused an unsettling faint red tint in the golden aura around it.
These...are these the wounds of his heart? It looks really horrible...and somehow saddening.

Finally giving in to Ven's request he extended his left arm with the black-edged wristband, the palm of the hand facing upwards.
The heart settled down in his outstretched hand, sending a warm feeling through Roxas' entire memory-based body.
He let out a small gasp.
This...this feels so good...and somehow...familiar??? Huh?

Roxas? Are you daydreaming?
Ven's thoughts felt even more close and comfortable now.

Ah,no, I just...uh; forget it. I can't explain it anyways.
Eh?
He could see an image of Ven tilting his head in confusion inside his head, raising another small smile on the Nobody's face.
It's really nothing, now let's see where to move.

Roxas covered the heart very carefully with his other hand, holding it close to his stomach as he started to move towards one of the other walkways inside Sora's heart.
The rumbling noise was heard even louder and he could feel its force way more intense since he left Ven's heart, which made the boy shiver.
This is bad...really bad.

The pace of his steps increased before he abruptly stopped shortly before the walkway, looking around in nervousness.
Is this really the right way? From where is the storm approaching? I don't want to run right into it by taking the wrong direction...

More warm feelings poured out from Ven's heart over his hand and arms like a subtle gesture to calm him.
It helped as the boy now narrowed his eyes and listened very concentrated to determine from which direction the malevolent energy was coming.
This way!
Roxas swirled around and started to quickly walk into the other direction, not daring to run as he feared to drop Ven's heart.

He managed to cross two walkways and two more platforms before he noticed the storm approaching now even faster.
No! Did it sense me or what?

Increasing his pace more he tried to hold Ven's heart even closer to his memory-based form. As he reached the third platform, colored in a bright green with Sora's picture having his eyes open for a change, he noticed the way splitting up into two as there were two stained glass walkways leading away from it. One leading slightly downwards in a curve while another was going straight forward.
Mistrusting the downward one Roxas rushed over to the straight walkway, nearly tripping over his own feet in his haste.
It's coming nearer, it's steadily increasing its pace as well...

This walkway was considerably longer than the others and although Roxas could already see the next platform in the distance it would still take him a while to get there.
Why don't you run? Going at it like this will result in you falling eventually!
Ventus' thoughts came to him again.

I might drop you!
The other blonde shouted mentally back, looking over his shoulder several times while still hasting along the long walkway without actually running.
The mental image of Ven's face in his head let out a sigh before his expression changed into another warm smile.
You are really acting like an older brother protecting his younger sibling, that's so kind of you.

For a short moment Roxas thought that Ven's cheeks were blushing again before the wounded boy set up a determined face with a stern voice.
But don't overdo it! You're holding my heart between both your hands, so why would it fall? Think about the other possibility: You fall and then the energy storm gets us both!

Biting his lower lip for a short moment Roxas had to admit that Ven was right. Despite all self-imposed professionalism and confidence he still let his subconscious confusion and steadily growing fear cloud his judgement.
Screw you, messed up mind!
He snarled in contempt at his own anxious and lost state, fighting down more anger impulses at his helplessness and lack of overall knowledge as he finally broke into a run.

Due to the recently deepened connection between them Ventus could feel all this turmoil within his twin-in-looks, which made him finally understand even better why Roxas had reacted the way he did when he barged into his wounded heart.
Now I am even more interested in hearing his story. There is so much hidden bitterness inside Roxas and an anxious vibe of perceived helplessness nearly always subtly underlining his very existence.
Then he constantly tries to overplay all these problems, getting anger issues when he fails to suppress them.
Sighing again, Ven realized that he himself was going astray and not focusing on the issue at hand.

Again, self-blame won't help either! Calm down, re-evaluate our options and then take the next step. Don't worry too much about me, I'll give word if I feel a threat for my heart.
He addressed his look-alike another time through their mental connection, as calm as he could manage.

Alright, thanks Ven.
Roxas increased his pace even more, now constantly running over the unusual long, straight walkway.
Behind him, the rumbling noise got steadily louder and he hoped that he could soon take a turn either left or right in order to ascertain if that energy storm was really targeting him or if he just had chosen to run away from it in exactly the opposite direction.
Two thirds of the walkway had been crossed by now and he allowed himself a small relieved sigh as the next platform came nearer and nearer.

Ten metres to go, nine, eight, Roxas’ mood got better with every crossed metre until a sudden flash right beside the right side of his face threw him nearly off the walkway. Shocked, he turned his head around quickly without slowing down, immediately wishing he hadn’t.
Too late…ghh. It’s too late.

It wasn’t really an energy storm, but rather a broad ray roughly the size of Roxas’ own torso in diameter. With an unsettling dark red colour surrounded by swirling and crackling black lightning which occassionally discharged in some energy bursts in all directions it was clear that this energy was even more malevolent than previously thought.

Just how did this “thing” get into Sora’s heart? Uhhh, it’s still about five or six metres until the platform.
I don’t think I can make it in time…
…at least not without putting Ven’s heart in danger. I’m scared…but, but I promised I would not let him be hurt!

Gulping as he slightly trembled, Roxas stopped and turned sideways. Stretching his arms out as far as he could he held Ven’s heart over the endless chasm beside the walkway, out of reach of the energy ray which would undoubtly hit him full force at chest height.

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 43 posted)

I'm not sure what a board ray is...

Anyhow, I like seeing how Roxas was able to take Ventus heart and try to carry it safely to a new platform. I feel kind of bad that Roxas still has so much anxiety and anger; from feeling so helpless at times. Reminds me of all the times in KHII and Days he was so helpless and betrayed.

Another great chapter, Sephy. Can't wait to see the next one and what Roxas will do against the board ray.
 

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...And let the chase begin. But then again, what is that thing?

And it's good to know that Roxas is, in fact, able to fix Ven's heart in some degree...
 

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Re: Kingdom Hearts: Hearts in Unison (Chapter 43 posted)

This was a great chapter, Sephiroth! I'm looking more and more to it every time. :)

I'm glad to see that Ven's doing well, even it will take time to fully heal himself back to normal.

As for that storm, it had better pass quickly!!

I wonder if the next chapter involves Ven learning more about Roxas and his story..?
 
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