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cloudwolf124

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My heart is pounding
The darkness surrounding

Grabbing my throat
Choking my hope

I have lost vision
The hatred has risen

Damn this life
its filled with strife

I waited for you to return
Only to be pushed to the curb

When i begin thinking of you
i lose all feeling and start to turn blue

I become Breathless
As i wait restless

My heart is pounding
As the gun is sounding

I am learning
With my breath returning

Killing you was with the risk
either way its hit or miss
 

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Thanx for the comments...I actually forgot i wrote this poem...No its not about suicide...I wrote this after my girlfriend broke up with me and it's like a way of taking revenge on that...I guess u can get the idea of suicide from this...
 

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this sounds like your killing your ex- girlfriend, and its not a good picture. while the poem is a good one and has good flow, i do think the meaning is not one to be publicly displayed.
 
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