So far i have written three background poems that will help with the Book I will begin working on soon. Please if anyone is interested in learning more please let me know...or something.
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It needs... you know... structure.
You also need to work on your writing and rhetoric. The quality of writing that I see here isn't very good; writing a lengthy bit of text is sure to help you improve, though, and therefore I wish you luck in bettering yourself. Be mindful of poor literary devices such as "the night sky personified their fears" which makes no sense. The night sky is not a person and so it can't personify something. While I understand what you meant to write, you didn't write it properly and so the meaning is completely skewed. Just be careful with your choice of words.
The concept is great. This would make an awesome initial setting. The conflict is good but needs clarification. You need to make it clear whether this is man vs. man, man vs. god, or man vs. society because it could be any one of these. By this I mean, "who exactly is the antagonist?" Just throw in a climax and resolution and you're good to go. It's a good plot; just incomplete. Also, not to be a prick, but all this doubleposting is just begging for an infraction. Keep an eye out for the mods.
... You can have more than one conflict in a story. A conflict is a part of the plot; it's not the plot itself.The concept is great. This would make an awesome initial setting. The conflict is good but needs clarification. You need to make it clear whether this is man vs. man, man vs. god, or man vs. society because it could be any one of these. By this I mean, "who exactly is the antagonist?" Just throw in a climax and resolution and you're good to go. It's a good plot; just incomplete. Also, not to be a prick, but all this doubleposting is just begging for an infraction. Keep an eye out for the mods.
... You can have more than one conflict in a story. A conflict is a part of the plot; it's not the plot itself.
No, no, no. It doesn't have to be obvious. You can have more than one antagonist. Great novels always have more than one conflict and it's not always clear which is the predominant one. Take The Great Gatsby, for example: there is a plethora of conflicts present and it's a combination of all of them that make it an interesting story. One straight-forward conflict is boring. Stop giving bad advice.I get what you're saying but the writer has to make it obvious. The conflict is a little too vague for my liking.
Not bad for 15 minutes total, though.