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did you read everything?:blink: it's like 5 chapters! and congrats you're a premium now^^
Ahh, nice chappie FK ^-^ and I'm really glad you're okay (I just woke up >_<)
I almost missed a chappy, NOOOOO!
Anyway, very nice!
Anyway, very nice!
Um it's alright..I better say when I'm gonna post a chapter ><
I've read the first two chapters so far, pretty good! And it has an interesting storyline.
Thanks Sam =D oh I'm so sorry guys I haven't been able to upload chapter 6..but I promise it's gonna be on tonight ^.^
Your tonight is probably my tomorrow.....
Okay, I'll wait. I'll even try to do it patiently....
(Haku, I like your new avy and sig btw)
Okay, I'll wait. I'll even try to do it patiently....
(Haku, I like your new avy and sig btw)
Oh guys I'm sorry for the long wait but..I've been writing this chapter at school and it's like 3 pages long..on my notebook offcourse but don't worry it'll be up today*goes and continues writing*
Oh thanks..it's just I have a lot on my mind and I'm so busy >< and I was trying to write a good chapter so that you all like it =/
Oh thankies Haku ^.^ you're a great buddy..now..*goes to finish the chapter* give me 30 or 45 minutes..please :mellow:
Heres' Chap 6 and sorry for the double post 
Morning arrived at Versat and the sun shone like it has never done before, the sound of the birds could be heard from outside, it was a really peaceful day.
At the west wing all the girls were getting dressed and ready to go to their classrooms, the sound of their voices made Crystal awake.
She looked around her room and got out of her bed, she seemed to be surprised by the noise the other girls were making, anyway she remembered that she had to go to her classes and started to search for her uniform “Where could this be?..where..agh!” she just got resigned and decided to go to school just with her normal clothes, just when she was about to get out of the room someone opened the door.
“Good morning, may I come in?” it was a girl of about 6 years old, she had long brwon hir and blue eyes, “you’re the new one,right?”the girl sweetly asked.
Crystal stared at her and answered her question “Yes…I’m new here..nice to met you..um?”
The other girl sat on Crystal’s bed “Kasumi is the name and yours is?” she inquired.
“Crystal…” she responded and continued searching for her uniform, she kept looking everywhere until she finally realized she needed some help “Excuse me, but where are the uniforms?” she asked.
The other girl stood up and opened the closet “Here they are, how come you didn’t see them?” Kasumi asked, perhaps she said that because for her it was easy to find the uniforms because of all the time she had been living there.
Whereas our Crystal had only been there for a day, therefgore it was a little hard for her to learn the locaton of things “I just didn’t know, sorry..Kasuni” the girl said “Would you mind? I have to get changed”she added.
Kasumi nodded and walked out of the room, but just before leaving the room she tunred to Crsytal and sai “See you at school” and with a smile on her face left the room..
Crystal was surprised at the girl’s attitude, how come someone could be that nice? She didn’t know her…but she was helped by her..why? all those things were on Crystal’s head and she just couldn’t find the correct answer so she just proceeded to change her clothes.
The uniform was something really beautiful, a nice green skirt, which suited her pale skin, the with shirt and that green coat which loked like those the kids from rich familes wore, it all suited her beautifully. Crystal stared at the mirror and saw her beautifullness, the one she was unconcious of and then relized that it was almost time for the classes to start.
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The bell rang giving all the kids the sign of the start of a new day. Carmen’s voice could be heard by the speakers “All kids head to your classrooms, classes are about to start”
Our Crystal was in the middle of the garden, not knowing where to go just then she felt someone’s hand touching her shoulder “Crystal?” it was him, his voice.
The girl turned and saw her dear friend “Zafiro! You’re here!..um..god morning!” the little girl said smiling at him, feeling happy to see him after hours “You there?” she asked because she had seen that Zafiro hadn’t answered her greetings.
Well, what’s there to say? Zafiro was more busy staring at Crystal’s beautifullness for this reason he didn’t even listened to the girl’s voice “…you’re beautiful…” he thought.
Crystal was already feeling annoyed..that annoyed she just couidn’t resist to slap him “Wake up! It’s getting late and I don’t know where to go!” she shouted.
The boy came back to himself “Oh sorry Crystal…I was…just thinking hehe” he said as he was blushing already, he didn’t’ even realized that Crystal had slapped him “Hey we have to get going” he said.
The girl only crossed her arms “About time, till you aawoke” she said and glared at him “Where to?” she asked.
Zafiro pointed forwards “Over there, north wing Crystal” the boy replied, then he took crystal’s hand and started running down the hall until both of them arrived at the classroom.
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A voice could be heard “OK, so now today we’re going to study the story of our country Amarant”
Both kids stood by the other side of the door “You knock it!” Crystal said then pushed Zafiro and forced him to knock the door “Oh please!” trying to persuade him.
Zafiro didn’t have a chance “Alright I’ll do it” he said then walked up to the door and koncked it “Hello?”
The teacher opened the door “Who is it?”
It was a woman, like about 5’4 tall and had long curly black hair, she was dressing an elegant blue suit, the kids were impressed by her looks”Um..is this our classroom?” the boy asked.
The woman touched his hair “Yeah sweetie, welcome here, I’m Ania nice to meet you”
Zafiro put his head down 2My name is Zafiro and…”he turned to Crystal.
“I’m Crystal, pleased to meet you Miss Ania” the girl said and entered the classroom.
The boy just stood on the door and didn’t move, Ania stared at him “You’re not going to enter?” she asked.
Zafiro came back to himself “Yeah…I mean I’m going too”he was acting a little weird like if he was nervous for some reason, he proceeded to enter the classroom and waited for Ania to tell him where to sit.
Ania started looking for a desk for the kids until she found two sits “Ok Crystal, you’re going to sit behind Kasumi, forth line-third chair sorry to put you t here, it’s really near the window hope you don’t catch a cold” the woman sweetly said.
Crystal looked at her and nodded, she walked towards her desk and sat down, in front of her was her classmate Kasumi, the one that was happy of having her new classmate cose to her “Good morning again Crystal” the girl said, Crystal smiled at Kasumi.
Ania then told Zafiro where to go “Well, here…second line-forth chair, it’s alright is it not?” the woman asked.
The boy smiled at her “Yeah…it’s alright”
The teacher smiled at him back and continued talking “Right behing Leandro now go sit it’s really late and I need to start teaching you lots of things”
“yes, Miss Ania”all the kids said and the classes started.
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CHAPTER 6
THE FIRST DAY
THE FIRST DAY
Morning arrived at Versat and the sun shone like it has never done before, the sound of the birds could be heard from outside, it was a really peaceful day.
At the west wing all the girls were getting dressed and ready to go to their classrooms, the sound of their voices made Crystal awake.
She looked around her room and got out of her bed, she seemed to be surprised by the noise the other girls were making, anyway she remembered that she had to go to her classes and started to search for her uniform “Where could this be?..where..agh!” she just got resigned and decided to go to school just with her normal clothes, just when she was about to get out of the room someone opened the door.
“Good morning, may I come in?” it was a girl of about 6 years old, she had long brwon hir and blue eyes, “you’re the new one,right?”the girl sweetly asked.
Crystal stared at her and answered her question “Yes…I’m new here..nice to met you..um?”
The other girl sat on Crystal’s bed “Kasumi is the name and yours is?” she inquired.
“Crystal…” she responded and continued searching for her uniform, she kept looking everywhere until she finally realized she needed some help “Excuse me, but where are the uniforms?” she asked.
The other girl stood up and opened the closet “Here they are, how come you didn’t see them?” Kasumi asked, perhaps she said that because for her it was easy to find the uniforms because of all the time she had been living there.
Whereas our Crystal had only been there for a day, therefgore it was a little hard for her to learn the locaton of things “I just didn’t know, sorry..Kasuni” the girl said “Would you mind? I have to get changed”she added.
Kasumi nodded and walked out of the room, but just before leaving the room she tunred to Crsytal and sai “See you at school” and with a smile on her face left the room..
Crystal was surprised at the girl’s attitude, how come someone could be that nice? She didn’t know her…but she was helped by her..why? all those things were on Crystal’s head and she just couldn’t find the correct answer so she just proceeded to change her clothes.
The uniform was something really beautiful, a nice green skirt, which suited her pale skin, the with shirt and that green coat which loked like those the kids from rich familes wore, it all suited her beautifully. Crystal stared at the mirror and saw her beautifullness, the one she was unconcious of and then relized that it was almost time for the classes to start.
♥-----------------------------------------------------♥-----------------------------------------------------♥
The bell rang giving all the kids the sign of the start of a new day. Carmen’s voice could be heard by the speakers “All kids head to your classrooms, classes are about to start”
Our Crystal was in the middle of the garden, not knowing where to go just then she felt someone’s hand touching her shoulder “Crystal?” it was him, his voice.
The girl turned and saw her dear friend “Zafiro! You’re here!..um..god morning!” the little girl said smiling at him, feeling happy to see him after hours “You there?” she asked because she had seen that Zafiro hadn’t answered her greetings.
Well, what’s there to say? Zafiro was more busy staring at Crystal’s beautifullness for this reason he didn’t even listened to the girl’s voice “…you’re beautiful…” he thought.
Crystal was already feeling annoyed..that annoyed she just couidn’t resist to slap him “Wake up! It’s getting late and I don’t know where to go!” she shouted.
The boy came back to himself “Oh sorry Crystal…I was…just thinking hehe” he said as he was blushing already, he didn’t’ even realized that Crystal had slapped him “Hey we have to get going” he said.
The girl only crossed her arms “About time, till you aawoke” she said and glared at him “Where to?” she asked.
Zafiro pointed forwards “Over there, north wing Crystal” the boy replied, then he took crystal’s hand and started running down the hall until both of them arrived at the classroom.
♥-----------------------------------------------------♥-----------------------------------------------------♥
A voice could be heard “OK, so now today we’re going to study the story of our country Amarant”
Both kids stood by the other side of the door “You knock it!” Crystal said then pushed Zafiro and forced him to knock the door “Oh please!” trying to persuade him.
Zafiro didn’t have a chance “Alright I’ll do it” he said then walked up to the door and koncked it “Hello?”
The teacher opened the door “Who is it?”
It was a woman, like about 5’4 tall and had long curly black hair, she was dressing an elegant blue suit, the kids were impressed by her looks”Um..is this our classroom?” the boy asked.
The woman touched his hair “Yeah sweetie, welcome here, I’m Ania nice to meet you”
Zafiro put his head down 2My name is Zafiro and…”he turned to Crystal.
“I’m Crystal, pleased to meet you Miss Ania” the girl said and entered the classroom.
The boy just stood on the door and didn’t move, Ania stared at him “You’re not going to enter?” she asked.
Zafiro came back to himself “Yeah…I mean I’m going too”he was acting a little weird like if he was nervous for some reason, he proceeded to enter the classroom and waited for Ania to tell him where to sit.
Ania started looking for a desk for the kids until she found two sits “Ok Crystal, you’re going to sit behind Kasumi, forth line-third chair sorry to put you t here, it’s really near the window hope you don’t catch a cold” the woman sweetly said.
Crystal looked at her and nodded, she walked towards her desk and sat down, in front of her was her classmate Kasumi, the one that was happy of having her new classmate cose to her “Good morning again Crystal” the girl said, Crystal smiled at Kasumi.
Ania then told Zafiro where to go “Well, here…second line-forth chair, it’s alright is it not?” the woman asked.
The boy smiled at her “Yeah…it’s alright”
The teacher smiled at him back and continued talking “Right behing Leandro now go sit it’s really late and I need to start teaching you lots of things”
“yes, Miss Ania”all the kids said and the classes started.
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I agree....it was worth the wait and you did put a lot of effort in to this
looks good so far for the kids lets just see how long that lasts
looks good so far for the kids lets just see how long that lasts
Great chapter....mistakes were common throught the chapter but, nothing too big.
There were some typo's, but other than that was it very good.
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