DoW's Poetry

[Darkness of White]

So I decided to make a thread with my poetry in it. Tell me what you think please!

Oh, and no, I'm not changing any of these, what I post is the final product, so please don't tell me to change them.



9-9-08
Lost in my own heart, all I see, all I want, is you, someone who I can only dream of.
Tired and lonely, I wish. I wish to hear your voice, see your smile, and feel your touch once again.
You are all I love, all I long for.
Let us be together at last.


9-10-08
You are the one who granted my wishes and made my dreams come true.
I offered you all that I could, and you took it with a smile.
Then the next day, you completely destroyed my heart.
I feel like death is the only way I can be happy again, but as you said
“Death is not an option.”
I never loved anyone more than you, and you said you loved me too.
But for me, you really were too good to be true.

9-11-08
A friend now is a friend forever.
I have all but lost hope for the return of my best friend’s heart.
Always will I care, nothing will change that.
My best friend shows compassion and a warm heart beneath an icy and forbidding exterior.
I want him to come back to my heart and reopen his to mine.
I long for what could have been and what felt like what was, for however short a time.
Please come back, I love you.



These are a set from 3 of the worst days of my life, the three days after my 16th birthday. I don't want to go back into that story though.

 

[Aucune Raison]

Nice job on those. I'm more of a fan of form poetry, but I felt the emotion in yours. Are you planning to ever make more?

 

[menulizz]

You know? you have a great imagination your fic is very impressive. I love this so much :36:

 

[Darkness of White]

Thanks. I do write a lot, just not all the same kind all the time. That's only one set. I have more.

12-??-08

Trapped in a cage like an animal
Safe from the danger, yet in peril from the heart
Fed as well as can be, yet starved for love
A man walks by and smiles as he looks in the cage
He then walks on, clinging to the hand of a woman
Tears flow down the face once more
Jealousy had overcome the heart and mind once again
Not so much as an invite to come out
Everyone but the prisoner has a key, everyone can open the cage, yet no one wants to
Everyone is so occupied with someone else, while I have no one

12-??-08

I look at you and I see a friend
I look at you and I see an enemy
I look at you and I see my life
I look at you and I see my death

I see all that I’ve loved
I see all that I’ve despised
I see happiness
I see pain

I know I will accept you, through I don’t know why
I feel I will cease without you, but the reason I know not
I am afraid of what will happen if I’m with you
I’m terrified of what will happen if I’m not
I need to be miles away from you
I need to be as close as possible


I wrote these two the same day, but I don't know what day that was.

 

[Queen of Hearts]

These are a set from 3 of the worst days of my life, the three days after my 16th birthday. I don't want to go back into that story though.

Well, good writing must come from experience then huh? You did a great job- I really enjoyed reading these.