Hey, I read your story, Helix. It is pretty decent. You have some potential! If you would like to have your work more reconized, as my site grows, I would like to invite you to join my writing community. Right now it is only five strong but I believe you would fit in nicely there. Your work would definately be read and critiqued. If youre interested heres the link
www.shortstoriescollection.webs.com
www.shortstoriescollection.webs.com