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Khinsider College "where murder happens every now and then"



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basicly i've turned khinsider into collage for the rich(every single one of you) where murder happens every day

chapter 1: the begining of murders


"Hmp i've got a big day ahead of me now with my girlfriend and mourning classes with her so.." but the person was inturrpted by his girlfriend coming in his privite room in her casual look,blue jeans and a blue sweatshirt. "Hey Alex what were you going you to say about me" said the women. "Well your attrative Cathrine and your smoking hot" said Alex. Cathrine gave him a kiss and said " how nice of you to say that and with Valenten times day around the corner i say your natural romantic". "Thank you i try my best now i need to get ready for my classes so can you please leave Cathrine"said Alex walking towards the shower getting ready to take one. "Sure i'll leave you alone i'm going to find Evalgene bye sweetheart" said Cathrine blowing a kiss to Alex and taking off t find Evalgene. She walked down to the pool area to find Evalgene hanging out with her boyfriend Renn " Ugh why do you and your boyfriend have to hog the pool all the time don't you have classes i the next two hours at 8:00 Am" said Cathrine talking to Evalgene. "Oh relax once in a while your being to harsh do you want your sercert to get out" said Evalgene taunting her with the rash she saw once on Cathrine. "Fine fine do as you please i'm going to play golf for an hour then report to my classes early to bad i have to share classes with wih someone i'd never become friends with" said Cathrine walking off to the golf course. "Man what's her problem Renn" said Evalgene getting to the point of relaxion " I think it' because of an old rivalry you both share to black mail each other" said Renn scoting closer to Evalgene.

Alex got out of the shower to find his pal Chris standing in the room looking blushed a little when he saw Alex come out of the shower. " Hey chris WTF are you doing here' said Alex " i thought i told you to call me Grand master Chris Alex" said Chris looking at his friend in his red shower robe. "That still dosn't explain why you are here Chris did someone send you GMChris" said Alex trying to follow why his friend is here. "I came to see if you know that it's seven your girlfriends looking for ya" said Chris. "OMG i forgot i have early classes well hm it's only a two minute walk so i can ther before 7:10 gotta get dreesed scram Chris" said Alex rumming though his cloths and decided to wear his black jeans and a green redish hoodie and rushed to the adavanced science semnor class.

Inside the science class building he saw only Cathrine there looking though science books for pleasure, professer Orion just standing there watching for more people untill he spotted Alex. "Hey the class begins at 8:00 am are you coming here to study more if so go to where Cathrine is and she'll give you a book" said Orion. For the next 40 minutes he and Cathrine studied notes and got future homwork finshed so they could have more time together, then people starting arrive. The first was Evalgene wearing pink jeans and a pink jacket with her boyfriend Renn wearing slightly white gray pants with a gray hoodie then everyone else arrived at the time they were supposed to and only three were tardy and given detentions. " Today class we will learn about the fundamentals of science starting with the solor system ..." Orion kept on saying educational things untill the lession was over with and they were transferred to their next class social studes with their professer star. "Anyone know about what happened during the civil war to each side and what did they lose altogther Renn" Star said pointing at Renn. "Well both sides lost slaverly and Lincoin signed a document destroying slaverly" said Renn answring Star's question then after a little while they were sent to math class with the professer as they call him and did some math problems and then were sent to professer Ragnell 17's comm arts class and then were done for the day and had lunch were they talked about the new transfer student who called himself Bonechill. "What's his problem he just sits over there never trying to spark a converstaion well i'm going to talk him out of it okay guys" said Evalgene heading over to where Bonechill was sitting. "Hi i'm Evalgene the lead cheerleader at this school what's your name" said Evalgene asking him a question he replied by jerking his head over and saying " Just leave me alone creeply girl" and with that he ran off outside to relax a little better without someone bothering him alot.

Evalgene sat back down at her table looking like WTF just happened. Raz said to her "He's just not fitting in here propply i say we help him achieve that are you with me Evalgene". "Yes i'll help fit that boy in here even if it means i resort to stalking him" said Evalgene promising to fit that boy in this collage. Then her boyfriend Renn came and said "Wanna make out in my room beatuful lady or do you not". "Yes i will Renn now let's go make out" Evalgene replied to Renn's question and walking off towards the dorms holding hands with Renn. Meanwhile at Alex's table hes enjoying launch with his girlfriend when she said "Hey umm did you notice a boy just running though here heading outside" said Casthrine looking confused at what just happened. "Yeah i did wonder what his problem is though let's go look for him" said Alex getting up and heading ouitside finding Betrayious and taocha kissing in the pool right over the deck. "Have you two lovebirds seen a boy running though here" Alex asked the couple "No now can we get back to kissing" they both said to Alex and he repiled"Yes you may resume kissing".
After 4 hours of searching they then returned to Alex's room to kiss only to find out that someones already in there an it was Chris wearing a suit and tie. "Hey guys what were you about to do here it's 4:00 pm we have a party to get to" said Chris looking at his watch. "Sorry but we don't have time we were going make out riht now can you please leave" said Cathrine asking him to leave "well okay but next time don't be to busy for me kay" said Chris leaving for his party. "Well now then tiger we're alone in here let's make out already Alex" said Cathrine kissing him on the check "Well okay lets" he replied and they went at it for hours not knowing the danger Chris was about to be in.

Chris went down to the staff party for the first year of this school being built, there was where he saw Bonechill who said he wanted to talk to him out at the gun range alone. When they got to the gun range Binechill tied him up to a gun target pole,holding a sniper rirlfe ready to shot. "What are doing trying to kill me here" Chris shouted at him "Yes and after you all of these other snoty stuck-up rich kids can suck my balls as they die" said Bonchill repling to his question. Bonechill wanted to have fun with this and shot his legs first making him scream in pain then he shot his ball sack making him cry in pain then he shot his heart, running away as he did behind a corner as he watched them all come down and witness Chris's death place shocked to find him dead. As they watched as they buried Chris's dead body in the ground Alex held on to Cathrine and Renn held on to Evalgene both thinking "Whoever did this will eventually come for us and i won't let the murderer take my girlfriend's life.


And i'm ending it there please don't hate me if you don't like the way i put you all in this well not all of you that would be extremely hard to do so i hope you like thid
 
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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

You made my day. Thank you.

Btw it's college instead of collage, two different words with two different meanings
 

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Why?,Why did u make me do that!?
 

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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

o.o
All I can say about this is ouch
Why would you have someone shoot a guy there? o_O
 

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NOT EVEN CRIMS WOULD SHOOT SOMEONE THERE
 

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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

I'm liking this can't wait for more. You also had a few grammar and spelling errors, the main problem is that I feel there isn't enough personality to the characters yet. I felt as if sometimes they just said stuff and moved on.
 

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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

Soz about caps accidently turned it on. :-(
 

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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

I'm tired of this Bull**** Roaringflames, WORK ON YOUR GRAMMAR! You didn't even spell Evangline right
 

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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

well someon's a bitch about grammer i did it all on memory so i will edit the frist later

Chapter 2: Being scared in the hell of mind

Evangline walked straight towards the pool where Renn was already waiting for her to come. "You know if that murder tries to murder you srceam as loud as you can so i'll come and save you and kick his sorry ass for Chris" said Renn holding on to her girlfriend. "Aw so sweet of you, come here you"said Evangline kissing Renn in the pool on the concreat part. Then after 3 minutes of kissing they got out and went to their rooms to sleep but they only dream of one thing being killed right hereat some part of the school. Alex was fast alsleep already thinking of doing some justice by killing the murder but also keeping his friend in peace just then he heard an anoucement. "The gun range is closed untill the killer is caught so is your abilty to go out at night time that is all good night" the anoucement said to every room in this whole entire campus. Evangline was havng a hell of a nightmare first she was in hell in it second she could not move an inch even when she tried and then she woke up from her nightmare to a srceam coming from the distance taocha's srceam.


Bonechill was searching rooms for who to kill that night and every one's was locked except for taochas. As he went in he found her reading some comics,but she wound't for long. When Bonechill crept up on her he grabbed her by the neck and chocked her with a tight grip as she tried to pull his arms away from her neck,he plain walked over to the balcony and threw her down and landed on top of her breaking her back and her arms as he continuing to choke her as her final attaptemps failed she let him kill her because there was no use in trying. When Evangline ran to her room,she found blood traces all over the floor and leading towards the balcony where she found her dead body right on the ground and then she contacted headmaster Nevermore's office to him that someelse has been killed. "Damn it who the f.u.c.k is responspble for these deaths it makes us look bad" said Nevermore cursing alot under his breath. Then he made an anoucment saying to lock your doors at night and never to open them for anyone even if they're saying they are being murdered.


The next day at khinsider college everyone was silent as they mourned who died over these nights as well as welcomed a new student who was transfered her from her college her name was Toria. Classes began normally that day only when class was over the teachers wrote catch the murder on the board aswell as welcomed the new student to the class. At lunch time Alex,Cathrine,Evangline,and Renn wanted to meet and chat with the new student who sat at an empty table all by herself. Alex sat next to her while Renn sat on the oppsite side and Cathrine and Evangline sat in front of her. "Look i don't want any trouble okay could you just leave" said Toria thinking they wanted her money. "No no we don't want to cause trouble we wanna be your friends" said Evangline holding out a hand and Toria shacked it. "Well i'm sorry for misjudging you anyways i've two murders were commited here is that true?" said Toria askig them all a question. "Yes it is true about that we don't even know who the murder is to tell the truth" said Cathrine answering her question. "Well hmm let's just keep in touch just on the safe side if anything goes wrong we just run away from it and meet together" said Toria giving a solution to the murder problem.


stopping it there hope you aren't mad Bonechill
 
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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY I'm EVIL!
 

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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

I wasn't in this so I don't like it.

Oh...and learn who to write please. Grammar, spelling, and all. Or get a beta or something...
 

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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

This actually seems interesting, but things need to be spaced out.
 

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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

chapter 3 up but i will not space out lines i'll write it the way i want to

Chapter 3: Death in your sleep

After lunch Toria went to her room and grabbed her white and black swimsuit and met Alex,Renn,Cathrine,and Evangline at the pool area. "Sorry i'm late guys so are you guys gonna make out here or something like that" Toria said with a grin on her face. "Maybe but the question is will betrayious make you kiss with him" said Evangline looking over at the golf course to find Betrayious walking towards them. "Well hello tiger let's make out in your room" said Betrayious walking right over to Toria and she smacked the crap out of him. "Pervert" Toria said walking towards the pool and slowly getting in as another student got in. "Well it's nice to meet someone as lovely as you madam aren't you Toria the new exchange student" said the student, "Yeah i am and you are" said Toria asking for the students name. "I'm Johny fcuking craig and my friend over there is Chrisp" said Johny telling her all about himself and his friend and after awile Evangline's friends came. "Oh is that Toria she's looking good that damn bitch" said Sparks "I don't agree to that Sparks why don't we ask Reflection for her opinion" said Raz looking over towards Reflection and she replied "I don't agree either guys so now let's introduce our boyfriends" said Reflection grabbing her boyfriend. " This is Sam everyone and Spark's boyfriend is Sign and Raz's is a guy who calls himself Longlivelife" said Reflection. "Oh and did you hear we're getting two transfers already one's here and the other one will get here tommorw. I also the guy coming tommorw is supposedly very cute and romantic" said Sparks telling them some valuble information

Meanwhile Bonechill was in Nevermore's office disscusing a serious topic. "Well you've already made progress with the killing Bonechill. They are probbley going to lock their doors so here is a key that will open any door in this facilty now remember take it steadly don't go overboard casue killing richies is more fun that way now you may leave my office and find your next target" said Nevermore giving him a key and a knife. "Okay i will father you have my word" said Bonechill putting his hand over his heart. "Good boy now get to work in 5 hours at dusk kill a person and run back to your room and clean the blood off that knife and act like your sleeping" said Nevermore giving him directions on what to do.

At 10:00 pm Cathrine came to Alex's dorm room to watch a comedy but found him tied to a chair and was forced to watch porn, Betrayious laughing in the corner. "Oh so you think this is funny don't you well try this" she said kicking him in the balls making him cry in pain then untieing Alex and then taking out the porn he was forced to watch and putting in Funny people instead. Alex got up to his feet and kicked Betrayious out of his room then sat back down next to his girlfriend. "Well he's a pervert what do you want to do him" she said asking him a question "Have him lose the internet forever" Alex said in replay. "Well that's kinda mean but there always a chance he might get killed so wait untill they catch they catch the killer to do that Alex" she said in a sigh like term. After watching the movie for two hours they heard a srceam coming from Betrayious's room and rushed over to find a knife in his heart and his door open. "Oh god the third murder already god when will this stop" said Cathrine holding on to Alex but he knew that it might never stop so he hugged her back when Renn and Evangline came rushing from their room so did Toria all of them looking shocked at what happened.

that's the end folks of this here chapter and look i'm not the best speller in the world don't expect me to have perfect grammer written
 
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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

lol Im in it :p Thanks for including me in your murder story? XD
 

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Re: Khinsider Collage "where murder happens every now and then"

thank you for posting i'm trying to keep this alive and in the next chapter you and Toria date and eventually kiss while one of Evageline's posse dies. Well now then i'm trying to put alot of members in this so it can be a really huge funny story in fact it's going to be a really long story and it finshs when the killer is killed or the last of the staff are killed. People killed so far
Grand-master chris: shot in the legs then the dick then the heart
Taocha: choked then got her back broken then choked to death
Lord betrayious: stabbed in the heart while he was sleeping
 
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