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princess ashe

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sorry bout the title couldnt think of anything else. i cant decide whether its an FF or KH fanfic. you decide. well here goes

Shadows will reign over all. Darkness shall fall. Those without hearts, those of the name Heartless will take power. Those careless few who crave power, will be absorbed. Many worlds have been saved and locked by the boy who wields the keyblade. But Ivalice lies alone, away from all others. The Heartless have taken advantage of this and now seek the keyhole which leads to the heart of Dalmasca, the heart of Ivalice. Ivalice may now be doomed with no one to save its heart. Hope lies in the heart of one child, whose ambition “protect others” lay above all others. Her heart lies protected, so is she the only one who can save Ivalice from the Heartless?
Larsa- hey, Kid!
Me- oh, hello Lord Brother
Larsa- what’s wrong?
Me- it could be nothing, but everything has gone quiet. Maybe even too quiet
Larsa- what do you mean?
Me- haven’t you noticed? Not even laughter fills the streets of Rabanastre.
???- So?
We swing round to find Xiao.
Me- afternoon, Xiao.
Larsa nods a greeting
Xiao- so what’s this about silence, then?
We ignore his question
Larsa- you know what I’ve realised? It has been getting dark lately. More shadows in the day.
Me- yes, I’ve realised that also. . Meaning that whatever is going to happen is gonna happen soon
Xiao- so? You will deal with it. You always do.
Me- why do you think I can? I suppose I shall have to try though, who else will. I believe it will be close this time. To be honest, I am worried
Larsa’s eyes grow wide with fright
Xiao’s laughter fills the room
Xiao- ahahahaha!! Wow, Captain Moonshine Solidor is worried. That’s a first
I glare at him
Silence
A silence to be broke by an opening door as Sir Basch Fon Rosenburg falls at my feet
Basch- Ashe… in… danger!
Me- WHAT!? THEN WHY ARE YOU HERE!? EXPLAIN!
Basch- shadows, too many. Ashe told me to fetch you.
Me- why does everyone always depend on me *smiles and swings sword over shoulder* ok, I’m on my way!
 

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1) Wall o' Text - Needs paragraphs
2) Use ", not "Character -", unless you are actually doing a script, which woud actually be "Character:"
3) Heartless and Keyholes don't exist in FF, they are in KH. So, this would be a KH fanfic
4) This should be here.
5) Needs a lot of length. 1000 words a chapter should be your minimum.
 

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I'll be moving this now.

I'd really appreciate it if you guys report anything CW related to me since I'm one of the few staff members that actually goes in here. Riel-chan is lazy desu. =w=
 
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